I'm not really going for metal slug style, I was just playing some metal slug when I thought of this idea. Soon I will making a guy portrait, but I wanted to receive some crit on this first. Thanks!

Not that it matters much, but she in fact has two right hands ;)

Thanks for the crit guys! I've got an update:

I still need to do the wrinkles in the shirt. I changed the arm placement to make her more relaxed. I want to try to keep the color count down to 16 but I'm not sure I can do that if I shade the gun.

Is her face less squished? I'm not very sure how to fix it. Also gave the shirt wrinkles a second attempt. Please C+C

A quick edit (made bg visible because that way it goes to MSPaint without problems):

Hey, Adcrusher, I thought I'd give my 2p.

First off, your body is great, and the best part (though the jacket on the right is much shorter than on the left).

If you're wondering about anatomy issues, it's all about comparative proportions.  The arms look too much like stick arms (luckily, an easy fix) especially the upper arm on the left, and even though Metal Slug girls have skinny arms, they're pretty long to balance it.  You'll need to make yours longer to match the great body you have so far (pretty easy, too, I think).  And, the hands are too small for the arms.  Also, the neck is too thick for the body (I assume you'll be using the body as the starting reference point since it's already 'done' imo).

Sorry about the wall of text - here's a summary:

1. arms are too thin (especially the one on the upper left)
2. arms are too short
3. hands are too small
4. neck is too thick
5. jacket on the right is too short

If it's not too much trouble, please try these points out and see if they help (if not just holler at me in your next post!).

Thanks,
JD

Just a little facial edit, as i say in a lot of my edits, it may just be a preference :).  **Shortened the neck also**

Wow, this has been through some improving!

Love your latest (and linx's face).

The legs might be too symmetrical, for both function and art.
One knee could be slightly bent, would look more 'poised'.
Considering the navel, the pelvis is slightly rotated to the left but this doesn't show in the legs. Would give it much more depth if you can pull it!
The thighs upper outline looks disconnected from the pants. Given the legs opening, the pants should look tighter on top of the thighs, slacker beneath.

Cool edits! thanks.   Update!

I took Ninja Crows suggestion with the legs, and I tried to make them look like they weren't unattached from the pants. I'm not sure how successful I was though. I also did some minor face changes.

Agree with Ninja about legs lengths. Hadn't noticed before, but now I can't unsee it!

The change you did on the right-side (ours) thigh isn't the best choice, it gives a weird curve to the leg. I think a better way would be to move the whole leg.

The bent knee looks ok, although I actually had a very small change in view, only a slight balance difference. But I'm no good at anatomy and people, what I might see is not clearly defined enough to be any use.

I also think the pants are in conflict with the pelvis / legs orientation somehow. Is it the crotch position, or the cloth folds that are wrong?
I'd suggest to temporarily remove the folds to try to understand it better. Or even remove the pants altogether and get the legs / pelvis ok.
The more I look at it, the more I'm convinced the main problem is there.


Edited by Manupix - 15 February 2010 at 6:10pm