Pixel Joint Forum: Requesting critique on my first pixel art

Message

   I've been creating digital art of various forms for the last year or so. I recently started experimenting with pixel art techniques for low res game sprites and textures. This is my first non game related pixel art and I would like to know if there is anything that I can improve. I am working from DawnBringer's 16 color palette. DawnBringer's 16 color palette.

This image is 64x64 native resized to 128x128 for forum presentation. 

Author	Message
42and19 Seaman Joined: 06 March 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 20	Topic: Requesting critique on my first pixel art Posted: 06 March 2012 at 10:40pm
	I've been creating digital art of various forms for the last year or so. I recently started experimenting with pixel art techniques for low res game sprites and textures. This is my first non game related pixel art and I would like to know if there is anything that I can improve. I am working from DawnBringer's 16 color palette. DawnBringer's 16 color palette. This image is 64x64 native resized to 128x128 for forum presentation.
	IP Logged

echocharliepapa Seaman Joined: 06 March 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 27	Posted: 07 March 2012 at 12:52am
	the eyeball looks really good, as does the liquid around it. i might add a separate drop or two or make the pool branch out a bit more in one spot, but i think that's more a personal taste thing than a technical issue. i haven't worked with a pre-set limited palette before, but have you considered other options for the background? the colors blend fairly abstractly. are you trying to represent something specific with the gradients, a wall or a curb maybe?
	IP Logged

Theoden Rear Admiral Joined: 16 December 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 115	Posted: 07 March 2012 at 2:32am
	Very nice eyeball and liquid as "Echocharliepapa" stated
	IP Logged

Lahhe Seaman Joined: 07 March 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 1	Posted: 07 March 2012 at 5:29am
	I like the veins on the eyeball, and escpecially the nerve(?) behind it. I guess what I'd like to see is some kind of texture on that grey floor area. I haven't worked with pixel art in a little while, though, so I'm in no position to give you advice. :P currently working @: kirjanpito Lahti
	IP Logged

PixelSnader Commander Not a troll! Joined: 05 June 2014 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3194	Posted: 07 March 2012 at 8:12am
	Dawnbringers' is a great generic palette, but it doesn't work as well on a specific piece like this. I'd suggest you use a custom made one.
	▄▄█ ▄▄█ ▄█▄ ▄█▄
	IP Logged

42and19 Seaman Joined: 06 March 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 20	Posted: 07 March 2012 at 9:36am
	*Originally posted by echocharliepapa* the eyeball looks really good, as does the liquid around it. i might add a separate drop or two or make the pool branch out a bit more in one spot, but i think that's more a personal taste thing than a technical issue. i haven't worked with a pre-set limited palette before, but have you considered other options for the background? the colors blend fairly abstractly. are you trying to represent something specific with the gradients, a wall or a curb maybe? Thanks, adding more liquid will help fill the foreground a tad. The background...yea. I'm not really trying to represent anything (probably the reason why it turned out weird), it just looked flat and boring without anything there. I will revisit that.
	IP Logged

42and19 Seaman Joined: 06 March 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 20	Posted: 07 March 2012 at 3:40pm
	Second iteration of the eye. I added a few colors to the palette and changes a few things.
	IP Logged

Zeratanus Commander Joined: 03 December 2020 Online Status: Offline Posts: 576	Posted: 07 March 2012 at 4:58pm
	The bricks back there are tiny, so that eye looks massive. I also the droplets and the wall clash in perspective. The droplets i think need to be made shorter, so it looks like they're at more of an angle.
	IP Logged

42and19 Seaman Joined: 06 March 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 20	Posted: 07 March 2012 at 5:32pm
	*Originally posted by Zeratanus* The bricks back there are tiny, so that eye looks massive. I also the droplets and the wall clash in perspective. The droplets i think need to be made shorter, so it looks like they're at more of an angle. The idea that I am attempting to portray (but failing at) is that the eye is on a table. so the wall is several feet behind the eye. Not directly. I have several other background ideas that I am going to experiment with. I noticed the same thing about the droplets about 5 mins ago. :D
	IP Logged

42and19 Seaman Joined: 06 March 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 20	Posted: 07 March 2012 at 10:34pm
	Spent some more time on it today. Flattened out the bottom of the liquid drops to match the perspective more and I completely redid the background in order to match the idea that the eye was laying on the ground close to the wall.
	IP Logged

42and19 Seaman Joined: 06 March 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 20	Posted: 08 March 2012 at 7:53pm
	Thanks for all the feedback! I think I learned a lot. Here is, what I hope, is the final product. Based on the advice of some of my other contacts I removed the large crack in the upper left and replaced it with smaller ones coming from the edge of the brick. I also touched up the edges of the bricks a tad. I've submitted this to the gallery, hopefully it will be pass the bar. :) hope I am not violating the bump rule with this :(
	IP Logged

echocharliepapa Seaman Joined: 06 March 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 27	Posted: 10 March 2012 at 2:22pm
	looks really good like that, a lot more cohesive and polished than the first few images with the other backgrounds.
	IP Logged

WIP (Work In Progress)
Pixel Joint Forum : Pixel Art : WIP (Work In Progress)