Pixel Joint Forum: Never Give Up

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   So, I've decided to make another piece that would depict a story. Therefore, I've made this piece.

This is a rough sketch

Instead of making real cartoons I just made stick-figures. They both are in the mine. The yellow part is the treasure. 

The stick-figure at the bottom is about the reach the treasure, but then lost hope and gave up but the second figure at the top is still mining and will reach the treasure.

I need help with some textures to make the mine more lively and beautiful, so some help would really be appreciated.

Other than that, if you have anything to say you are welcome.

Edited by Aastikya - 02 May 2012 at 6:13am

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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Topic: Never Give Up Posted: 02 May 2012 at 5:54am
	So, I've decided to make another piece that would depict a story. Therefore, I've made this piece. This is a rough sketch Instead of making real cartoons I just made stick-figures. They both are in the mine. The yellow part is the treasure. The stick-figure at the bottom is about the reach the treasure, but then lost hope and gave up but the second figure at the top is still mining and will reach the treasure. I need help with some textures to make the mine more lively and beautiful, so some help would really be appreciated. Other than that, if you have anything to say you are welcome. Edited by Aastikya - 02 May 2012 at 6:13am
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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Posted: 02 May 2012 at 8:59am
	Thought this texture would be good. Added a light source in the inner side of mine, i.e. where the person is working. Also changed the palette a bit. The problem is the piece doesn't have any light source, so can you help me with shading? Also if you have any suggestions or critiques you are welcome!
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Zeratanus Commander Joined: 03 December 2020 Online Status: Offline Posts: 576	Posted: 02 May 2012 at 12:17pm
	A huge problem is that right now it reads as "Frame 1: digging", "Frame 2: giving up:" rather than two separate scenes. You either need to make the scenes not so identical or maybe just combine them into one. One mine tunnel with one person still going for it and the other giving up. your stick figures are oddly proportioned too. They have way too long of necks and it makes their torsos too short. Also, the top one is in a very dynamic action - digging through rock, and i'd imagine throwing his weight into the swing. Arch his back at the least - right now he looks rigid. Use a reference if you can. Yes, they can even help with stick figures As for the gold, look up some pictures of ore seams. they're obviously not being worked on much just yet i know, but their shape could even be mistaken for another (lit) tunnel as it stands Edited by Zeratanus - 02 May 2012 at 12:21pm
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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Posted: 02 May 2012 at 8:26pm
	Okay, thanks for your reply. I made two frames for a reason and even identical for the same. I wanted to show how a person is so close to his treasure but then gives up suddenly but the second person at the same place keeps on digging and will get find his treasure soon because he will not give up. About stick figures, yeah they are oddly proportioned, thanks for pointing them out. I'll try to have a good ref for it and then remake them ^_^. Thanks again for your comment. EDIT: I look at some of the references and came up with this posture. Edited by Aastikya - 02 May 2012 at 10:46pm
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lazyjoker Seaman Joined: 04 January 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 9	Posted: 04 May 2012 at 6:08pm
	Well, i'm not trying to be rude here, but i think you need to show that the idea/style/almost-everything is from here. But otherwise, its looking nice, still needs some refinement though. Always include your refs, otherwise someone (in this case me) will probably think your stealing. Edited by lazyjoker - 04 May 2012 at 6:09pm
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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Posted: 04 May 2012 at 8:23pm
	I am grateful to you that you brought this picture here, sir! I am not trying to steal or something, it's just that I couldn't find it anywhere. I been searching for this picture whole day on facebook but couldn't find. That's why the thing's are unclear in that picture. Thanks once again :)
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lazyjoker Seaman Joined: 04 January 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 9	Posted: 05 May 2012 at 1:32am
	That's good, i personally think you didn't steal but others can be more judgmental and serious:) EDIT: some cc, i think the torches would look cooler if there where a few pixel-embers. Edited by lazyjoker - 05 May 2012 at 1:33am
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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Posted: 05 May 2012 at 4:19am
	Sorry but I dont know what are pixel embers. Mind explaining it to me?
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lazyjoker Seaman Joined: 04 January 2012 Online Status: Offline Posts: 9	Posted: 05 May 2012 at 5:20am
	sorry, what i meant was a few random white/red pixels near the torches, in the air
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Trick17 Commander Joined: 07 April 2021 Online Status: Offline Posts: 120	Posted: 05 May 2012 at 7:09pm
	Hm, the story in you reference works and yours don't, because the characters look different, maybe give some unique detail to each of the stickmen or replace them with more individual characters.
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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Posted: 05 May 2012 at 8:56pm
	Okay I tried to make a potato looking man as a person who gave up and lost his treasure.
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