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Quote setogen Replybullet Topic: Bojutsu girl WIP
    Posted: 08 May 2018 at 8:54am
Hi everyone.
I begun painting pixel arts recently. And I knew that my paintings are'nt enough to upload to the gallery.
I want to improve my painting.I don't know what is wrong although I'm feeling something wrong about my painting.
Please tell me about problems of shading and anatomy.
Thanks!
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Quote dyluck Replybullet Posted: 08 May 2018 at 1:23pm
Actually the main issue, I think, may be the AA with the bo.
The hands need some improvement, and the blackish outline needs to go.
Have you read the tutorials this forum provides? They are very helpful.

I kind of like the style, by the way!
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Quote setogen Replybullet Posted: 08 May 2018 at 7:13pm
Thank you for your comments. I didn't know the tutorial. It's helphul for me. I'm learning by reading the tutorial now.
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Quote AshCrimson Replybullet Posted: 09 May 2018 at 12:08pm
Not good a big sprites, but wanted to try a very quick edit it to show what you could do:



Changes i made and would recommend:
  • Would get rid off the black trousers, which would allow for shading on the legs
  • Changing the values and hues of all of your colours, to make them more interesting and pop out
  • Biggest issue with the colours is that there isn't enough contrast between them, especially with the skin colours.
  • Made various changes to the anatomy

I'm not good at anatomy of big sprites, so please take my advice with a big pinch of salt, it's a good first start btw, and i'd really recommend you try drawing if you haven't already, if you want to get better at depicting people, even in pixel-form.

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Quote setogen Replybullet Posted: 10 May 2018 at 3:03am
I appreciate that you took your valuable time for me.
Thank you so much.
The shading tequniques are very helphul.
And I noticed importance of line of sights. My painting is weird.
I try to improve my painting.
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Quote setogen Replybullet Posted: 12 May 2018 at 8:06pm
I changed her legs and color. Is she better than before?
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Quote Hapiel Replybullet Posted: 13 May 2018 at 1:47am
Colors are definitely an improvement, especially on the legs! The shape of the new legs is much better, but I did like her old pose more! Also, where did her hips go?

I think her top needs some work. The line betwen her brests is weirdly diagonal which suggests HUGE boobs seen from the side, but judging by her shoulders and hips she seems to face pretty much front..
To get the shape and height of the band right, maybe look up some references of girls wearing sports bras?
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Quote setogen Replybullet Posted: 13 May 2018 at 1:41pm
Thank you so much.
Your advices are very helphul.
I didn't understand why she is weird although I feel weirdly her body.
I try to revision again.
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Quote setogen Replybullet Posted: 16 May 2018 at 11:44am
I revised her brests, left hand and hips.
Is it better than old one?
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Quote Hapiel Replybullet Posted: 16 May 2018 at 2:40pm
Hi Setogen
This is definitely going in the right direction!

I have a couple of notes and made an edit based on them:
Bra is much improved! Boobs on top of bra seem huge though.
Legs are super long, and I think the squatting position in the beginning made more sense.
Hips seem a bit disconnected from waist. Look up some references, photos and drawings of woman in this position facing this angle!
I'm not an anatomy expert and did this edit based on intuition so don't follow me, rather look up correct images and follow those!


Also I've adjusted the hands to make them look like they're actualy holding the stick rather than gliding over them, and I've changed the arm position and lowered the neck..

I hope this helps a bit!
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Quote setogen Replybullet Posted: 16 May 2018 at 9:52pm
I appreciate your advice with example!
Your advice leads me to better painting.
I was feeling weirdly right hand. But I don't know how to fix it. I'm sure that your revision is more natural.
And the shadow of bo is really helphul.
Thank you so much!
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