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Quote volcom Replybullet Topic: Me as a bouncer (wip)
    Posted: 22 December 2007 at 9:18am
i need all the crit i can get cuz i want this pixel to actually be accepted and a good one. Thanks for all you've given me so far...now for more
 
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Quote greenraven Replybullet Posted: 22 December 2007 at 10:37am
A brick wall would be a good background for a club bouncer. Maybe a glowing sign that says "Enter" or "Open" as well.
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Quote volcom Replybullet Posted: 22 December 2007 at 11:54am
so you think the guy is fine? I'll do the brick wall and probably add a sign. Thanks man.
please c&c with body if you think is needed
 
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i took off name on his shirt and added $ madaleon. I don't think theres enough room for a neon sign...anything else guys?


Edited by volcom - 22 December 2007 at 12:07pm
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Quote Larwick Replybullet Posted: 22 December 2007 at 12:09pm
Doesn't look like a bouncer to me. At least, not for a high class place atall... since you want to convey the fact he's a bouncer through a first glance i'd suggest going for the more generalised view of a bouncer. Bald or shaved head, large build, thick neck, and perhaps a black suit.

You need higher contrast in your colour ramps. His neck is tiny, and his body is ... square! You need to check out some reference pictures, study some anatomy, otherwise he'll look like his heads poking out of a red box. Don't bother with the club vent writing on the shirt, it doesn't work and text will usually ruin an image such as this one because of the tiny canvas size.

Good luck.
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Quote Platnium Replybullet Posted: 22 December 2007 at 12:19pm
The bricks or sooooo wrong. Change them to actually look like a wall.
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Quote Blueberry_pie Replybullet Posted: 22 December 2007 at 2:22pm
I don't think I've ever seen walls built like that in real life. You should do this:
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Rather than this:
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Quote volcom Replybullet Posted: 22 December 2007 at 2:49pm
ok, first im gona do what Larwich says then fix the brick. Thanks a ton guys, more c&c please
 
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i think i did most of what you told me. Does it look any better? I tried to un-square the shoulders. The brick might be more detail, i need more crit cuz i want this to be good.
 
-please crit and help me


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Quote Metaru Replybullet Posted: 23 December 2007 at 12:34am
no need to use a gradient in the cigarette volcom. also, anatomy is far from being accurate. i can make you an edit if you want some guidelines to use as a reference.
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Quote Platnium Replybullet Posted: 23 December 2007 at 4:14am
Crappest ever edit you could prob do but i changed some colors and then AA it.
 
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Quote Metaru Replybullet Posted: 23 December 2007 at 10:39am
plat, you image now has 141 colors....
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Quote volcom Replybullet Posted: 23 December 2007 at 5:19pm
Originally posted by Metaru

no need to use a gradient in the cigarette volcom. also, anatomy is far from being accurate. i can make you an edit if you want some guidelines to use as a reference.
 
this would be great . Sorry, it might take some time for me to really catch on to what you call "pixel art". I'm trying the best i can.
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