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A little picture i made for a project , it's 5 colors and it was some kind of experiment because it's the first time i work with greyscale .
If you have any crit or idea to improve please go on.

Detail version :
http://www.pixeljoint.com/pixelart/30404.htm#c163039

Edited by Poine - 11 March 2008 at 6:23am

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Poine Seaman Joined: 08 March 2008 Online Status: Offline Posts: 5	Topic: A special contract WIP Posted: 10 March 2008 at 4:40am
	A little picture i made for a project , it's 5 colors and it was some kind of experiment because it's the first time i work with greyscale . If you have any crit or idea to improve please go on. Detail version : http://www.pixeljoint.com/pixelart/30404.htm#c163039 Edited by Poine - 11 March 2008 at 6:23am
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Poine Seaman Joined: 08 March 2008 Online Status: Offline Posts: 5	Posted: 10 March 2008 at 9:37am
	Hum any suggestion out there ?
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Poine Seaman Joined: 08 March 2008 Online Status: Offline Posts: 5	Posted: 11 March 2008 at 6:15am
	A little update one the go : C&C are welcome
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M.E. Commander Joined: 26 February 2007 Online Status: Offline Posts: 430	Posted: 11 March 2008 at 1:54pm
	Hello Poine, Welcome to P.J. Please be a little patient when asking for comments. Also, it is a bit strange that you have a Work in Progress, and you filed it in your gallery as well... Usually you put something in the gallery that has gone through some WIP stages... About the C&C: One thing that comes to mind is References. Use a reference as a guidance. It is not recommended that you trace an image, but it can be helpfull as long as you state your references. It will help you much more if you look closely and try to immitate the reference. In case you don't find a reference, you can always take a (digital)picture of someone or yourself in this pose. I like the background! Good luck in finding a reference! Best regards from M.E.
	KunstStukken.nl M.E. Art
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Poine Seaman Joined: 08 March 2008 Online Status: Offline Posts: 5	Posted: 11 March 2008 at 2:23pm
	Well thanks for the advice , i'm used to references in my traditional drawings but this one was a kind of idea i had , a certain special style , but well it seems it doesn't work Anyway thanks for your comment .
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micr0softener Seaman Joined: 31 October 2007 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 29	Posted: 14 March 2008 at 6:02pm
	I think it's a basic anatomy problem with this one. I'm making a general assumption that it's a human/oid in a scary mask or with a scary face, holding a knife. Basically, the problem is in the shoulders, or possibly in the hand- the two don't quite fit together. The arm is way too short for those shoulders. What you've got is a slightly-bent-toward-the-viewer arm, when your character has an arm that's at least four times as long as that- and given that head size, and the fact that this character is definitely a little bit menacing, you should probably beef up that hand a bit as well. Here's a twenty-five second edit set. Your original, with the presumed joints marked in red My twenty-five second edit Joints in my edit Also, there's a bit of an issue with the knife's contrast. Namely, there isn't enough. I'd assume that the knife is the important bit- boost the shine! Make that knife glitter! Or make his face shine! Something. Anyway, I love this style. Good luck.
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Aleiav Commander Joined: 08 April 2016 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2380	Posted: 15 March 2008 at 8:35am
	The problem I see with this is that a lot of the shading seems pillowshading, not actual shading. I'm not excellent at lightsources, so hopefully someone with more expertise can come in here and give you an idea on how to approach this.
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Saboteur Commander Joined: 29 January 2018 Online Status: Offline Posts: 888	Posted: 15 March 2008 at 11:32am
	Both arms are behind him, as far as I can tell, and that's throwing the balance off. If HIS right arm was in front of his hips/torso, it'd make sense that his knife-wielding hand is behind him in the shadows. It would also make sense that his whole coat is swooshed to the knife wielding hand, too.
	"I was minding my own business and walking across a pebbled path, and a Duck started giving me the business."
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