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Quote Kakashi Sensei Replybullet Topic: Cartoony Tree
    Posted: 12 December 2010 at 12:49pm


A simple cartoony tree that i made. It feels a bit bland, but i am not sure what should be added. Any suggestiones?

Note: You can also critique my color palette outline etc if you want to.
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Quote ChrisButton Replybullet Posted: 12 December 2010 at 11:25pm

You're right on the bland part, but don't worry as it's an easy fix. I can tell your lighting is coming from the top. But the shading of the tree itself suggests that it's flat, like a face of a cube. Imagine the tree as a cone, being thinnest at the top, and getting thicker as you go down. Make the color wrap around the tree, instead of just going left to right, there should also be parts that jump out further than the other 'branches'. See the image below!

I literally did that in about 20 seconds. You feelin' me?
edit: zomg sorry I forgot to crop it!


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Quote Kakashi Sensei Replybullet Posted: 13 December 2010 at 9:02am
Is this better?


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Quote cure Replybullet Posted: 13 December 2010 at 9:41am
the shape of the tree is bizarre. inb4 cartoony excuse. the foliage should be much larger than the trunk, but here they're practically the same width. good luck finding a shady spot to read beneath this tree.
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Quote Kakashi Sensei Replybullet Posted: 13 December 2010 at 10:43am
True, the shape is a bitt off. Maybe this is better? Or do i need to make the trunk even smaller?


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Quote cure Replybullet Posted: 14 December 2010 at 12:25pm
even smaller. just google trees : P
the base of the trunk is still as wide as the canopy. I'd make the width of the base no larger than the width that the top of the trunk is now.
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Quote Kakashi Sensei Replybullet Posted: 15 December 2010 at 7:50am
Ok, how about this?


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Quote Zeratanus Replybullet Posted: 15 December 2010 at 8:40am
I don't mean this in an insulting way, but try looking at some trees first ;)

Edit: now on my photobucket! nuts to you sites with no hotlinking!


Things to note -
> branches and leaves spread out far from the trunk
> the leaves make more of a dome than a ball
> The trunk is small by comparison
> The trunk doesn't slope from thin to thick, it's only at the very bottom it really widens, and those are the beginnings of the roots


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Quote Kakashi Sensei Replybullet Posted: 15 December 2010 at 9:38am
Think i got the trunk correct now, but i cant seem to get the leaves right. Got any good references? Pixel Art wise.
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Quote cure Replybullet Posted: 15 December 2010 at 11:30am
the trunk flares out at the base. why? it shouldn't be a gentle slope all the way up, just a small curve indicating where the roots sweep away from the tree.
search the gallery for "tree", also I'm sure pixelation has plenty of helpful threads on tree-building.
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