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Quote jalonso Replybullet Posted: 12 June 2013 at 6:27am
Yes, the tree outline is much better like that. I think the coloring inside should have the same kind of jaggyness to it so it all reads as leaves.

...kill the birds :p
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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 12 June 2013 at 8:40am
I thought it looked like a fine avatar! Never the less, it will still retain a spot- here, in our hearts... forever... until millions of year later it will stil- alrighty back to work (got wayyy to carried away there).



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I think I fixed it somewhat. I might ditch the idea of glass completely and instead make metal bars. The plane is sort of a doodle so that'll probably get erased too.
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Quote kimistry Replybullet Posted: 12 June 2013 at 12:14pm
hmmm.... the birds are too copy-pasted add variety to the birds. But from what i've seen after 3 pages you've definately improved! It's getting there but I feel that it's not done yet

Edited by kimistry - 12 June 2013 at 1:15pm
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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 12 June 2013 at 1:02pm
Thanks! I'm gonna be erasing the birds though (as much as I'd like to keep them) ;P

Leaves... it's the leaves that will be the most important part though.

Edited by ADrawingMan - 12 June 2013 at 1:02pm
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Quote kimistry Replybullet Posted: 12 June 2013 at 1:19pm
Why aren't you keeping them? :o btw is it me or... the soil underneath is too realistic compared to the rest? Because i'd prefer the anime vibe @__@
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Quote onek Replybullet Posted: 12 June 2013 at 1:50pm
getting there!
colors, contrast and the overall feeling are much improved
keep it up! but get rid of those strange repeating birds (?) also maybe put the plane somewhat more off center and on an angle

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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 13 June 2013 at 5:52am
Lol, those aren't my birds. I just took them off of Jalonso's avatar xD. Yeah, I see what you mean but I think that when I add leaves to the tree it will go nicely with the rocks. I'm planning to do the leaves like this tree http://www.pixeljoint.com/pixelart/78663.htm I'm practicing how to do that style at the moment.

@Onek You were right about moving the island up a notch :L. But yeah, the plane doesn't really seem to fit the style and I don't really like how it fits into the picture. I may make it smaller and that may make it look better.
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Quote Mr.Fahrenheit Replybullet Posted: 13 June 2013 at 7:11am
To me, your dirt doesnt really convey any greater form to the dirt below. I'd try to draw the dirt again if I were you.
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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 13 June 2013 at 10:57am
Another small change.



This is just an idea but I was thinking that I could possibly animate the smoke rings, just to give the picture a sense of aliveness.

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Well, I was planning on them being more like rocks instead of dirt. I'm just curious but what are your thoughts on what could be improved on the dirts/rocks.

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Quote Mr.Fahrenheit Replybullet Posted: 13 June 2013 at 11:32am
Well, you know how some people when pixelling a tree, they spend too much time making every leaf look beautiful, but then when they finish it looks flat because they didnt pay attention to how the tree's foliage has a overall shape to it. You are doing that on your rocks. You need to think of the overall shape of the island before putting individual rocks in like you did. You did it correctly on your tree, were we can clearly see that it has a spherical shape to it. Right now your rocks just look like a pasted on texture on a flat 2d island. Also, the shingles on your tower, the ones facing the light could have a much brighter outline then they do right now.
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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 13 June 2013 at 11:43am
Ah, I think I see what you mean. Could this problem be derived from using an outline? In any case, I'll try making new rocks and post them so I we can compare.
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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 14 June 2013 at 8:00am
I still think they both look the same in terms of perspective. I also really don't see how they look copy and pasted. But here it is now.
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Quote Mr.Fahrenheit Replybullet Posted: 14 June 2013 at 1:51pm
It's getting better but dont be afraid to overlap your rocks, so they are not all individually outlined. Also try to make more planes on rocky area on the bottom to add some variation in the coloring.
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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 14 June 2013 at 5:32pm
Ah, good call. I never really thought about adding planes but I'll give it a try. I'll also try to include minimal leaves to make the scene prettier.
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Quote jalonso Replybullet Posted: 15 June 2013 at 8:17am
The tree leaf edges are very ugly on the right side. Clean that up so you don't see the line.
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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 20 June 2013 at 7:50am
I hope you people didn't think I'd given up on this :P. I've spent this time trying to get a feel for leaves which ties into my second project.

@Jal I made some adjustments to the right side but I think I'm going to alter the color on the outline of the right side of the leaves.



That smoke was made by fiddling around with the options so I think it counts as using tools. I'm going to be making the smoke pure pixel art so don't worry.

I'm still not 1000000% sure this is how I want to make the leaves but it is a pretty good start I think. Btw, that tree is for my second project.

Edited by ADrawingMan - 20 June 2013 at 7:51am
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Quote jalonso Replybullet Posted: 24 June 2013 at 6:03am
You keep at it. Don't rush yourself.
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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 26 June 2013 at 9:17am
Thank you, your support has been helping greatly. I've been taking a look at quite a few tutorials one of which that deals in color which I feel I am seriously lacking.
This ties into the making of my tree and my knowledge of pixel art as a whole so I think by learning about color will greatly affect the outcome of this piece and my future pieces.

http://finalbossblues.com/thinking-in-color/

http://www.hongkiat.com/blog/pixel-art-tutorials/
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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 05 September 2013 at 1:33pm
Well, I'm working on this again and now I can use my more newer and current knowledge that I've acquired by reading tutorials and such.


I've decided to take out the purple outlines and switched the light source a bit. I'm also debating about changing the rocks to look a bit more the Atska's rocks. The roof will also not stay the same.

Edited by ADrawingMan - 05 September 2013 at 1:33pm
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Quote Oriena Replybullet Posted: 05 September 2013 at 7:25pm
Haven't read everything, so I apologize if I miss something or if this has already been said... but I definitely like how you originally had the soil below the tree. The bricky rocks definitely don't look very nice to me. The edit you have on your latest post is lovely so far.

But otherwise you've definitely improved.

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Quote skittle Replybullet Posted: 07 September 2013 at 12:28pm
Hmm, well you've definitely given me something to think about. I'll pick through the rocks some more before I post back again. Thanks!
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