Feedback before submission
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Category: Pixel Art
Forum Name: WIP (Work In Progress)
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Printed Date: 11 September 2025 at 8:24pm
Topic: Feedback before submission
Posted By: Blackmambuh
Subject: Feedback before submission
Date Posted: 21 May 2018 at 11:49pm
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Hello,
I'd like to make a submission although I'd like to get approval from the WIP before I do so. Do you guys think my piece is appropriate for the gallery? 
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Posted By: Hapiel
Date Posted: 22 May 2018 at 12:47am
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Much better than your previous submissions! :D But there are still plenty of ways to improve this. Why the dark lines on the smoke? It looks strange on light backgrounds.
Details such as the cords on the jumper are not neccesary, it took a while for me to work out what they were. I suppose it's a guy putting his mouth over a huge bong? Maybe do add the detail of the thingy at the bottom to make it more obvious Shading is a bit inconsistent, it could be flipped horizontally on the hair for example. Also the top of the shoulders face the sky, those should be more lit than the edge of his arms I'd suppose. Good stuff, good luck, and I'm sure this will be gallery worthy! |
Posted By: Blackmambuh
Date Posted: 22 May 2018 at 11:03am
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Hey - Thanks for the kind words, Hap!
I put some effort into experimenting with shadows and lighting in this one. It took me some time to figure out how the shadows created by the creases and folds in his sweatshirt should look but I'm pretty satisfied with how they look and my color selection! The reasoning for my dark lines on the smoke is because I drew this over a black background.. which I now realize it looks silly over a lighter background 
I can see what you mean that the cord on his sweatshirt isn't needed. It doesn't read well. As for the lighting, I see what you mean, the sun is usually oriented above people and should be lighting up the top of his shoulders some more, although, I was kind of going for a side light source coming from the left which is why I've highlighted the side of his left arm and the top of his left shoulder and opted to leave the right side darker. Let me know if you think there's a better way I can represent a light source coming from the side! |
Posted By: Hapiel
Date Posted: 22 May 2018 at 2:53pm
sorry for the short response here, but a suggestion for light on the left: |
Posted By: Blackmambuh
Date Posted: 22 May 2018 at 3:41pm
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Don't worry, your short response packs a big punch lol.
It makes sense that the torso would be darker/shadier because he is, of course, hunching over a little bit to hit the bong. Therefor that area probably wouldn't see much direct lighting. I like how you handled the lighting on his hair and pants, much clearer that the light source is coming from the left... makes my attempt look a little random and splotchy. Hah! Thanks again. |