Greenie Camel- WIP
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Topic: Greenie Camel- WIP
Posted By: l3m0n5
Subject: Greenie Camel- WIP
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 7:09pm
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Totally fell in love with the green ramp i made for the WIP Stages challange and decided to make something else using it. :D
Im going for making my own style of little animals that are side facing kinda like this....
 [EDIT] ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
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Posted By: greenraven
Date Posted: 21 February 2008 at 8:23am
I saw my nickname in the title, so I had to look.  Looks pretty good so far. Are you going to do the whole camel, or just the head? -------------  "pwnage comes with patience, practice and planning." ~ Jalonso 
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Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 21 February 2008 at 7:03pm
Yea about that; im way to lazy to make such a venture so im just doing the head...worked a bit on defining the volumes a bit more with less of that mid tone green in the space...basically trying to use more of my shade greens more ;D ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: Hatch
Date Posted: 21 February 2008 at 7:16pm
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Hot damn you're getting good at this pixel art business. Only crit at the moment is that his eyes don't match the perspective of his head. They're more or less facing forward whereas the head is almost in profile. I think some foreshortening of the far eye is in order, along with moving both of them east a bit. ------------- |
Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 22 February 2008 at 8:27pm
Your absolutelty right of course; and so i tried to make it more perspectively realistic: ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: Hatch
Date Posted: 22 February 2008 at 10:04pm
Better, but I don't think you're quite there yet. Perspective's still off. Quick edit:
Addressed the perspective problem with the eyes, as well as a similar problem with the lip cleft, and miscellaneous shading issues (rim speculars again  ).
A few things specifically to note: In a couple of spots, like the top of the bridge of the nose (where it starts to meet the eyes), and the bulb of the nose, it seemed like you were just sort of phoning in because you didn't really know how to shade it. I could be entirely wrong, if so, tell me to jump in a lake, but in cases like that it would really be of benefit to consult references rather than just guessing. Rant over. Also, with this sort of perspective, the nose would logically obscure the far eye just a little. It's important for defining clear levels of depth. Just let me know if there's anything else in the edit that needs further clarification. ------------- |
Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 23 February 2008 at 8:42am
You never cease to amaze me with your precise edits Hatch. I tried insasnely hard not to make my fix a duplicate of your edit and then i realized the dithering was doing nothing for the piece and just filled it out a bit more and now i realize that my small buffering of the "cheek muscle?" is not working too well but if i dont have it; it'll seem to similar to your edit. Crasp...crasp crasp crasp...  P.S. Please help Me. I think i am addicted to rim speculars...  ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 24 February 2008 at 5:21pm
SHMUPDATEH!  ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: BlackDragon
Date Posted: 24 February 2008 at 5:52pm
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Hm, what is it?
It looks slightly twisted. Is this intentional?
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Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 24 February 2008 at 6:42pm
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A bit yes, and i have absolutely no idea what so ever on earth what the heck it is....now that i think of it i dont even think im gonna include it in this piece, its the camel im more worried about right now :D ;O ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: Miumau0
Date Posted: 26 February 2008 at 8:24am
| For a practise, ya should try to make the whole camel. And I really like the head. |
Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 26 February 2008 at 6:42pm
Totally decided to actually do the full camel after enough people suggesting it. Having trouble shading the first hump...
 ref--> http://files.turbosquid.com/Preview/Content_2007_06_08__02_13_56/camel00.jpgb5455122-2fb4-404c-91a2-05ffb940ab5cLarge.jpg - http://files.turbosquid.com/Preview/Content_2007_06_08__02_13_56/camel00.jpgb5455122-2fb4-404c-91a2-05ffb940ab5cLarge.jpg ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 26 February 2008 at 7:30pm
Definately glad i took the route of making a full camel body cuz now i feel im getting the hang of light sources and defining and creating depth a bit more...check it 
more defining and "dephting??" and stuff :P
 ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: Miumau0
Date Posted: 27 February 2008 at 12:01am
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Maybe that one leg should be lil bit darker. And maybe make it thin. Now it is kinda fat. |
Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 27 February 2008 at 2:18pm
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sorry, but do u mean the one in the back? the one thats the darkest shaded? im not entirely sure how to make it look less flat...meep ;o ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: BlackDragon
Date Posted: 27 February 2008 at 4:58pm
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First I'd like to say: My, how much you have improved. Great work!
Now for critique...
Hm, not sure I'm liking those back legs. The expression on his face and the position of his front legs makes him look "refined" or "sophisticated" if you get what I mean. The Back legs give the impression of a clumsy creature due to the wide stace and spindly legs.
The humps. I think the darkest color coming into the shade is causing the problem.
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Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 28 February 2008 at 6:41pm
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Your right and im trying to make ways of fixing it: 1]  2]  ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: BlackDragon
Date Posted: 28 February 2008 at 7:00pm
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I beleive his back left leg needs to be several pixels longer.
And another thing I noticed: You have extreme shading on the face, as in going from light-dark quickly or in a limited space. The opposite is true on his body, it seems he needs more contrast or bigger shaded areas. The face also has reflected light (the lighter area to the left of his face) and I think you should carry this theme to the body.
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Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 03 March 2008 at 7:34pm
ugly school...finally got around to making those updates
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Posted By: kwigbo
Date Posted: 04 March 2008 at 10:36am
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The front leg attaches to the body a little odd. In that there is no real shoulder in there. The hump is fine but the shading on the hump needs to be adjusted to show the shoulder. Here is a pic that might make it clearer.
I love the face though.  ------------- http://www.kwigbo.com"> 
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Posted By: jalonso
Date Posted: 04 March 2008 at 7:19pm
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Just letting you know I think this shows a lot of progress from you. pixel on :) ------------- |
Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 04 March 2008 at 7:59pm
thanx jal, been trying real hard on this one especially tried adding more muscle depth ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 16 March 2008 at 5:54pm
Sorry to Double Postify, but i made some more changes and i want to know whether my shading on the second hump (closer to the camels butt) is dont right and forsome reason i had the idea it should look more like THIS: I dunno, maybe i jumped out my window a little too many times but yeah. Or should i stick with my current direction and fix up the camels' left hind leg a bit more cuz i dont like it at the moment.  ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 01 May 2008 at 6:01pm
DONT DIE LITTLE GREEN CAMEL WIP! I'll Save YOU!! ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: Blad
Date Posted: 01 May 2008 at 8:19pm
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I think you should get rid of the little bit at the side of it's neck, it looks strange, not the one that looks like an adam's apple, the other bit next to it. |
Posted By: Vinnie
Date Posted: 02 May 2008 at 3:28am
 I circeled (if that is a word  ) the thing what Blad was talking about. It looks like pointing out instead of rounding. First I dont like the eyes ... BUT when I look better the eyes where perfect  I really like this 1 :) like all your crazy arts haha "Vinnie" ------------- new pixelart 
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Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 02 May 2008 at 5:47pm
BLAM! ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |
Posted By: Blad
Date Posted: 02 May 2008 at 7:23pm
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You mean the bit? yeah, that's the one. Looks a lot better without it, I still think the shininess on it looks a bit odd, and also the dots on it's face, but that's not very noticeable from afar, otherwise, it's looking good. |
Posted By: Kren
Date Posted: 03 May 2008 at 2:12pm
| Improve the neck, it gets soo thin, see the re ference pic the showed. |
Posted By: l3m0n5
Date Posted: 16 July 2008 at 6:50am
A little bit of things touched up on. Just to show that summer may have been a little TOO luring, but im back.  ------------- "Hate is my enemy, Life is short and Life is plenty, keep my eyes on my path cuz i know who sent me" |