Welcome to my little Circus.

The green haired clown looks weird because he doesn't appear to have a body, just two legs sticking out of his head. It's a combo of the body being too small, and the pink not contrasting with the skin color.

Redhaired clown looks OK though.

Thanks for the replies everyone!
Yes, I was thinking of making a background, I even did this time, but I am probably going to mess with the soil as soon as I get proper inspiration about it.

Snader, thanks, I descided to give it a big body as well.
Also I ditched the pink, I liked the color but it was very similar to the red too, and I can't bear having one color used for 1 object and nowhere else. Perhaps if I find another function for the pink I bring it back.

Frost Butt, do you have any ideas how to change it? Or even remake it?
I got a little stuck this time as well. the wheel is not working out and the more I work on it the more I start disliking it. However I would really like to have one or two of these typical wagons...



Edited by Hapiel - 10 July 2011 at 2:13am

I really like this and especially like the colors.

I have to agree green haired guy needs some adjustments on the body so it looks like he has a torso. red haired guy does it well.
The guy with the hat has a face that doesn't quite match the other 2 guys. Maybe its just the head size...dunno it needs tweaking.
The giraffe coming thru the tent is great and makes the whole piece quite unique...however, the neck is so thick it kinda kills it. If this 'world' is made of creatures with certain anatomical peculiarities then the giraffe needs to follow this rule too. Right now the giraffe is 'real' looking.
The caravan is also not of this 'world' maybe it wants a more curvy irregular shape.
The cloud, unless its gonna be grey/stormy right over the characters is just bad design.

Theres more to crit but not right now :)

I really like this and especially like the colors.


Edited by jalonso - 10 July 2011 at 6:27am

This is great- I'm really looking forward to the finished piece! I like the clowns. :)
Your pallete also works well with the cartooniness of the setting.

Out of personal preference I would have stuck the wagons coming out from behind the tent in the back, and made the front of tent like a carnival complete with bratty children and anything you want.

Thanks for the comments again!

I actually tried to get the suspenders to reach over the head, but it was very ugly ;). I hoped they are a little more obvious now..

I still do not know what to do with the wagon.. :(

I really like the lion cage, you added some whimsy with the curves so it works. Incorporating a similar theme to the top wagon would help it out, I think. The top wagon just seems so straight and plain, while the tent and lion cage are exaggerated and cartoony.

The characters are really cute! I think the green haired clown still needs some adjustments to his outfit, or maybe a new outfit all together. Is the floating guy a copy of the red haired clown? Maybe at least put his arms in different positions.

Can't wait to see this finished. :D

I noticed the lack of girls, girls are very very important for any circus. But I can never draw pretty girls with these huge faces and fat bodies... What to do now? :(



I am still suprised how much things have improved so far, also thanks to comments here!
Daniel

Edited by Qemist - 28 August 2011 at 5:22am

You gotta make things fit the world according to its own rule.
Whenever possible 'round and bubble' things. Big at centers and thinned at edges.
Add giants, or people on stilts or whatever to 'raise' the eye. Use props to add more action than you think you need. This is a 'mood' piece so you have to set it!
Consider adding one blue to set the depth (forgot to do this on my edit >.<)
Women = Boobs + puppies...duh!
Circus = Freaks.... more freakin' needed.
Elephant, pleeeeeez!!!




Edited by jalonso - 28 August 2011 at 1:18pm

Don't want to touch/edit more than I did and risk swaying you but if you like I'll make an inspiration edit for ya that illustrates better than words :)

Jal, you are my biggest influence on all my artwork, without a doubt. Not directly trough your own work, mostly trough your edits :). I would never want to have that changed, please inspire me even more ;)

The elephant was getting in anyway, but a stiltwalker and fire was new to me, I will probably include both. Although in quite a different shape. I have more ideas, ill save them for later.

Whatever you do, don't worry about swaying me. The little things like on the hatted director might be copied directly, but they will help me find these details quicker myself next time. For the bigger things, like inspiration for characters you don't need to worry either, I am most knowledgeble about the circus so I will find my way to put it in my own mould for sure!

Just for fun, 3 random pictures featuring myself:


And that is pretty much what I do full time :p.

EDIT:
Oh wow CELS, you touched the right spot on the lion, and the caravan is great too! Thanks a lot!!


Edited by Hapiel - 28 August 2011 at 3:00pm

where is the old fortuneteller? The stereotype is either a bearded magician with a tophat or a gypsy woman with a turban.

lol... enjoyable to see this thing develop

Haha!

I'm Norwegian, but maybe I've been influenced by american TV. At any rate, the circuses we have in Norway, which are typically from eastern Europe, are quite American in terms of content. It's very different from the Cirque Du Soileil.

(And different from the hilarious Cirque De Purée as seen in the Simpsons S12E08. Check it out if you haven't seen it.)

Confirmed (dutch too)

A flashsite sounds easy enough to do. Especially with animations (since you can use a frame to frame mode of animation).
Lots of pixelmovies or vids are made in Flash (go and look at Newgrounds.com).

Also, my experience with flash tells me that it's doable. Anything HTML5 or Javascript like.. I lack the knowledge in that departement. On the other hand, I'll be glad to help you with something that needs flash. (Since for animations you don't need actionscripting, just sprites and keyframes )

I am not so interested in this any more, so I will finish it soon. The inside of the tent will be completed, I will have to think of something for the background and the image outline, but that will be about it I guess.



I do like my elephant so far though :D


Edited by Hapiel - 02 October 2011 at 10:20am

And now it is found in the gallery!


Also on my blog


Edited by Hapiel - 18 October 2011 at 5:47am