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pixelblink
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 19 February 2023 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2865 |
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The story so far.... We find our hero, PJ, sitting at his computer designing new pixels. Intent on finishing his new masterpiece, he barely notices the power surge and sparks that come from his hard drive. PJ shakes his head. "This is PixPax, Land of the Pix. Do you think you can manage to stand up?" ----------- I'm open to suggestions and rewrites of this story. |
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jalonso
Admiral ![]() ![]() Joined: 29 November 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 13537 |
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...our hero, PJ, sitting at his computer designing new pixels...
perhaps on the wall around him could be some posters one which has a fantasy girl ...he sees the face of a beautiful girl... this is the poster girls face but not the body ![]() It quietly explains why he decides to help her even if he himself in unaware of the connection. (easter egg) ..."My name is Simone."... aahh, the SIMulated ONE, already taken, there must be another clever name that relates better to pixelart. very bad examples: Sella (selout), Ditherinna (dither), Palletta (palette) , Nubina (n00b), Leetrella (1337)...c'mon everybody give it a try Edited by jalonso |
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jalonso
Admiral ![]() ![]() Joined: 29 November 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 13537 |
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I was thinking it does not have to be a damsel in distress at all. it
could be another nerd. Simililar to the PJ nerd except fatter with
pimples for example. Like Mario and Luigi are different yet similar.
This way at the end of the game in the endscene it is implied that the
user will be the next one to be sucked in to the monitor. Like an
endless loop of game nerds being sucked in. Gee, I hope that makes
sense.
ps. For damsel in distress I am starting to like my own idea of naming her Nubina. Feels like an inside joke. |
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iSTVAN
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 03 March 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 626 |
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I dig the story. I mean, its been done before a bazillion times, but thats the whole point- it relates well to video games, also combining a nice mix of pixel themes and familar PJ names. NICE. I can just imagine the pixel sparks and screen wobble at the beginning... |
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pixelblink
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 19 February 2023 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2865 |
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iSTVAN: My idea on the whole thing is that it should relate to pixel art but have to totally obvious to outsiders of this site. I think that Dr. Automation's name could also be changed to something not so obvious... any ideas? Jalonso: Simone (name up for changes) isn't a "damsel in distress"... PJ is in distress and he is trying to get back home. Everybody: If anyone has objections or changes they'd like to see made to this script, please let me know ASAP. I want to break it down into storyboards so we can start accepting submissions for those. More to come on storyboards in a day or two |
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iSTVAN
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 03 March 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 626 |
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No, I like that the Doctor's name is obvious...you could probably go even more obvious like Dr. Render, with a PhD in PSP. It would also be funny to make reference to the big villian 'not understanding' pixel art- because I know many people out there don't. Youre definately on the right track! Looking forward to seeing the story board suggestions. |
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Souly
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I liked te JPEG name. :'[
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kwigbo
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 18 February 2021 Online Status: Offline Posts: 346 |
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I think we need to figure out a reason for the minigames. What does he
gain from them and how does that help his quest. It might be easier to
think of mini game ideas if we figure that out too. I think thats an
essential part of the storyline thats missing yet. What does every
think agree disagree?
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Shark
Commander ![]() ![]() a.k.a. Feron Joined: 02 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2136 |
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wat about Dr. Jerome Peg
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Snark, we love yuu.
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Larwick
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 18 July 2024 Online Status: Offline Posts: 4015 |
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I'd be very pleased if the evil guy had some relation to JPEG images. Hahaha...hahaha...ha... But yeah, the story sounds pretty neat so far. I love the way you've portrayed Sedgemonkey. The bit with Simone and PixPax is reeeaally cheesy though, but i spose thats ok. Heheh, it'll be great. |
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rabidbaboy
Midshipman ![]() ![]() Joined: 25 July 2006 Location: Philippines Online Status: Offline Posts: 68 |
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How about we make a reference to vectoring?it being the opposite of bitmap?
nice story so far. |
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Aleiav
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 08 April 2016 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2380 |
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I know I'm coming in rather late (if this has already been taken care of, just shoot me) but... I wouldn't mind helping you write the story. I am a creative writing major after all. :P
I just need to know the characters (or ideas of the characters). And the general story line. So far, I like the idea of Simone, but I really think she should be a little more nerdy and less cheesy. She does seem like a damsel in distress because she doesn't actually do anything but freak out. Maybe if she helped PJ a bit more (possible 2 Player mode?)? I'd like her, if she isn't just a random chick, to be more involved in the story, like actually help PJ. A lot of the girl sidekicks I find in video games and other games guide the guys through the land and give them the "game tips" (e.g. press the triangle to jump!) and it doesn't make a lot of sense. They know all of this, but they can't go out and defeat the evil themselves? It's sort of sucky. I'd like her to be... maybe the brains behind the operation? There could be gadgets she makes! (not those kind of gadgets :P). Of course, it all depends on what you guys are doing graphic wise, just giving my opinion on the character. Just let me know. I'd be glad to write the story! And as I said. If someone's already done this or whatevr, just... ignore me :P Edited by Aleiav - 17 October 2006 at 12:10pm |
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pixelblink
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 19 February 2023 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2865 |
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I am certainly open to rewrites, revamps, and just plain restarts of the story if you have a good idea. Nothing is solid as of yet though I thought this was a good starting point. Feel free to have a go! Let your ideas flow freely
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Monkey 'o Doom
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994 |
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An idea that just came to me: Perhaps there could be a "pool" (the IRC channel) area in which you could read transcripts that tell how to play the game and offer hints from time to time?
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Aleiav
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 08 April 2016 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2380 |
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XD yeah. You could have Ens coming out of the pool like a monster to give you hints... like yoda. XD
I'll work on the story soon. |
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kwigbo
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 18 February 2021 Online Status: Offline Posts: 346 |
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Originally posted by Aleiav
I like the idea of Simone, but I really think she should be a little more nerdy and less cheesy. She does seem like a damsel in distress because she doesn't actually do anything but freak out. Maybe if she helped PJ a bit more (possible 2 Player mode?)? Ive been messing around with SmartFox Server Randomblink and I are workin on gettin a server set up. So a multiplayer option is definatly there. I'd like to know how many people would like to see a co-op mode built into the game. Cause i'm probably gonna work that ability into the engine anyway. |
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