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thebombsauce
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![]() Topic: Weapons help, Harpoon gunPosted: 23 February 2014 at 5:04am |
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So I tried to take what I learned here last time I posted about color and shading and made this harpoon gun, I would love to hear some good advice from people on composition
edit: not scaled up version ![]() Edited by thebombsauce - 23 February 2014 at 5:07am |
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Hapiel
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![]() Posted: 23 February 2014 at 6:04am |
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Composition is how different subjects work together on a larger canvas, or possibly how a single subject works together with the edges of a canvas.
However, on a single object such as this harpoon it is completely irrelevant. |
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thebombsauce
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![]() Posted: 23 February 2014 at 6:19am |
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I used the wrong word in this case then, I just need suggestions and criticism on the piece in general.
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Hapiel
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![]() Posted: 23 February 2014 at 6:33am |
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What is the gold glitter on the left side? whatever it is representing, I can not read it and that is a problem.
Personally I don't like black outlines on such small icons, you should consider if it is really necessary. Only add it if it needs it in order to be readable on a strange background later. As for the harpoon itself, while this should be the most important part of the gun (it is what distinguishes it from a normal gun), I can hardly see it! Forget realism, and make that harpoon a bit thicker |
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thebombsauce
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![]() Posted: 23 February 2014 at 7:43am |
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The gold glitter is meant to be the band thats pulled back to create the tension for the harpoon to launch, I agree that it comes across poorly but I couldn't figure out a better way to display it.
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Hapiel
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![]() Posted: 23 February 2014 at 8:18am |
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Unimportant detail at this size. Also: How is that supposed to work? It is not a crossbow or a slingshot right?
Look up some refs! googling harpoon gun resulted in nothing that looks like your sprite! Of course a harpoon gun is not a single handed gun, which is what yours looks like! In the few game images that it shows you'll see that all of them feature very visible harpoons! |
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thebombsauce
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![]() Posted: 23 February 2014 at 4:11pm |
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I used this
as a reference, notice the band running across the top except in mine I thought it'd be cooler to have most of it inside the gun with only a bit poking out. I agree through that it looks very short like a hand gun instead of a rifle and I should probably lengthen it.
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thebombsauce
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![]() Posted: 01 March 2014 at 11:39am |
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Alright I took what you said and completely redid it, I think it looks nicer and the firing mechanism is more clearly defined tell me what you think
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Hapiel
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![]() Posted: 01 March 2014 at 1:13pm |
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Yes, there is improvement!
I can now read the rubber band as you described. However I can not believe that a harpoon gun with this mechanism on top will ever be practical! I edited your gun a little bit. First I cleaned up the design. If you really need to have a black outline at this size it is going to be very hard to read (for example the harpoon's width is now 66% black and only 33% dark grey. That will not look like metal!) so I made the harpoon even thicker. From the reference you had, I liked how the gun was underneath the harpoon, so I changed the sprite to match that. Without putting the rubber band on top as you did the rubber band will be unreadable so I omitted it. It is not important enough. Lastly I removed the inner black outlines and added some color. ![]() I hope this helps! |
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