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Xisto
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Topic: Jack Pumpkin =P
Posted: 02 November 2006 at 9:38pm

well, i think this is finished, but i need Comments or critics before i try to post

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jalonso
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Posted: 02 November 2006 at 10:03pm

You have some things that could use some revisions.
1-Transparent BG, it serves no purpose here.
2- Finish getting rid of the black lines.
3-More shadow/countouring areas to indicate depth. ie.the coat behind the legs should not be the same shade as the front of the coat.
4- A single light inside the pumpkin that glows as one rather than the one in the mouth and the two in the eyes.
5-Add some bulk to the walls of the pumpkin at the openings. Pumpkins are not so thin.
6- Rework the shading on the grooves of the pumpkin to something more realistic. It has a bit of a gradient look even if its not.
7- the hands and feet don't look very good. Luckily its a fantasy creature. Make them out of tree branches if your anatomy skills aren't yet good.

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Xisto
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Posted: 02 November 2006 at 10:33pm

Originally posted by jalonso

You have some things that could use some revisions.
1-Transparent BG, it serves no purpose here.
2- Finish getting rid of the black lines.
3-More shadow/countouring areas to indicate depth. ie.the coat behind the legs should not be the same shade as the front of the coat.
4- A single light inside the pumpkin that glows as one rather than the one in the mouth and the two in the eyes.
5-Add some bulk to the walls of the pumpkin at the openings. Pumpkins are not so thin.
6- Rework the shading on the grooves of the pumpkin to something more realistic. It has a bit of a gradient look even if its not.
7- the hands and feet don't look very good. Luckily its a fantasy creature. Make them out of tree branches if your anatomy skills aren't yet good.

1- not now =P
2-Ok, i think the new version is better
3-Fixed =P
4-well, i made this on purpose, looks like a live creature
5-i'll try, i think this is gonna be hard
6-i think its better in this newest version
7-i need wood textures tutorial xD

here the new version

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jalonso
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Posted: 02 November 2006 at 11:14pm

I don't see much difference other than the tie. You don't have room for much wood textures, don't worry too much about that. Concentrate in the pumpkin and the draping and shadowing of the fabric.

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chess
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Posted: 03 November 2006 at 7:57am

shade it more especially the pumpkin!

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Xisto
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Posted: 03 November 2006 at 10:45am

thx for the comments, i try to fix the pumpkin, (fixing the light source)

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Xisto Midshipman Joined: 19 March 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 52	Topic: Jack Pumpkin =P Posted: 02 November 2006 at 9:38pm
	well, i think this is finished, but i need Comments or critics before i try to post
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jalonso Admiral Joined: 29 November 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 13537	Posted: 02 November 2006 at 10:03pm
	You have some things that could use some revisions. 1-Transparent BG, it serves no purpose here. 2- Finish getting rid of the black lines. 3-More shadow/countouring areas to indicate depth. ie.the coat behind the legs should not be the same shade as the front of the coat. 4- A single light inside the pumpkin that glows as one rather than the one in the mouth and the two in the eyes. 5-Add some bulk to the walls of the pumpkin at the openings. Pumpkins are not so thin. 6- Rework the shading on the grooves of the pumpkin to something more realistic. It has a bit of a gradient look even if its not. 7- the hands and feet don't look very good. Luckily its a fantasy creature. Make them out of tree branches if your anatomy skills aren't yet good.
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Xisto Midshipman Joined: 19 March 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 52	Posted: 02 November 2006 at 10:33pm
	*Originally posted by jalonso* You have some things that could use some revisions. 1-Transparent BG, it serves no purpose here. 2- Finish getting rid of the black lines. 3-More shadow/countouring areas to indicate depth. ie.the coat behind the legs should not be the same shade as the front of the coat. 4- A single light inside the pumpkin that glows as one rather than the one in the mouth and the two in the eyes. 5-Add some bulk to the walls of the pumpkin at the openings. Pumpkins are not so thin. 6- Rework the shading on the grooves of the pumpkin to something more realistic. It has a bit of a gradient look even if its not. 7- the hands and feet don't look very good. Luckily its a fantasy creature. Make them out of tree branches if your anatomy skills aren't yet good. 1- not now =P 2-Ok, i think the new version is better 3-Fixed =P 4-well, i made this on purpose, looks like a live creature 5-i'll try, i think this is gonna be hard 6-i think its better in this newest version 7-i need wood textures tutorial xD here the new version
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jalonso Admiral Joined: 29 November 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 13537	Posted: 02 November 2006 at 11:14pm
	I don't see much difference other than the tie. You don't have room for much wood textures, don't worry too much about that. Concentrate in the pumpkin and the draping and shadowing of the fabric.
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chess Commander Joined: 11 October 2006 Location: Germany Online Status: Offline Posts: 249	Posted: 03 November 2006 at 7:57am
	shade it more especially the pumpkin!
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Xisto Midshipman Joined: 19 March 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 52	Posted: 03 November 2006 at 10:45am
	thx for the comments, i try to fix the pumpkin, (fixing the light source)
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