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Bisque
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Topic: Gift Box Rainbow
Posted: 19 November 2006 at 11:02am

Blegh I'm becomming rusty on certain things haha! I dont ask for critique very often, but I think this needs improvement, so..here we go ^^;

the tape! the tape looks wrong to me, haha. Suggestions?
Also, the green palette is..off. I've tried fixing it, but have not had any luck as of yet..
And ofcourse, anything else you think I could do better on, let me know xD

Poor Alice is dead. They cut off her head. But we'll be okay, didn't need her either way.

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brianna
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Posted: 19 November 2006 at 11:13am

The tape is neat. Just a little small and *maybe* too straight. Your other pallettes get cooler in the shadows and warmer in the highlights, so yellowing the highlights of the green one and heading a tad toward blue on the shadows should make the green pallette work better.

Composition wise the seems bring our eyes to the tape, so I think if the boxes were shorter so that area were closer to the bows/tags our eyes would pull back up to them -- where all the good stuff is. Plus that would fix another issue I see: the top part of those triangles of giftwrap on each side is taller than the bottom part.

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Bisque
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Posted: 19 November 2006 at 6:14pm

Originally posted by brianna

The tape is neat. Just a little small and *maybe* too straight. Your other pallettes get cooler in the shadows and warmer in the highlights, so yellowing the highlights of the green one and heading a tad toward blue on the shadows should make the green pallette work better.

Composition wise the seems bring our eyes to the tape, so I think if the boxes were shorter so that area were closer to the bows/tags our eyes would pull back up to them -- where all the good stuff is. Plus that would fix another issue I see: the top part of those triangles of giftwrap on each side is taller than the bottom part.

I cant do anything -right now- as I am at work, but I'll try an edit when I get home :)

I'm not so sure about the palette suggestion though. I mean I understand what you are saying, it's just that the shadows are already going into a blue hue and the highlights are already yellow haha ^^;. So maybe I'm missunderstanding something.

Poor Alice is dead. They cut off her head. But we'll be okay, didn't need her either way.

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Pixel_Outlaw
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Posted: 19 November 2006 at 6:23pm

Quit Ripping your own colors!

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Bisque
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Posted: 19 November 2006 at 8:21pm

Originally posted by Pixel_Outlaw

Quit Ripping your own colors!

uhhhm what? *blink*

i didnt rip palettes from myself xD. I started with a single random colour and went from there.

Poor Alice is dead. They cut off her head. But we'll be okay, didn't need her either way.

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Anlina S.
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Posted: 19 November 2006 at 8:38pm

These are very cute.

There are a couple of things bugging me. The shading on the inside of the ribbon loops is so dark, it doesn't look like in inside view is part of the ribbon at all.

I really get no sense of scale for these boxes. The size of the ribbons makes me think they're fairly small packages, but the tape and tag are so tiny that the boxes must be huge for them to be proportional. The disparity is just hard to wrap my brain around.

I'm not sure what you dislike about your green palette. It looks quite alright to me.

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brianna
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Posted: 19 November 2006 at 9:33pm

Originally posted by Bisque

You're right. On my laptop it was a monochrome green -- so I assumed that was your issue (forgetting I was on my laptop). It looks fine now, so I don't know what's bugging you about it. Looks good to me.

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Bisque
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Posted: 19 November 2006 at 9:39pm

I dunno there is just something about the green that is bothering me and i cant figure it out, haha!

Anyways, here is an edit :)

Poor Alice is dead. They cut off her head. But we'll be okay, didn't need her either way.

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pixelblink
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Posted: 19 November 2006 at 9:54pm

I think it might help immensely if you had a different colour of ribbon on these. That might make the green one specifically not look so vibrant. I like your style as always. Makes anyone wanna give in to the cuteness.

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Posted: 20 November 2006 at 5:39am

The light green looks more saturated than that of the other colors. It may have the same saturation level in MS Paint, or whatever program you use, but visually, it looks too bright.

Could just be a property of green hues perhaps. Or yellow. I would say drop the saturation on the light green a touch and see if that helps.

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Pixel_Outlaw
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Posted: 20 November 2006 at 1:13pm

Well green is the most destinguishable color perhaps that has something to do with it....Yellow is the most visable with pigment colors. But the human eye can distinguish green the most. If not use some math to find the equivelants of the shades using the HSV modle.

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Monkey 'o Doom
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Posted: 20 November 2006 at 1:19pm

OR just use MSpaint and check the values of the colors that way.

RPG is numberwang.

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Bisque
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Posted: 22 November 2006 at 3:17pm

Originally posted by Pixel_Outlaw

Well green is the most destinguishable color perhaps that has something to do with it....Yellow is the most visable with pigment colors. But the human eye can distinguish green the most. If not use some math to find the equivelants of the shades using the HSV modle.

Math? You want me to do math? xD How about no thankyou hahaha.

Originally posted by Monkey 'o Doom

OR just use MSpaint and check the values of the colors that way.

MSP is the devil. To me anyways. Sorry I'll always stick with photoshop, haha.

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Anyways..I think I'm done this. Probably some other things I could do to it, but I've got other things to do.

finished piece will be in my gallery in a bit.

Poor Alice is dead. They cut off her head. But we'll be okay, didn't need her either way.

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Stitchy
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Posted: 22 November 2006 at 3:48pm

Hmm, I would lower the shade on the ribbons that hang on the front by one pixel. It wont look like the ribbons are part of/stuck freakishly close to the package. And as for the tape... I dunno. D:

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PixelSnader
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Posted: 22 November 2006 at 6:02pm

MSP FTW!

i lik em, especially the red one. got the nicest hueshiftiness

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Bisque Commander Joined: 11 April 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 149	Topic: Gift Box Rainbow Posted: 19 November 2006 at 11:02am
	Blegh I'm becomming rusty on certain things haha! I dont ask for critique very often, but I think this needs improvement, so..here we go ^^; the tape! the tape looks wrong to me, haha. Suggestions? Also, the green palette is..off. I've tried fixing it, but have not had any luck as of yet.. And ofcourse, anything else you think I could do better on, let me know xD
	Poor Alice is dead. They cut off her head. But we'll be okay, didn't need her either way.
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brianna Seaman Joined: 02 November 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 27	Posted: 19 November 2006 at 11:13am
	The tape is neat. Just a little small and maybe too straight. Your other pallettes get cooler in the shadows and warmer in the highlights, so yellowing the highlights of the green one and heading a tad toward blue on the shadows should make the green pallette work better. Composition wise the seems bring our eyes to the tape, so I think if the boxes were shorter so that area were closer to the bows/tags our eyes would pull back up to them -- where all the good stuff is. Plus that would fix another issue I see: the top part of those triangles of giftwrap on each side is taller than the bottom part.
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Bisque Commander Joined: 11 April 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 149	Posted: 19 November 2006 at 6:14pm
	*Originally posted by brianna* The tape is neat. Just a little small and maybe too straight. Your other pallettes get cooler in the shadows and warmer in the highlights, so yellowing the highlights of the green one and heading a tad toward blue on the shadows should make the green pallette work better. Composition wise the seems bring our eyes to the tape, so I think if the boxes were shorter so that area were closer to the bows/tags our eyes would pull back up to them -- where all the good stuff is. Plus that would fix another issue I see: the top part of those triangles of giftwrap on each side is taller than the bottom part. I cant do anything -right now- as I am at work, but I'll try an edit when I get home :) I'm not so sure about the palette suggestion though. I mean I understand what you are saying, it's just that the shadows are already going into a blue hue and the highlights are already yellow haha ^^;. So maybe I'm missunderstanding something.
	Poor Alice is dead. They cut off her head. But we'll be okay, didn't need her either way.
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Pixel_Outlaw Commander Joined: 01 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3829	Posted: 19 November 2006 at 6:23pm
	Quit Ripping your own colors!

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Bisque Commander Joined: 11 April 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 149	Posted: 19 November 2006 at 8:21pm
	*Originally posted by Pixel_Outlaw* Quit Ripping your own colors! uhhhm what? blink i didnt rip palettes from myself xD. I started with a single random colour and went from there.
	Poor Alice is dead. They cut off her head. But we'll be okay, didn't need her either way.
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Anlina S. Commander Joined: 30 June 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 139	Posted: 19 November 2006 at 8:38pm
	These are very cute. There are a couple of things bugging me. The shading on the inside of the ribbon loops is so dark, it doesn't look like in inside view is part of the ribbon at all. I really get no sense of scale for these boxes. The size of the ribbons makes me think they're fairly small packages, but the tape and tag are so tiny that the boxes must be huge for them to be proportional. The disparity is just hard to wrap my brain around. I'm not sure what you dislike about your green palette. It looks quite alright to me.
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brianna Seaman Joined: 02 November 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 27	Posted: 19 November 2006 at 9:33pm
	*Originally posted by Bisque* I'm not so sure about the palette suggestion though. I mean I understand what you are saying, it's just that the shadows are already going into a blue hue and the highlights are already yellow haha ^^;. So maybe I'm missunderstanding something. You're right. On my laptop it was a monochrome green -- so I assumed that was your issue (forgetting I was on my laptop). It looks fine now, so I don't know what's bugging you about it. Looks good to me.
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Bisque Commander Joined: 11 April 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 149	Posted: 19 November 2006 at 9:39pm
	I dunno there is just something about the green that is bothering me and i cant figure it out, haha! Anyways, here is an edit :)
	Poor Alice is dead. They cut off her head. But we'll be okay, didn't need her either way.
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pixelblink Commander Joined: 19 February 2023 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2865	Posted: 19 November 2006 at 9:54pm
	I think it might help immensely if you had a different colour of ribbon on these. That might make the green one specifically not look so vibrant. I like your style as always. Makes anyone wanna give in to the cuteness.
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Omegavolt Commander Joined: 03 March 2005 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 227	Posted: 20 November 2006 at 5:39am
	The light green looks more saturated than that of the other colors. It may have the same saturation level in MS Paint, or whatever program you use, but visually, it looks too bright. Could just be a property of green hues perhaps. Or yellow. I would say drop the saturation on the light green a touch and see if that helps.
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Pixel_Outlaw Commander Joined: 01 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3829	Posted: 20 November 2006 at 1:13pm
	Well green is the most destinguishable color perhaps that has something to do with it....Yellow is the most visable with pigment colors. But the human eye can distinguish green the most. If not use some math to find the equivelants of the shades using the HSV modle.

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Monkey 'o Doom Commander Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994	Posted: 20 November 2006 at 1:19pm
	OR just use MSpaint and check the values of the colors that way.
	RPG is numberwang.
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Bisque Commander Joined: 11 April 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 149	Posted: 22 November 2006 at 3:17pm
	*Originally posted by Pixel_Outlaw* Well green is the most destinguishable color perhaps that has something to do with it....Yellow is the most visable with pigment colors. But the human eye can distinguish green the most. If not use some math to find the equivelants of the shades using the HSV modle. Math? You want me to do math? xD How about no thankyou hahaha. *Originally posted by Monkey 'o Doom* OR just use MSpaint and check the values of the colors that way. MSP is the devil. To me anyways. Sorry I'll always stick with photoshop, haha. ----- Anyways..I think I'm done this. Probably some other things I could do to it, but I've got other things to do. finished piece will be in my gallery in a bit.
	Poor Alice is dead. They cut off her head. But we'll be okay, didn't need her either way.
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Stitchy Commander PJ Pioneer Joined: 09 June 2020 Online Status: Offline Posts: 405	Posted: 22 November 2006 at 3:48pm
	Hmm, I would lower the shade on the ribbons that hang on the front by one pixel. It wont look like the ribbons are part of/stuck freakishly close to the package. And as for the tape... I dunno. D:
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PixelSnader Commander Not a troll! Joined: 05 June 2014 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3194	Posted: 22 November 2006 at 6:02pm
	MSP FTW! i lik em, especially the red one. got the nicest hueshiftiness
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