oh wow that's perty

Really? That sucks. I figured photobucket was dependable but this'd be the second time that someone wasn't able to see something of mine. 

haha thats awesome dude, love how the fire is turning out.

a couple things i noticed:

- the texurte of the bat is good but the blue is a fairly large jump in hue.  Make it more of a purplish hue and itll look great.  Also desaturate it a bit.

Edited by Scruffs - 20 November 2006 at 7:56pm

Yay, image works now 
I see what you mean about yellows on the bat. It does need it badly however.
ps: Do show efinal even if its a hybrid piece. Looks great so far.

Looks fantastic, the yellow lighting on the bat helps alot. You may not need to go overboard with it but it definetely wanted some. Does the horn have to be so big, seems almost out of scale. The only thing that I would mention is that unless there is a reason for it. The flame that is the 'mane' changes direction on the tail. If nothing else the fireblast would blow it in the same direction as the fireball.

Updated the complete piece! This is more or less a bump which is more or less against the rules but...that's just how I roll. I can handle a warning if need be. ;)

then my goal is achieved. Giant blasts of fire in your face aren't sposed to be gentle on your eyes.

Just kidding! :p

But don't worry, the piece is toned down in the NPA version. I'll be sure to post that one too.

The hybrid version is there. You have to copy and paste the link from the top into your browser cuz I'm "retarded".

Wow it sure does! That's a great piece of art!

looks friggin ace.

one thing that brings it slightly down imo is the start of the firecloud. it could use way more contrast there.

but perhaps that's nitpicking on a piece like this

The hybrid certainly could have blended better. Since this was a commission and the client obviously approved, its all good.

no, but its a blueish white, which, combined with the overall yellow/orange hue of the flames causes it to be interpreted as a shadow, thus causing yout eye to see it as a darker shade

There are some things that have bothered me about this image the whole time and I just hoped you'd address it on your own since I didn't want to bother pointing it out.

The horse/dragon's cheek, neck, transition between the back and front end, and the point of origin of the fire spell.

First, the neck and transition between back and front end of the horse/dragon. They're very linear and stiff looking. There's no fluent movement, just straight lines. The underbelly of the horse is like linear and I can't comprehend how it'd form into the tail. Here's a silhouette of what I'm seeing the covered part as:

I think the underbelly should curve in a bit before it's overlapped by the spell, making it slightly convex rather than straight to make the unseen transition more believable.

To fix the neck, I think a smoother transition into the head rather than a sudden 45 degree angle would help it a lot.

The cheek has too dark of a shadow and makes me think of when people fill their mouth with air and their cheeks puff out. The shadow separating the cheek from the rest of the face should be lighter, shallower, I think. It's a noticeable problem throughout the piece, these unnecessarily deep shadows turn up on the horse's forelegs, the giant bat rider's ass, and on the origin of the fire spell being cast.

Which leads me to my last problem, the start of the fire spell is so dark and uniform that it doesn't even look like fire to me. The flames from the wand don't transition into the circular pieces, nor do they do so at the edges of the fire blasts on the sides of the spell very well either.

I think the way to fix the circular bits making the spell look too dark at the origin can be fixed by making a straight blast of flame coming from the wand and keeping the recoiling circular bits isolated at the bottom where the impact seems to be coming from. Something like:


It's complete now though, so I suppose it doesn't matter much.


Edited by Blick - 24 November 2006 at 11:11pm

I hope you don't mind I post this for you ?
http://www.arcadetown.com/battlemachyjadebandit/game.asp

=)

Thanks Fil!

I forgot all about this topic. I'm actually redoing this title screen in my spare time with more colors and the experience I've gained since I originally made it before I put this up at pixel joint....so it may be ages before it's up.

The game Fil posted is one of a series of I don't even know but there'll be more to come. It's pretty fun, albeit hard if you haven't the patience to figure it out. But when you only have 5 levels and want to keep people entertained for a while, the difficulty curve has to be pretty high.


Yeah, this is the wip of the redeux. Much much better...although I really have
only changed the kirin tail and wizard shading so far. The fire really bothers
me so that'll probably be next.


Edited by Doppleganger - 07 March 2007 at 7:58am

Wow, great job!

The wip of the reduxed should be more in motion I think... would look even better :D

Very nice work

the tail looks too square.

good job.