Edited by Kfuchoin - 29 May 2007 at 7:38am

I'll make an edit since I'm done with my PA

Edited by theguy - 29 May 2007 at 7:55am

oh I also forgot I made the eyes bigger

her elbow is what you vhanged but you didnt need to add colors you need to take away you have used 35/36 colors and thats alot for a peice this small

i was triying to make an edit, but then i realized two things: is intentional this weird anatomy? and does she really looks like a girl?

First off there is nothing beautiful about anorexia.

Secondly her face is to full for being anorexic.

Thirdly.. is that just cloth going over her left shoulder, or is her arm under it holding it there?



I went ahead and shrunk her face, neck, and dropped her eyes down a pixel.

Oh my god!!! Her face is melting!!! wait..... is that Michael Jackson?

Seriously though... her chin needs to be narrower than the rest of her head... and not square...

Is that a retarded monkey?  The nose should be less like... an "L"

Round up her face a little more so lit looks less jagged.

Also the black line under her left eye needs fixed.

Why does being annorexic make you have to wear rags? Looks like in the first post you were aiming for something more like a zombie..

If you're gunna show the inner beauty of an annorexic girl, i'd suggest making it less dark and dingey and make her look more like a normal person, wearing normal clothes. I personally think it's a little small to show what you want to convey, but hey.

Good luck.

ij ust need to a nose >.<

fooling around with the hair:

Your reference is turned to the side. Your piece of clothing shows no real form, it seriously looks like rags. Almost caveman style, it's pulled to the side. Unlike on the reference picture, where it hugs her chest, only showing the side of her torso. On your pic it seems like she's showing her boob because there's nothing to give the impression that she's standing to the side. Her head isn't angled, her neck isn't twisted, her arm and shoulders seem straight... etc.

Perhaps you should try again on a larger scale? Putting in details will be much easier.


Edited by Larwick - 29 May 2007 at 12:20pm

Didn't you see the edit I did earlier?

what are those things beneath her eyes? their HUGE! and change the rib color

you're pillow shading it, big time.  and the bags wouldnt be shaded exactly the same.  the angle of the eyes need to change.  eyes make a strait line across the face, you have them stepping.  also, that arm has WAY to much muscle to it for her to be that skinny

have a look at the creepy guy i did...  i used shading to give them the boney appearance.

someone mangled the face to make one eyeball lower than the other ( I know its for persepecitve but it's TOO low)

The placement of the eyes are the least of his worries, theguy.

I did a quick paintover which will hopefully show you how i think you should shape the body. At the moment yours makes her look bloated, the bones are showing far too much and her arm and neck are extrordinarily thin. Also you seem to have detatched her shoulder with dark shadow lines. Also, the bags under her eyes are too puffy looking.

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Well anyway, hope i'm helping! Keep it up.

Edited by Kfuchoin - 30 May 2007 at 11:18am

down with the PillowShading