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Christopher
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Quote Christopher Replybullet Topic: Wudafuxup
    Posted: 18 June 2007 at 5:30pm

Diff type of picture then ive ever done. Im open to fix any suggestions


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Quote leel Replybullet Posted: 18 June 2007 at 5:44pm
up the contrast on the hand.

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Quote Metaru Replybullet Posted: 18 June 2007 at 6:50pm
fix the view of that impossible cigarrete. also, i would say lower the contrast of the hand. and make smoke look more like 'smoke'.
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Quote Christopher Replybullet Posted: 18 June 2007 at 6:58pm

What do you mean "Fix the view of that impossible cigarette"

I guess i upped the contrast too much from leel.
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Quote Hatch Replybullet Posted: 18 June 2007 at 8:10pm
Originally posted by Christopher

What do you mean "Fix the view of that impossible cigarette"


I guess i upped the contrast too much from leel.


Starting at the bottom of the cigarette, we can see the ass end of the filter, suggesting that the the lit end is facing slightly away from us. Moving up, the transition line from filter to paper suggests the exact opposite perspective, that is the lit end is facing slightly towards us. The actual perspective of the lit end, though, appears to be more or less a straight-on side view (though it could be perceived as being somewhat in perspective to the filter-paper transition line)

I think that's what he means by impossible cigarette

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Quote Christopher Replybullet Posted: 20 June 2007 at 7:41pm

I tried to fix the perspective, and added the contrast onto it.

Anymore crits?
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Quote Aleiav Replybullet Posted: 21 June 2007 at 6:38am
Pick a light source and shade accordingly. Your piece has no light source. Or no obvious one.
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Quote MashPotato Replybullet Posted: 21 June 2007 at 6:46am
Depends on what you're going for... if you want the hand to look more elegant (to contrast with the skull cloud), I would make the fingers a bit thinner, especially the one in the background, which is slightly bulbous.

I suggest making the nails a more uniform shape, and about the same length ... I'm assuming that the fingers are in profile.  If, on the other hand (pun!) you intended for the fingers to be slightly turned from the viewer, it doesn't really make sense for the cig to be slightly turned toward the veiwer.

Good luck on this ^_^

EDIT: the smoke could look more smoky as well... best to look up some references for that ^_^


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Quote leel Replybullet Posted: 21 June 2007 at 7:00am
and pls get rid of the gray background, it's not adding to the piece at all, if anything it just makes the smoke look worse
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Quote Christopher Replybullet Posted: 21 June 2007 at 8:14am

I had the fingers AA'ed onto the background because i found them too distracting if not AA'ed. Here it is with a transparent background.

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Quote Aleiav Replybullet Posted: 21 June 2007 at 12:39pm
You need more contrast. Also the dithering on the nails doesn't really do anything for the piece.
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