Pixel Joint Forum: [WIP]First Pixel Ever!

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Topic: [WIP]First Pixel Ever!
Posted: 07 April 2011 at 11:02am

Yeah, you guys are the reason I started Pixel!

Please give me as much constructive criticism as you can!

That way I can (hopefully) get decent.

Thanks

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tanuki
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Posted: 07 April 2011 at 11:49am

The outline is very rough. Here's a close up of just the outline-

There's many places where the line changes thickness, is crooked, or has sharp corners. I made a quick partial edit of just the bottom right corner to smooth out the outline-

It's not perfect and I rushed it a bit, but you can see that the line is cleaner and smoother. You can read about the basics of pixel art and common things to avoid here- LINK

also, it seems like your file isn't indexed right. There should only be 6 colors (3 shades of red, 1 of green, black, transparent) but instead there's more like 14.

Edited by tanuki - 07 April 2011 at 11:49am

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cure
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Posted: 07 April 2011 at 12:24pm

apples usually aren't rounded on the bottom, there's an indentation. use references if you aren't. a darker red for shadows and a specular highlight would be good investment. The apple could possibly be smaller, as there are large blank fields right now and downsizing wouldn't mean a loss of information, but would make cleaning the outline easier.

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Posted: 07 April 2011 at 2:15pm

I see! Thanks for the help guys D:

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Kee
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Posted: 07 April 2011 at 9:33pm

Also where the stem goes in usually at the angle you are drawing it on there would be a slight indent. so you probably could get away with taking out the inside of the circle you have around it. if that doesnt look the best then try rounding just the back part so we have some sense of the indent

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ChrisButton
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Posted: 07 April 2011 at 11:20pm

It's great for a first try, as Cure said I'm certain you could definitely downsize your picture. The trick is to try and jam as much stuff into a small area as possible! :-) Draw smaller smaller

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jeremy
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Posted: 08 April 2011 at 12:02am

you might want to start a little smaller, and have some kind of neutral background there for context. If you haven't already, read this!

a couple of little pixel apples, don't feel the need to work this tiny though:

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Sword Seaman Joined: 07 April 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 5	Topic: [WIP]First Pixel Ever! Posted: 07 April 2011 at 11:02am
	Yeah, you guys are the reason I started Pixel! Please give me as much constructive criticism as you can! That way I can (hopefully) get decent. Thanks
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tanuki Commander Joined: 01 April 2014 Online Status: Offline Posts: 333	Posted: 07 April 2011 at 11:49am
	The outline is very rough. Here's a close up of just the outline- There's many places where the line changes thickness, is crooked, or has sharp corners. I made a quick partial edit of just the bottom right corner to smooth out the outline- It's not perfect and I rushed it a bit, but you can see that the line is cleaner and smoother. You can read about the basics of pixel art and common things to avoid here- LINK also, it seems like your file isn't indexed right. There should only be 6 colors (3 shades of red, 1 of green, black, transparent) but instead there's more like 14. Edited by tanuki - 07 April 2011 at 11:49am
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cure Commander Joined: 23 March 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2859	Posted: 07 April 2011 at 12:24pm
	apples usually aren't rounded on the bottom, there's an indentation. use references if you aren't. a darker red for shadows and a specular highlight would be good investment. The apple could possibly be smaller, as there are large blank fields right now and downsizing wouldn't mean a loss of information, but would make cleaning the outline easier.
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Sword Seaman Joined: 07 April 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 5	Posted: 07 April 2011 at 2:15pm
	I see! Thanks for the help guys D:
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Kee Commander Joined: 06 September 2007 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 127	Posted: 07 April 2011 at 9:33pm
	Also where the stem goes in usually at the angle you are drawing it on there would be a slight indent. so you probably could get away with taking out the inside of the circle you have around it. if that doesnt look the best then try rounding just the back part so we have some sense of the indent
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ChrisButton Commander Joined: 10 September 2010 Online Status: Offline Posts: 371	Posted: 07 April 2011 at 11:20pm
	It's great for a first try, as Cure said I'm certain you could definitely downsize your picture. The trick is to try and jam as much stuff into a small area as possible! :-) Draw smaller smaller
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jeremy Rear Admiral Joined: 08 April 2021 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 1694	Posted: 08 April 2011 at 12:02am
	you might want to start a little smaller, and have some kind of neutral background there for context. If you haven't already, read this! a couple of little pixel apples, don't feel the need to work this tiny though:
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