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Akira
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Topic: 800x600 beast of a wip UPDATE!
Posted: 09 December 2005 at 4:00pm

click to enlarge

...i'm not going smaller :P

need c&c on grass badly but crit everything if you wish (cept the lines, they are by another artist which the guy i'm doing this for wouldn't give me the contact info of :-\)

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Aleiav
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Posted: 10 December 2005 at 12:22am

I think what you've got so far, the little bit by his foot, is very good and you should continue it throughout, maybe using less bright colors as you get further away from the lightsource.

Excellent so far! I like the hair the most. I'm envious of your skills. :)

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Akira
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Posted: 14 December 2005 at 3:57pm

an update:

might need to click twice for those on 800x600.

Thanks Aleiav. I'll handle lighting after the sky i think.

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pixelblink
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Posted: 14 December 2005 at 3:59pm

very nice updates indeed... can't really comment farther than that at the moment until I see it closer to the end. Go go go!

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Shark
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Posted: 14 December 2005 at 11:27pm

oo i cant wait till you shade that dragon thing, i love dragons, yet
they are pretty hard to get right :D.
the tree is coming along nicely, however the grass seems a bit
repetitive.

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PixelSnader
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Posted: 15 December 2005 at 6:46am

i think the grass should be quite a bit longer, or is he standing on a freshly mown grass? because it looks as if he is standing on e cliss in the middle of nowhere

allso the tree and branches could squiggle a lot more, it all seems a bit mechanical right now, too stiff

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Akira
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Posted: 15 December 2005 at 3:56pm

Feel free to do an edit of the grass (the whole thing) and you'll realise why i don't want longer grass :P.

I know what you mean about the tree thing, i'm just following the lines so i can do it quick. might make an edit when i get further along.

Will post another update after I do some christmas gifts for people (11 + 1 for secret santa

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PixelSnader
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Posted: 15 December 2005 at 5:11pm

ooh.. you are soo gonna regret letting me do an edit =Pi'll work on it tomorrow after school, for now i feel (2:11 am) i need my sleepses =3

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Posted: 17 December 2005 at 4:57pm

wow I love huge pixel works! I hope you finish it it's such a huge task, you better finish it! Haha if you do maybe it will inspire me to finish mine.

The only thing I think you should change is his face should be looking up towards the dragon. Now it looks as if he is looking straight ahead to me. Move the eyes up and add some pixels to his chin... i think...

anyway i really like this keep it up cant wait to see more progress

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Akira
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Posted: 01 February 2006 at 6:02pm

Wee! here we go. nearly done!

C&C would be wicked fun

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alkaline
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Posted: 01 February 2006 at 6:11pm

All I can say is...woah.

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Monkey 'o Doom
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Posted: 01 February 2006 at 6:12pm

I can't even get that much out. :p

RPG is numberwang.

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PixelSnader
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Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:03pm

Originally posted by snader

ooh.. you are soo gonna regret letting me do an edit =Pi'll work on it tomorrow after school, for now i feel (2:11 am) i need my sleepses =3

i so f**king hate my memory

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Akira
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Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:15pm

hehehe feel free to edit now ;)

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Aleiav
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Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:17pm

I think the ocean should blend better with the sky. But other than that, I think it's good! :)

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alkaline
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Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:22pm

yeah, make the reflection more round. like how the sun is.

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Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:28pm

The lighting on the dragon contradicts everything. The blue lighting coming from the side, the fact that there are fairly strong highlights on its body at all doesn't seem right. If something is that close to overlapping a lightsource as strong as the sun, it usually gets very dark on the shadow side and light that peaks through the edges makes a bit of a halo effect in places.

Also, I imagine the wings skin to be a bit more transparent, like boat sails, not transparent enough to see any clear image through, but enough to see strong light through. In other words, I think the skin of the wings is too dark, or at least doesn't have enough light spots or even somewhat contrasting mid tones, so they also look flat in addition to looking too dark.

The outer edge of the dragon's shape also looks very jagged and blocky, you may want to smooth it out some.

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Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:43pm

I agree with what Blick said.

I'm impressed by the scale of this work. I like the texturing on the sky and water and trees. Although I think the darkest tone trees in the bottom right hand corner need to be darker. Also consider the sun's affect on these trees.

I don't likt the character design of the man. His hair looks very messily shaded and the fringe that extends from his head is inconsistently coloured. His right arm also looks somewhat deformed and lopsided. It's too short. Arms reach to just above where the knee starts. It also looks quite detatched from the rest of the body.

You've got the beginnings of a very atmospheric piece, but theres still a lot of work to be done.

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Akira Commander Joined: 03 March 2005 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 220	Topic: 800x600 beast of a wip UPDATE! Posted: 09 December 2005 at 4:00pm
	click to enlarge ...i'm not going smaller :P need c&c on grass badly but crit everything if you wish (cept the lines, they are by another artist which the guy i'm doing this for wouldn't give me the contact info of :-\) Edited by Akira
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Aleiav Commander Joined: 08 April 2016 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2380	Posted: 10 December 2005 at 12:22am
	I think what you've got so far, the little bit by his foot, is very good and you should continue it throughout, maybe using less bright colors as you get further away from the lightsource. Excellent so far! I like the hair the most. I'm envious of your skills. :)
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Akira Commander Joined: 03 March 2005 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 220	Posted: 14 December 2005 at 3:57pm
	an update: might need to click twice for those on 800x600. Thanks Aleiav. I'll handle lighting after the sky i think.
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pixelblink Commander Joined: 19 February 2023 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2865	Posted: 14 December 2005 at 3:59pm
	very nice updates indeed... can't really comment farther than that at the moment until I see it closer to the end. Go go go!
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Shark Commander a.k.a. Feron Joined: 02 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2136	Posted: 14 December 2005 at 11:27pm
	oo i cant wait till you shade that dragon thing, i love dragons, yet they are pretty hard to get right :D. the tree is coming along nicely, however the grass seems a bit repetitive.
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PixelSnader Commander Not a troll! Joined: 05 June 2014 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3194	Posted: 15 December 2005 at 6:46am
	i think the grass should be quite a bit longer, or is he standing on a freshly mown grass? because it looks as if he is standing on e cliss in the middle of nowhere allso the tree and branches could squiggle a lot more, it all seems a bit mechanical right now, too stiff
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Akira Commander Joined: 03 March 2005 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 220	Posted: 15 December 2005 at 3:56pm
	Feel free to do an edit of the grass (the whole thing) and you'll realise why i don't want longer grass :P. I know what you mean about the tree thing, i'm just following the lines so i can do it quick. might make an edit when i get further along. Will post another update after I do some christmas gifts for people (11 + 1 for secret santa ).
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PixelSnader Commander Not a troll! Joined: 05 June 2014 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3194	Posted: 15 December 2005 at 5:11pm
	ooh.. you are soo gonna regret letting me do an edit =Pi'll work on it tomorrow after school, for now i feel (2:11 am) i need my sleepses =3
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yuko511 Seaman Joined: 23 November 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 7	Posted: 17 December 2005 at 4:57pm
	wow I love huge pixel works! I hope you finish it it's such a huge task, you better finish it! Haha if you do maybe it will inspire me to finish mine. The only thing I think you should change is his face should be looking up towards the dragon. Now it looks as if he is looking straight ahead to me. Move the eyes up and add some pixels to his chin... i think... anyway i really like this keep it up cant wait to see more progress
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Akira Commander Joined: 03 March 2005 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 220	Posted: 01 February 2006 at 6:02pm
	Wee! here we go. nearly done! C&C would be wicked fun
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alkaline Commander Joined: 25 August 2020 Online Status: Offline Posts: 868	Posted: 01 February 2006 at 6:11pm
	All I can say is...woah.
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Monkey 'o Doom Commander Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994	Posted: 01 February 2006 at 6:12pm
	I can't even get that much out. :p
	RPG is numberwang.
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PixelSnader Commander Not a troll! Joined: 05 June 2014 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3194	Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:03pm
	*Originally posted by snader* ooh.. you are soo gonna regret letting me do an edit =Pi'll work on it tomorrow after school, for now i feel (2:11 am) i need my sleepses =3 i so f**king hate my memory
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Akira Commander Joined: 03 March 2005 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 220	Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:15pm
	hehehe feel free to edit now ;)
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Aleiav Commander Joined: 08 April 2016 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2380	Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:17pm
	I think the ocean should blend better with the sky. But other than that, I think it's good! :)
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alkaline Commander Joined: 25 August 2020 Online Status: Offline Posts: 868	Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:22pm
	yeah, make the reflection more round. like how the sun is.
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Blick Commander Joined: 21 June 2014 Online Status: Offline Posts: 389	Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:28pm
	The lighting on the dragon contradicts everything. The blue lighting coming from the side, the fact that there are fairly strong highlights on its body at all doesn't seem right. If something is that close to overlapping a lightsource as strong as the sun, it usually gets very dark on the shadow side and light that peaks through the edges makes a bit of a halo effect in places. Also, I imagine the wings skin to be a bit more transparent, like boat sails, not transparent enough to see any clear image through, but enough to see strong light through. In other words, I think the skin of the wings is too dark, or at least doesn't have enough light spots or even somewhat contrasting mid tones, so they also look flat in addition to looking too dark. The outer edge of the dragon's shape also looks very jagged and blocky, you may want to smooth it out some.

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iSTVAN Commander Joined: 03 March 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 626	Posted: 01 February 2006 at 7:43pm
	I agree with what Blick said. I'm impressed by the scale of this work. I like the texturing on the sky and water and trees. Although I think the darkest tone trees in the bottom right hand corner need to be darker. Also consider the sun's affect on these trees. I don't likt the character design of the man. His hair looks very messily shaded and the fringe that extends from his head is inconsistently coloured. His right arm also looks somewhat deformed and lopsided. It's too short. Arms reach to just above where the knee starts. It also looks quite detatched from the rest of the body. You've got the beginnings of a very atmospheric piece, but theres still a lot of work to be done.
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