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    Posted: 11 December 2005 at 4:32am

Hey what do u think? Its not finished yet. Any comments are welcome.
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Quote Shark Replybullet Posted: 11 December 2005 at 6:03am
the style seems all mixed up. some things have sellout and some
black outlines. you have some texture on the walls but none on the
counter or floor. try making the style of this piece more constant.
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Quote Tentenn Replybullet Posted: 11 December 2005 at 8:47am

Here is the update, much better I think/hope..

Changed things like: floor, waiter, tables, bricks, lights

btw, how should I draw the rays of the light?
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Quote Skaterboy J Replybullet Posted: 11 December 2005 at 11:03am
i like the floor texture, the waiter guy is pretty kool 2
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Quote Blick Replybullet Posted: 11 December 2005 at 11:40am
Floorboards end at some point. I really doubt you could find trees, besides maybe Redwood, that could produce boards long enough to cover an entire rooms width.

The waiter looks plain and flat. His arm has no shading and it should be longer. Fingertips should reach to about mid thigh. His head is offset awkwardly, I'd suggest moving it over to the left a pixel.

EDIT: Actually the waiter's entire upper body is a bit offset. His right side is a pixel thicker than his left the white collar is tilted. Straightening those out should help a bit.


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Quote Tentenn Replybullet Posted: 13 December 2005 at 10:38am

I really got to say I learn much from u guys thanks.

Here is the first compare with the updated (dec.13)

btw, maybe u were wondering what that 'I'-sign means. Well I made this restaurant first as a sketch of virtual shopping for my sister's presentation. So

 

[edit] forgot some black lines :)



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Quote randomblink Replybullet Posted: 14 December 2005 at 6:48am
Nice updating job man...
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Quote pixelblink Replybullet Posted: 14 December 2005 at 10:19am

Most of your lines don't match up. Walls aren't connecting where there not shown and that back room is either elevated or is totally off altogether. The picture on the left could use with some definition as well. I'd suggest giving ALL your objects either a black outline or at least a darker toned outline.

Here's my corrections... in green lines:

hope that helps
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