Just wanted to get some constructive criticism before I work on the legs.

Oh and the line at the bottom is the longest length that her legs will reach. So I guess that'd be the "ground"


Edited by Semont - 11 January 2013 at 9:42pm

Maybe the pose would make a bit more sense with an older version I've kept for pose reference. With the colouring and shading done, it should be easier to see that again.

I'm aware of that left shoulder where the angle of the top isn't steep enough. I've redrawn it a couple times already and I'm getting closer to making it look just right.

Haha, yeah I know that arm pose is a little awkward; I actually did the pose myself. It does feel uncomfortable but considering that it's a robot and it looks endearing, I thought why not. You're right about the arm width though, my arms are very skinny as well so when they're held straight, the elbow will be noticeably wider. I did consider it but the design of the arm allows me not to worry about it because the robotic forearm includes the elbow so the "flesh" part of the arm is actually from above the elbow.

So far I'm just having trouble designing the area between the chest down to the waist (it was originally supposed to be bare but I ended up deciding not to once I got this far). The leg designs are done so I guess I'll draw those first and then see how things go.

Can you specifically tell me which part? It's kind of hard to correct it without that kind of input..

And also, you kind of made it sound like you were generalizing 'japanese cartoon [influenced]' body shapes of females into one shape. I'm going for a more or less a lesser endowed appearance with a slim/small body with a small chest.

Edited by Semont - 20 November 2012 at 2:53pm

After getting caught up in school and whatnot, I decided to do a little more work on this again.

I really don't like how the leg is looking so that's why I'm posting here again. I don't think I have torsional angle right with the way it leg is.

I started working on it again so I thought I'd do an update. Not sure how I'll tackle the visor. It's supposed to be a tinted glass kind of thing but then it conflicts with the eyes =.=

Forgot to save before closing (or at least I thought I saved) and lost hours of work, at this point it's mostly AA but that can take a long time to do since I'm trying to make it look as good as I can. Changed the hair closer to orange (not sure how I kept gravitating to green..), I'm using a better shade for the skin rather than that ugly green.

And about the breasts, I'm going to redraw them because I'm not satisfied with the shape. I'm probably going go for a flat-chested look.

Here's an update. This has been very on and off and it's been hard to keep focused on it.

I'm going to be redrawing it's left hand and tilt it downward a little.

Eventually.


Edited by Semont - 13 April 2013 at 2:58pm

I'll start by saying this: the colours I picked are awful.

The red I had to somehow use and by pure chance I realized that when paired with contrasting dark colours, it created an illusion where it shifted the focus where it made some lines look finer or thinner than they actually were.

My next piece, I'll definitely find some way to improve my colours.

OMG, it really is a lady in a mech suit! Gad, I can't wait till you post this!

Hm it's more like a mech with a lady motif xD

As you can see from where the hips and shoulders are connected to the arms, it's a complete mechanical transition.

I've also got other designs in mind but I think there won't be moe versions of them anytime soon.

Can't wait to finish this one so I can start on the next.

I love the mech parts but the flesh seems unrealistic.

I can't quite put my finger on what it is.

Maybe a little anorexic with no muscle, but then again, that is traditional anime style.


Love the piece though.

Edited by Spot - 17 May 2013 at 6:04pm

Yeah the dithering could be reduced somewhat.

The flesh does need a rework although in context it's not real so it's really more like plastic fitted over metal at the arms and legs. I'll look into adding more shades for flesh as I said earlier.

@Crafty Thanks for the pointers, I'm not very good with shading and even more so with reflective surfaces so that edit is helpful. The metal isn't polished and it's more of a duller sheen so that the reflections won't be as severe however.

Oh and I think I'll leave the eyes as they are. They're behind a dull visor so the light reflected off them isn't very strong.

Thanks for the input Onek but at this point it's too late to completely change the angle of the drawing. I'm already tired of looking at it sometimes and I just want to move on to the next thing.



Anyways. After a couple days break from this, I redrew the hand and posed it in a more relaxed manner.


Edited by Semont - 26 May 2013 at 12:37am

Hi, I'm not fond of the last colour you added, it is too much red, or pink... The character having blond hair, I think even the shadows should be paler.

I have heard somewhere that it is a mistake to put too much red to the skin, and that the skin colour has much more blue than what we usually think.

Don't know if that helps. ;)

edit: the fact that it's armor is blue also makes me think that if it was to reflect some kind of light on the skin, it wouldn't be a that redish one.


Edited by Elastico-Gadget - 08 August 2013 at 7:59am

I like the new skin color, it's very nice. However I feel the whole image has way too much dithering for my taste. I would turn the dithering into just flat colors.