The Birds!
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Category: Pixel Art
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Printed Date: 06 September 2025 at 4:35am
Topic: The Birds!
Posted By: AdamPlays
Subject: The Birds!
Date Posted: 29 January 2008 at 11:53am
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Was for the cut scene challenge but went out partying instead of finishing. The hands aren't done yet... and I'm not sure what I'm going to do for the background. Maybe add some birds flying around?
This is not a trace.
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Posted By: Blu
Date Posted: 29 January 2008 at 12:13pm
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That's a bird attacking her, right? If so, I'd add some fluff like in the ref and make the beak a bit pointier.
Move the woman's lips up and arch the shadow that's after her nose.
Err...
 Looks good, though. :) ------------- Gremlins rule the world; you just don't know it yet. |
Posted By: AdamPlays
Date Posted: 29 January 2008 at 2:03pm
Great advice. I think it's better now. Working on a bg...
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Posted By: Blu
Date Posted: 29 January 2008 at 2:19pm
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So..what are you doing for the background? ------------- Gremlins rule the world; you just don't know it yet. |
Posted By: AdamPlays
Date Posted: 29 January 2008 at 2:24pm
I'm using this scene from the movie as the background. Probably won't add the children, but maybe more birds.
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Posted By: AdamPlays
Date Posted: 29 January 2008 at 6:28pm
What do you all think? C & C appreciated!
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Posted By: Blu
Date Posted: 29 January 2008 at 6:30pm
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Oo, looks good but the light-sources don't quite match up. ------------- Gremlins rule the world; you just don't know it yet. |
Posted By: AdamPlays
Date Posted: 29 January 2008 at 6:47pm
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Is this angle better?  ------------- And now for something completely different... |
Posted By: leel
Date Posted: 29 January 2008 at 6:57pm
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The nose is insanely blurred/overaaed/pillowshaded - take your pick. Also take a closer look at the lips. You're not following the reference at all there. Also there should be more shadow around her temple. And her face looks really flat - the contour on the left is basically a straight line, the key in creating femininity is a gentle curve ------------- |
Posted By: Metaru
Date Posted: 29 January 2008 at 7:36pm
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and, no ofense obiusly, but that strange structure in the bottom-middle zone of the image looks like her... nipple? a very square-ish one. ------------- I ate leel's babies |
Posted By: AdamPlays
Date Posted: 30 January 2008 at 3:01pm
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I took all of you advice and made the appropriate changes. I'm still tinkering with it, but are there any other blaring issues I need to fix?
Thanks for your crits!
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Posted By: Metaru
Date Posted: 30 January 2008 at 4:55pm
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just try to stay the closest posiblke to the reference in order to achive the goal. but don't trace ok?  ------------- I ate leel's babies |
Posted By: leel
Date Posted: 30 January 2008 at 5:17pm
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alien eyes alien lips Look closer at the reference shapes. MUCH closer. ------------- |
Posted By: Blu
Date Posted: 30 January 2008 at 5:40pm
Make her lips curve more. But make sure they follow her face!!
 Oh, and the shadows are much better.
Sorry, I'm really kind of failing at citique. ------------- Gremlins rule the world; you just don't know it yet. |
Posted By: AdamPlays
Date Posted: 30 January 2008 at 10:48pm
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Well I zoomed in on the reference and tried to replicate it as best I could. The eye on the right still doesnt look quite right but I'm not sure what to do... I think it looks a lot better but I'm sure I can do more. Let me know!  ------------- And now for something completely different... |
Posted By: xeroxz2k7
Date Posted: 31 January 2008 at 7:06am
| I say that the lips should still be rotated a bit to the right. |
Posted By: Serendor
Date Posted: 31 January 2008 at 8:59am
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Like the concept... but your background kind of ruin it. The black shadow of the crow shouldn't be there since it is no wall to display it on any more, if you see my point? Now it looks like a shadow of a giant bird, stretching over the background... background is nice, woman + bird shadow is nice, but they don't quite match for me : / Good luck anyway! //Albin |
Posted By: AdamPlays
Date Posted: 31 January 2008 at 9:58am
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Hmm, that's an interesting observation. It's not supposed to be a shadow, but a bird in the foreground. You can tell in the reference because the tip of the beak wouldn't cast that particular shadow. Because of the direction of light, all you can see is it's silhouette. Maybe I should add some detail to the bird... implications of feathers and an eye or whatnot? ------------- And now for something completely different... |
Posted By: Serendor
Date Posted: 31 January 2008 at 11:16am
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yes, saw that in the reference, cover the hands... thought it was the shadow... then probably some texture on the bird as you said would be suitable for those like me^^; Good luck! //Albin |
Posted By: Blu
Date Posted: 31 January 2008 at 6:15pm
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Oh! Put your hand up to a light in a dark room. See how your hand isn't a perfectly black silhouette? :D ------------- Gremlins rule the world; you just don't know it yet. |
Posted By: Kee
Date Posted: 01 February 2008 at 11:18am
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i love the angles that you drew the birds in the bg. it makes the feel of a real picture great job on the expression also |
Posted By: AdamPlays
Date Posted: 30 March 2008 at 10:33pm
Fixed the eye and nose and smoothed out some lines.. The hair is starting to jump out at me now, i'll probably start fixing that too.
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Posted By: AdamPlays
Date Posted: 02 April 2008 at 11:29am
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http://www.pixeljoint.com/pixelart/31232.htm - Submitted! Thanks for everyone's help!!
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