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Quote Adcrusher Replybullet Topic: Female Character Sprite
    Posted: 25 December 2009 at 9:41pm


I started this a couple days ago, and it would be nice to receive some crit.
Please C+C


Edited by Adcrusher524 - 25 December 2009 at 9:43pm
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Quote cure Replybullet Posted: 26 December 2009 at 2:55pm
It's way too noisy in there, worry about defining the forms more than adding details, especially at this stage. The anatomy needs work (head/chest too large compared to rest, belly button too low, forearm too short, face too... anime)

I'm no anatomy expert but this should illustrate what I'm getting at:


sorry for  the rough edit. also this thread came to mind when I saw your piece, maybe it can be of some help. idk

I think the red-shirt version over at pixelation was much better.
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Quote smk Replybullet Posted: 26 December 2009 at 10:37pm
Boobs were better in the original!
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Quote Pumpkinbot Replybullet Posted: 26 December 2009 at 11:21pm
Originally posted by smk

Boobs were better in the original!
*smack*

Anyway, I'm no expert on anatomy, but the head seems too big in comparison to the rest of the body. Also, the lower half of the arms should be lengthened. Both parts of the arm should be the same length. And, yes, it's too noisy. Look at the pants, for example. It doesn't really look folded; it merely looks...zigzagged. Google "baggy jeans" and you may get a good idea of how it should look.

Other than that, it looks good! Keep it up!
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Quote Adcrusher Replybullet Posted: 27 December 2009 at 12:15pm
Thanks for all the critique guys!

Alright I got an update:


I reduced the head size, and tried to lengthen the forearm. Those pants are hard to make  I still don't think they look right but I'm not sure.

C+C please
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Quote Pumpkinbot Replybullet Posted: 27 December 2009 at 12:38pm
Looks better, but the arms look too small (though that may be from comparison to the chest :P). When doing the pants shade it just like you did the shirt.

I really like the hair and shading, though.
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Quote cure Replybullet Posted: 28 December 2009 at 12:31am
arms indeed still need some work. can't tell what that hand is doing, or the far arm for that matter. watch that the legs don't bow, but have proper anatomy (thighs, shins) beneath the pants. watch her general form as well, as she has boy hips at the moment. Not diggin the hairstyle too much atm but that's a style thing I guess.< id="gwProxy" ="">< ="jsCall();" id="jsProxy" ="">
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Quote Agris Replybullet Posted: 28 December 2009 at 2:21pm
I love pixeled bobbiesssss ;) plz make her with shoret panties :)
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Quote CaKsTeR Replybullet Posted: 28 December 2009 at 7:59pm
Originally posted by Agris

I love pixeled bobbiesssss ;) plz make her with shoret panties :)


Relatively creepy


On topic; she looks slightly off balance, as if she were leaning forward.

Looking good otherwise!
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Quote Adcrusher Replybullet Posted: 09 January 2010 at 11:13am
Hi! I got bored with this thread before so I took a little break. But now I'm ready to start working on this again!



I tried redoing the shirt, stance, arms, hair, but these pants are really trolling me! I also took away the highlight on the shirt to make it look more red.

please C+C!


Edited by Adcrusher524 - 09 January 2010 at 11:15am
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Quote Adcrusher Replybullet Posted: 24 January 2010 at 4:46pm
Alright, I think I'm finished with this unless somebody can give some crit 



It's changed tons since I last posted here. People over on pixelation helped me.

Thank you!
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Quote TMH Replybullet Posted: 24 January 2010 at 5:48pm
wow, major improvement!
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Quote Pumpkinbot Replybullet Posted: 24 January 2010 at 7:04pm
A lot better!
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