Pixel Joint Forum: Snail. Wanted: Harsh crits!

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gennoveus
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Topic: Snail. Wanted: Harsh crits!
Posted: 25 March 2011 at 1:34pm

Hi!

I've recently come back to pixel art. I am looking for some hard C+C so help me improve, and Pixelation isn't biting.

Note that the palette in the top right doesn't actually match up to the colours in the image any more!

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tanuki
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Posted: 25 March 2011 at 2:21pm

The shell seems slightly small for it. If this isn't your reference then it's extremely close- LINK

The part of the snail's underside where it raises up a bit is because it's going over a bump in the photo, but for yours it doesn't have any environment around it so it doesn't make a lot of sense visually to have that raised up.

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gennoveus
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Posted: 25 March 2011 at 3:04pm

Ah! Sorry, I forgot to post the reference. Yes that's the image (the first one that pops out on google search!)

Thanks! looking at it again I can see the shell/squishy bit ratio is a bit off.
I'll fix that!

And about the bump, you are absolutely right, but I was planning to add the background. I had a few stabs at drawing the background but I didn't like the result. The background in that image might be a bit too hard for my current experience level, though!

. Maybe I will take your advice and flatten the bump, and put the snail in a different background. (or no background at all? baby steps ...)

Anyway, thanks for the input so far!!

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cure
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Posted: 25 March 2011 at 4:24pm

the snail in the photo has more interesting colors, ranging from yellowish bumps in some spots to blue tints in other areas, like the eyestalks. head is too big for the body. you're omitting the little feelers by the mouth. the snail in the reference has a very interesting texture that isn't being translated into the pixel

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gennoveus
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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 2:54am

Excellent, thanks!

Will work on those points.

One thing I am stuck with is the texture of the skin. Tried a few things but I'm having trouble replicating the same texture given the low resolution.

Any ideas? I might look around at other's pixel work and see if I can find any similar texture at low resolutions that I can steal .. uh ... borrow ideas from! :D

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Elk
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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 9:01am

Way too monochrome, don't like (harsh)

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cure
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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 10:54am

well this piece is kinda slug-like.
I would just try to show the individual bumps. more like circles than dots, if that makes sense (too lazy to edit atm)

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gennoveus
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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 7:08pm

I see!
I 'spoze you can't go wrong copying ideas from Fool!!! His stuff is very impressive.

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gennoveus Midshipman Joined: 19 April 2023 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 32	Topic: Snail. Wanted: Harsh crits! Posted: 25 March 2011 at 1:34pm
	Hi! I've recently come back to pixel art. I am looking for some hard C+C so help me improve, and Pixelation isn't biting. Note that the palette in the top right doesn't actually match up to the colours in the image any more!
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tanuki Commander Joined: 01 April 2014 Online Status: Offline Posts: 333	Posted: 25 March 2011 at 2:21pm
	The shell seems slightly small for it. If this isn't your reference then it's extremely close- LINK The part of the snail's underside where it raises up a bit is because it's going over a bump in the photo, but for yours it doesn't have any environment around it so it doesn't make a lot of sense visually to have that raised up.
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gennoveus Midshipman Joined: 19 April 2023 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 32	Posted: 25 March 2011 at 3:04pm
	Ah! Sorry, I forgot to post the reference. Yes that's the image (the first one that pops out on google search!) Thanks! looking at it again I can see the shell/squishy bit ratio is a bit off. I'll fix that! And about the bump, you are absolutely right, but I was planning to add the background. I had a few stabs at drawing the background but I didn't like the result. The background in that image might be a bit too hard for my current experience level, though! . Maybe I will take your advice and flatten the bump, and put the snail in a different background. (or no background at all? baby steps ...) Anyway, thanks for the input so far!!
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cure Commander Joined: 23 March 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2859	Posted: 25 March 2011 at 4:24pm
	the snail in the photo has more interesting colors, ranging from yellowish bumps in some spots to blue tints in other areas, like the eyestalks. head is too big for the body. you're omitting the little feelers by the mouth. the snail in the reference has a very interesting texture that isn't being translated into the pixel
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gennoveus Midshipman Joined: 19 April 2023 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 32	Posted: 26 March 2011 at 2:54am
	Excellent, thanks! Will work on those points. One thing I am stuck with is the texture of the skin. Tried a few things but I'm having trouble replicating the same texture given the low resolution. Any ideas? I might look around at other's pixel work and see if I can find any similar texture at low resolutions that I can steal .. uh ... borrow ideas from! :D
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Elk Commander Joined: 12 May 2024 Online Status: Offline Posts: 483	Posted: 26 March 2011 at 9:01am
	Way too monochrome, don't like (harsh)
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cure Commander Joined: 23 March 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2859	Posted: 26 March 2011 at 10:54am
	well this piece is kinda slug-like. I would just try to show the individual bumps. more like circles than dots, if that makes sense (too lazy to edit atm)
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gennoveus Midshipman Joined: 19 April 2023 Location: New Zealand Online Status: Offline Posts: 32	Posted: 26 March 2011 at 7:08pm
	I see! I 'spoze you can't go wrong copying ideas from Fool!!! His stuff is very impressive.
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