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Aastikya
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Topic: 3d Tv
Posted: 06 November 2011 at 11:29pm

Help me make it better.

Thanks

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Zeratanus
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Posted: 07 November 2011 at 8:39pm

Well right now it looks like a TV covered in slime, with some weird circle thingy in front of it.

if you give us some indication of the direction you're trying to go with it, so we know what you want it to be we could help a lot more than just taking random guesses.

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Aastikya
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Posted: 08 November 2011 at 6:09am

The circular thing is a tennis ball. And , the thing which you call slimy is grass XD

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Lathien
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Posted: 08 November 2011 at 9:10am

It doesn't make sense that the grass is breaking the edge of the tv. Even if it's 3D and coming out of the tv, in a tennis match the camera wouldn't have a close-up of the court to have it be only grass. You should have an actual tennis match going on in the tv, or maybe just a single player in a freeze frame as they hit the ball towards the camera and it flies out of the tv. As for the tennis ball itself, first tennis balls are a lot more yellow than green, and right now it looks way too flat, you need some shading to indicate that it's a ball rather than a flat circle.

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Partack
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Posted: 09 November 2011 at 3:56pm

yeah, what Lathien said..

the composition needs reworking. I thought it was slime and a weird circle thing too..

The grass, once you said it was grass, kinda looked like grass.. but it didn't make me think "tennis court" even once I knew what the picture was..

Couldn't hurt to make the TV look a little cooler than a rectangle either.. maybe give it some rounded edges? even slightly.. and improve the TV stand (Although this looks like a monitor.. not a TV.. because the stand is very tall.) maybe slope the top of the base a little?

Have another go, K?

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Aastikya
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Posted: 09 November 2011 at 10:16pm

Thanks for replies. I'll work on grass and ball. But what Patrack said.. 3d TVs look similar to the one I made. I might need to shade the things.

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Aastikya
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Posted: 09 November 2011 at 11:06pm

Here is an update , comments please :)

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Partack
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Posted: 10 November 2011 at 9:26am

Oh muuch much better. Great work

there is a problem now though, isn't there.. it's not very 3D and so the original concept has not been fulfilled..

No time to comment right now, I'll be back later and edit this message then.

Edit#1: just before leaving I noticed the tennis ball on the bottom right, I couldn't discern the tennis ball from the..... wavey thing behind it.. The tennis ball looks great by the way, it's just it's got so much going on behind it i couldn't tell what that was.. I thought it was a tennis player inside the TV at first and didn't even see the ball shape.

Edited by Partack - 10 November 2011 at 9:28am

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Aastikya
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Posted: 12 November 2011 at 7:28am

I made that wavey thing to show some speed of the ball.

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Lathien
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Posted: 12 November 2011 at 10:09am

Better, but still not quite readable enough. The tennis court within the television is just two white lines and although once you say it's a tennis court, if you dont it's still just two white lines. So again I suggest a player on screen. For the ball, you need to make it a lot bigger to give the impression it is flying out of the screen, which will also help with the readability on the speed trail behind it, which is a good idea btw.
And I don't think 3D TVs actually have 3D written on them...

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Friend
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Posted: 12 November 2011 at 12:51pm

if a player is a too much, you could always have a racquet behind the ball to really show it is being hit "out" of the tv

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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Topic: 3d Tv Posted: 06 November 2011 at 11:29pm
	Help me make it better. Thanks
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Zeratanus Commander Joined: 03 December 2020 Online Status: Offline Posts: 576	Posted: 07 November 2011 at 8:39pm
	Well right now it looks like a TV covered in slime, with some weird circle thingy in front of it. if you give us some indication of the direction you're trying to go with it, so we know what you want it to be we could help a lot more than just taking random guesses.
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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Posted: 08 November 2011 at 6:09am
	The circular thing is a tennis ball. And , the thing which you call slimy is grass XD
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Lathien Midshipman Joined: 07 August 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 84	Posted: 08 November 2011 at 9:10am
	It doesn't make sense that the grass is breaking the edge of the tv. Even if it's 3D and coming out of the tv, in a tennis match the camera wouldn't have a close-up of the court to have it be only grass. You should have an actual tennis match going on in the tv, or maybe just a single player in a freeze frame as they hit the ball towards the camera and it flies out of the tv. As for the tennis ball itself, first tennis balls are a lot more yellow than green, and right now it looks way too flat, you need some shading to indicate that it's a ball rather than a flat circle.
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Partack Commander Joined: 20 October 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 260	Posted: 09 November 2011 at 3:56pm
	yeah, what Lathien said.. the composition needs reworking. I thought it was slime and a weird circle thing too.. The grass, once you said it was grass, kinda looked like grass.. but it didn't make me think "tennis court" even once I knew what the picture was.. Couldn't hurt to make the TV look a little cooler than a rectangle either.. maybe give it some rounded edges? even slightly.. and improve the TV stand (Although this looks like a monitor.. not a TV.. because the stand is very tall.) maybe slope the top of the base a little? Have another go, K?
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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Posted: 09 November 2011 at 10:16pm
	Thanks for replies. I'll work on grass and ball. But what Patrack said.. 3d TVs look similar to the one I made. I might need to shade the things.
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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Posted: 09 November 2011 at 11:06pm
	Here is an update , comments please :)
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Partack Commander Joined: 20 October 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 260	Posted: 10 November 2011 at 9:26am
	Oh muuch much better. Great work there is a problem now though, isn't there.. it's not very 3D and so the original concept has not been fulfilled.. No time to comment right now, I'll be back later and edit this message then. Edit#1: just before leaving I noticed the tennis ball on the bottom right, I couldn't discern the tennis ball from the..... wavey thing behind it.. The tennis ball looks great by the way, it's just it's got so much going on behind it i couldn't tell what that was.. I thought it was a tennis player inside the TV at first and didn't even see the ball shape. Edited by Partack - 10 November 2011 at 9:28am
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Aastikya Midshipman Joined: 19 September 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 86	Posted: 12 November 2011 at 7:28am
	I made that wavey thing to show some speed of the ball.
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Lathien Midshipman Joined: 07 August 2011 Online Status: Offline Posts: 84	Posted: 12 November 2011 at 10:09am
	Better, but still not quite readable enough. The tennis court within the television is just two white lines and although once you say it's a tennis court, if you dont it's still just two white lines. So again I suggest a player on screen. For the ball, you need to make it a lot bigger to give the impression it is flying out of the screen, which will also help with the readability on the speed trail behind it, which is a good idea btw. And I don't think 3D TVs actually have 3D written on them...
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Friend Commander Joined: 01 April 2015 Online Status: Offline Posts: 710	Posted: 12 November 2011 at 12:51pm
	if a player is a too much, you could always have a racquet behind the ball to really show it is being hit "out" of the tv
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