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Quote Citizen_Insane Replybullet Topic: image needs crits badly
    Posted: 19 August 2005 at 3:06pm

 

Ok, so I was given the option to make a 128x128 splash logo for the ending credits of a game I did some work on recently, and I came up with this:

It's not really a WIP... though some of the colors and stuff are still a BIT tentative, it's more or less a finished piece.  Good ol' fashioned 15 color + 1.

GOT CRITS? 

 

thanks kids

 

 

 

image is about to die



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Quote getrealjoe Replybullet Posted: 19 August 2005 at 9:20pm
i bet nobody had any crits  because this  is cooler than anyone who reads this



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Quote Citizen_Insane Replybullet Posted: 20 August 2005 at 2:09pm

thanks.. joey...

 

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please, I'd really like just a few crits.



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Quote Maestro Replybullet Posted: 22 August 2005 at 7:38am
Allright, so I like the overall style, but maybe you could make the big empty spaces a bit more interesting? I'm talking about the sky (well, that has something already), the sea and the grass. Other than that, it's coming along fine. But do make the tree a bit smoother, colourwise. And it has some holes of green towards the bottom.
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Quote Saboteur Replybullet Posted: 22 August 2005 at 11:21pm

Yeah, the colour selection at the moment could use a little improvement.

Also, what's with the gash of white the cuts across the sky? Not sure what that's trying to be. And make the text a little less drab, it looks rather plain as it stands.

And what's in the background... what is the guy looking at?

An a positive note, I like the style. Looks like a scratch-and-win situation

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Quote Citizen_Insane Replybullet Posted: 23 August 2005 at 12:20am

it was more of an abstract piece, maybe even surreal, or more towards that end of the spectrum at least.

he's looking at some large tower in the distance, and another floating thing.. don't know what it is, either, so I can't give you a straight answer

I was going for a plane look, but maybe I'll put a few more things in to make it a little more interesting.

 

thanks for the crits, I was really starting to wonder if I was ever gonna get any.

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Quote Maestro Replybullet Posted: 23 August 2005 at 7:09am
The light green at the bottom doesn't go very well with the grayish, number colours. Try changing that maybe.
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Quote Rifts Replybullet Posted: 23 August 2005 at 4:39pm
i like it exept the text could use some imagination.... and i dnt kno wht
that weird arrow thing in the sky is
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Quote Citizen_Insane Replybullet Posted: 23 August 2005 at 10:53pm

it's some floating structure, of some sort.

ok, I'll change up the colors a bit and see what I come up with..

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Quote pixelblink Replybullet Posted: 24 August 2005 at 9:06pm

The text definitely needs some spicing up. Some colours on it or something else... anything else! I think the scene itself it great but it could use some defining such as the floating castle in the background. Some slightly darker lines to outline it or shade it would be good... also the bottom island thingy looks like a penis. Is it meant to look so? The clouds and sky contrast a bit too much for my tastes as well.

Back to the foreground, the tree has no leaves or anything which I understand but why not add some extra tiny twigs on the branches and/or some fallen leaves on the ground

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Quote Citizen_Insane Replybullet Posted: 25 August 2005 at 12:51am

 

I was just about to applaud you for actually calling it a castle.. and then.. yeah.

that was really un called for.

I'm working on figuring out what to do with this piece.

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Quote Maestro Replybullet Posted: 25 August 2005 at 5:25am

"I'm working on figuring out what to do with this piece."
Heh. ;)



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Quote Wannahlakujuu Replybullet Posted: 25 August 2005 at 7:25am
Originally posted by Maestro

I'm working on figuring out what to do with this piece.
Hehe... ;)

What was the point of that post. Hehe...

Anyway, nice job on this one, but I don't like the green specks on the bottom of the tree. I don't think you should outline the castle, just because It shouldn't stick out much. Also like they all said, the lettering, and the grass...ya

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Quote pixelblink Replybullet Posted: 25 August 2005 at 3:44pm
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I was just about to applaud you for actually calling it a castle.. and then.. yeah.

that was really un called for.

I'm working on figuring out what to do with this piece.

I apologize but, it really does look very phallic. Anyways, would love to see some updates on this

(Edit: corrected my own spelling on phallic and hyperlinked so you understand the meaning)



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Quote getrealjoe Replybullet Posted: 25 August 2005 at 4:25pm

it only looks like that if you're looking for it.

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Quote Wannahlakujuu Replybullet Posted: 25 August 2005 at 4:33pm
I know, I wouldn't realize it. I actually had to look for it.
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Quote getrealjoe Replybullet Posted: 25 August 2005 at 4:34pm
why would you do something like that?
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Quote Citizen_Insane Replybullet Posted: 25 August 2005 at 10:47pm

for the record, it's supposed to be some sort of tower, and some sort of flying structure.  Had I first concidered the maturity level of the forums, I probably wouldn't have even posted the piece..

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Quote Saboteur Replybullet Posted: 25 August 2005 at 11:32pm

Mmm, nice putting yourself above everyone there, Citizen_Insane. Pixelblink just had the guts to point out something that would have been pointed out eventually. Probably aware that it would get yelled at.

And for your desperate need for crits, I've seen no changes. Where are the updates?

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Quote pixelblink Replybullet Posted: 25 August 2005 at 11:51pm
My maturity level is fine. I don't get the giggles or get offended by the word "penis". It is a proper term to use... others could've taken its place. Anyways, I'm pretty blunt most of the time and I had meant no offence. If you reread my post you'll see that. Back on topic though, I agree with Saboteur and I said it before... updates? None to be seen so far
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Quote Citizen_Insane Replybullet Posted: 26 August 2005 at 12:41am
Originally posted by Maestro

"I'm working on figuring out what to do with this piece."
Heh. ;)

I was talking about this..

sorry I didn't specify.  see?  I'm not perfect.  that's why I asked for some critttz



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Quote Citizen_Insane Replybullet Posted: 26 August 2005 at 1:21am

well.. sorry about everything.. here's the update.

I just didn't have much time this week to do anything else other than take in suggestions.. fall semister started this week, so it's been kind of crazy.

I'm just trying a bunch of stuff.. I don't really know what to do with this.  I got really frustrated with the letters so I just traced over them.

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Quote Saboteur Replybullet Posted: 26 August 2005 at 1:23am

Ahh, nice! Thanks for the update, definitely some improvement there. Might wanna work on the text a little more. If I didn't know it said "world" I'd not have figured it out.

The castle's depictable as a castle, the foreground colours are clear and bright... as I said, nice update.

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Quote Rifts Replybullet Posted: 26 August 2005 at 3:28am
loveing the update, the castle is much easyer to work out much better,
the black gives it more depth and the text does look much better than
the last one, although it is harder to make out, mayby work on it a bit
apart from that it seems gr8
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Quote Maestro Replybullet Posted: 26 August 2005 at 5:35am
Yea, cool update, it's clear you're going somewhere with this now.

As for further C&C, I'd advise you to spend a little more time on the borders of some areas, namely the clouds and the "frame", Id try to make them a little more delicate.

And my comment up there, well. It's unecessary, I see that, but then it's neither malevolent or insulting, I made the ;) to make that clear. Everyone is in the situation of not knowing how to continue a  piece sometimes, and I was being amicable. Let's just forget about it.
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Quote pixelblink Replybullet Posted: 26 August 2005 at 12:55pm

Yay! An update! I noticed you removed the phallic symbolism... I think it works better this way because it is more easily recognizaed for what it's for. The dark lines give it better definition now too. Nice work.

Now for the things you've added which I think detract from the picture... The "frame" or whatever you wanna call it as well as the outlines on the letters... way to dark IMO. I would suggest going back to the original colour and adding some dithering to that and perhaps the clouds as well.

Just noticed you've got a few leaves on the tree now too. I like that. Keep the updates coming! :)

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Quote inkspot Replybullet Posted: 26 August 2005 at 1:02pm

Whats that arrow in the middle of it?

And the text is unreadable, at least my poor eyes cannot see it clearly. Glasses are foggy (read dirty) too.

 

I like the first one. Black ruins the second one. Maybe add just some lighter dark color instead of complete black?



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Quote Wannahlakujuu Replybullet Posted: 26 August 2005 at 1:13pm
It's the castle, as stated earlier. and the text is quite readable. I like it.
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Quote Citizen_Insane Replybullet Posted: 26 August 2005 at 1:39pm

thanks guys

instead of the black border I might just do something contrasting with the other colors... that usually works.  the letters are still too unreadable.. but I like the direction I'm going with them.

I don't know when I'll have another update, though.. sometime between tomorrow and sunday.

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