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Dutrho
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 04 July 2005 Location: Canada Online Status: Offline Posts: 237 |
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Making a little avatar
go ahead rip it appart. ![]() ![]() |
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Mmmm.. Thats good placebo!
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Citizen_Insane
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 30 March 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 189 |
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jay lenno? haha.. I'd suggest going for a more fleshy skin tone... judging from the color of the hair, you might want to go with something lighter. MAYBE even something closer to the back ground color of the forums. something seems uneven, though.. I just don't know what it is. |
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Dutrho
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 04 July 2005 Location: Canada Online Status: Offline Posts: 237 |
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the uneveness stems from the nose i think, can't decide on a proper shape.
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Mmmm.. Thats good placebo!
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Citizen_Insane
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oh man I said jay lenno and I meant connan obrien!!! I actually think you need to bring the right eye (his left) close to the outside of his face. |
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Omegavolt
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 03 March 2005 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 227 |
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Im going to go out on a limb here and mention the fact that its a bit blocky. Unless thats the style you like, if so, then props to you. But if youre looking for crit, Id say give it more than 6 colors at least. ;)
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inkspot
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 05 May 2005 Location: Estonia Online Status: Offline Posts: 452 |
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Blocky or not, maybe he wanted it to be blocky. I really don't believe it that he wanted it to be real looking or real shape... Nose is flat, yes. As I can see, there is a lighter line on the edge of noise, but make it more lighter, like you have in the outer corner. And add the dark line into the inner corner of nose. Maybe add some light line at the downside of mouth ending too, as light shining back from mouth edge, so the mouth would be like more inner. I don't know what kind of material you want ti to be, but the red part could use some more lighter shine on the edges what you have. |
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Dutrho
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 04 July 2005 Location: Canada Online Status: Offline Posts: 237 |
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Minor update
tweeked the shading a bit and yes its supposed to be blocky ![]() |
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inkspot
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 05 May 2005 Location: Estonia Online Status: Offline Posts: 452 |
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Daaahhhhhhh. The mouth, why you added the lighter line to the wrong side????
Oh, some people don't have the logic. Sorry. Edited by inkspot |
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Dutrho
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 04 July 2005 Location: Canada Online Status: Offline Posts: 237 |
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Here you go, no need to freak out.
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inkspot
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 05 May 2005 Location: Estonia Online Status: Offline Posts: 452 |
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Ohhh...
Here, i made an edit for you. That should give you a picture.
You just don't seem to get the light. |
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imaxcs
Midshipman ![]() Joined: 22 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 44 |
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You just don't seem to get the light. You just don't seem to have the manners. ![]() |
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Wannahlakujuu
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 02 April 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 205 |
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Seriously. Anyway, I really like it, even though it isn't really the style I like, it isn't that bad. Since I don't really have any experience doing these, I can't crit much, but I know that it is getting better |
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Shark
Commander ![]() ![]() a.k.a. Feron Joined: 02 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2136 |
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i think you could use more texture on the hair.
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leel
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Originally posted by Shark
i think you could use more texture on the hair. yeah and maybe sideburns? little ones... |
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Omegavolt
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 03 March 2005 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 227 |
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Originally posted by Dutrho
Minor update tweeked the shading a bit and yes its supposed to be blocky ![]() Its hard for us to crit a piece when youre after a particular style and no one knows what that style is. Theres a ton of things you can 'fix' but if want to look like it does then I not sure what to tell you to fix. If youre happy with it, thats fine, but you should know people are going to crit with their own ideas in mind. Good luck. ;) |
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inkspot
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 05 May 2005 Location: Estonia Online Status: Offline Posts: 452 |
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Originally posted by imaxcs
You just don't seem to get the light. You just don't seem to have the manners. ![]()
Ohh, you are so f**kin right. I don't have the bloody manners at all. I don't need manners as long as I am alive. Manners are nothing more than pplain words. Ridiculous lies.
There was a world, like 2 centuries ago, in Abessinia where people had manners to tortue people. Local king was entertraining himself by piercing the eyes out of his prisoners and some servants by using pins while he was meeting with the guests of his country. Now those were manners. You may say whatever nice but if you still piss into another mans well, then better be honest! I may say "Oh thats so nice piece but maybe you just place that line to somwhere else where it would look more beautiful than it looks now," but I don't, because I feel as same cold as now and that wouldn't be critics to rip his work apart. And besides, being honest is less writing and you don't have to remember anything. Thats the f**king way of manners and thats how I am going to be! Edited by inkspot |
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Wannahlakujuu
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 02 April 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 205 |
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Good thing it isn't 2 centuries ago anymore then isn't it. And you really do need more manners. Calm down, don't need to get all defensive, he was telling the truth. Yes, detail in the hair would be nice. |
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Shark
Commander ![]() ![]() a.k.a. Feron Joined: 02 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2136 |
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u may not feel that way about manners, however u dont need to be so negative. u can give people criticism without being rude. dutrho i like the style of this piece but i think its a little plain more texture and facial details would be good i also think u cood change the skin color. Edited by Shark |
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inkspot
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 05 May 2005 Location: Estonia Online Status: Offline Posts: 452 |
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I am calm. I only threw those words into to show you I have no manners. He said to rip it apart and I haven't even started... |
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Shark
Commander ![]() ![]() a.k.a. Feron Joined: 02 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2136 |
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ok rip it apart but do it nicley
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Citizen_Insane
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 30 March 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 189 |
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woah, let's calm it down, kids.. last time I checked, this was the WIP forum, not the 'let's get off topic and fight about whatever' forum... I know things can get out of hand pretty easily, speaking from personal experience and recent events. If you've really gotta argue then just do it over forum PM, but not here. This is the WIP forum. Anyways, I figured I'd help you out a bit with more than just some crits, on this one. One thing you've always gotta keep in mind is the light source. I know it's not the best edit in the world... but maybe it'll help you out. I drew an arrow in where the obvious light source is coming from. Everything flat surface parallel to that surface should use that very same color. You'll notice I did some work on the nose. The problem with your old nose was that there wasn't any depth, at all. You can go here http://www.portrait-artist.org/face/nose.html to check out more about noses and their shapes. Your nose was more stuck to the side of his face under his right eye, where as in the corrected version, the nose clearly protrudes from the face evenly between the eyes. I also played with the shadows and high lights a bit... I noticed you had high lights on the wrong parts of the eyes and what not, so I fixed that. Once again, it's important to remember your light source(s). Contrast is a big issue in showing depth, too.. so keep that in mind. yeah, I hope I helped you out a bit. I know it's your style and everything. |
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Dutrho
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 04 July 2005 Location: Canada Online Status: Offline Posts: 237 |
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Updated a bit.
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