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I'm not an expert in anatomy, but I think that when looking down, one tilts one's head partway and the eyes do the rest of the job, so the angle of view would still be partly from below the jaw.
In the ref I posted, you can imagine her eyes lookind down without changing the head position.
One could also deliberately directly face downward, but then the torso would be bent forward too, not backward as in your piece (her back is very arched). And that would totally kill the body language intention!
Additionally, I think the face is a bit wide relative to its height, which may or may not read as part of the perspective problem.
Don't take my word for it anyway, experiment with a friend!
SnowOwl, be cautious, this might become a dangerous situation for you...!
Hello Manupix! It felt like I learned a lot from this piece and there are so many mistakes I did from which I will learn even more!
Always feel free to point out what is bad and good of course! I am happy to see/read opinions and ideas!
First of all, well, I am a bit confused about you saying it is "wrong". She is not meant to look up but look towards the viewer. Therefore I cannot understand how this face/head would be that wrong?
Next would be the palette: Yeah, I totally see what you mean. I will try to look even more into that next time !
In the end, thanks a lot for taking your time to share your ideas with me, Manupix : )
Jinn, thanks a lot! She is not meant to look upwards, though! : O
Ambitious piece, time well spent!
If you don't mind spending a little more, I'd point a few issues =)
Perspective on the face is wrong, it's flat as if it was a pasted photograph. From this angle of view, you should mostly see the jaw underside, also more of the nose, and the mouth should curve downward.
Colors are nice but they don't really work as a unified palette, there are 3 color ramps with little or no hue shifting and interaction. The saturations are also pretty close in 2 of these. You might want to blue-shift the body shadows to blend them more into the bg.
Really nice job! I'd only suggest a couple of small changes: http://i.imgur.com/36T8z49.png
I dare say I would have no problems keeping my eyes open at all.
king_bobston, thanks a lot for your comprehensive feedback!
First of all, I have to thank you for your support during this piece! It is sometimes hard to see what is wrong once I looked onto for so long. Especially when the pose is this hard to pull off for me.
About the Downwellette, yes it is true that having a certain given (low) colour palette is great way to learn about colours and much more. However I felt like this palette restricted me with my concept - there was this continuous lack of depth. Despite all attempts to fix it, it never was close enough to what I wanted it to be. Even after the palette change... this piece is still not even close.
Also tackling things being out of the comfort zone is a target on which I am strongly focusing on. I am glad I can be some kind of an inspiration for you!
(and no, I will keep denying this!)
I'm really glad that you took it further than the Downwellettes challenge version.
Eventhrough harsh color restrictions are a nice way to learn about color, I think it was the other way around with this.
Seeing you tackle things out of your comfort zone and not backing off has become inspiring to me. I'm looking forward to whatever your future stunts are 
(and you're totally improving, denying it doesn't help you 
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wow, that preview animation is really nice and strong