I dunno. I think it quite fits the sharp cluster style that she's painted with. As a plus, the fact that the spider web-ish stuff is transparent gives your submission the ability to conform to pretty much any theme or background that it's placed over.
Admittedly, a great artist, whatever their medium, will never be finished with a piece, but, communally speaking, sometimes you just have to say good enough.
Great work, Mr. Keep it up! 
In love :o