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Top Pixel Art - November 2017 (#6)
I think I've faved all your stuff and this is the first time Ive seen you post something new here since Ive joined the site
but something about this drawing I just dont like - the outline looks weird to me. Probably becaus eyou AA with this line which when zoomed out just makes some lines look thicker than normal
here is how I think it couldve look better in that aspect: Here
And also - I would mention anatomy, but cyangmou hit the nail on the head with that already
but yeah - its not a bad piece, but I just feel like this is unfinished/unpolished matee
Lovely work, its amazing how you fit a full rainbow of coulors in here! Also, I usually recognize a db16 work from miles away, but here I had no clue until I saw the description! Great great great :D
Very impressive work.
I also agree that the use of color is amazing.
Love the palette and pose! Also, the "X" composition works great
face is nice
boobs are as well
hair is great too
so the immedate and important points of attention all got really enough work to shine.
glancing over secondary parts of the image it feels quite sketchy / unpolished though, like it was thrown in, the wings feel great, the body itself not that much.
-ear seems to "fleshy" and a bit too big or placed a tad too much behind.
-perspective of big wings don't align, rear ones uppest point should be significantly below front ones (e.g. head)
-head rear wing has less volume than front one /spreading of fingers is awkward in terms of foreshortening)
-front arm elbow never can be in this position if the hand is turned outward. It seems to be broken twice. Either the elbow position is wrong, radius/ulna are broken or the outline on the lower arm is wrong, muscles and bones don't align though.
-hands are to small
-hands lack actual wrist joints / not long enough
-rear elbow is overstretched
-explosion seems to emit orange light, therefore lighting on hands and legs feels off
-belly doesn't follow spine line
-ass in this position implies that the standing leg is the front one. Hip joint on the rear leg then would be in an angle which is not supported by tendons or the joint is dislocated
-both upper legs have different lengths. Rear one is longer, despite moved pelvis / look at the knee line and you will see that it can't line up in space.
-front knee shows too frontal in the camera, would need a slight rotation inwards
outside line of the front upper leg, neither considers any of the ass muscles, nor structural anatomical rhythm
-frontal foot doesn't really look like a heel.
tried to fix some things quickly and dirty. I focused mainly on the first points though.
Also as i edited the leg i felt like rotating the whole thing might be a good idea to keep it in balance, which would have been off otherwise.
I also had a problem envisioning the exact horizon line / angle you intented to look at her. Which means that my quickly thrown together visualizations might not be in line with what you intented in first place.
http://abload.de/img/2017_11_elkeditcay8w.png
Man, the colors gave it an awesome style, beautiful work!
@Cyangmou thanks :) I would be grateful for some!
hands and feet are definitely something i didnt polish and have trouble with, if anyone could give me a hand visualizing the proper anatomy (with stylization in mind) it would help tremendously! (foreshortening >-<)
Another thing that might be causing eye-cancer is that it looks like she only has one buttcheek and a deformed hip
Already handed it in though as the piece is no real big deal to me, and it wouldn't have been possible to ask for CC :p (unfair)
Humanoid is something I rarely do xD
Nice first impression Alex.
Do you want some critique on the piece?
Glad to yee you uploading stuff again Elsch! :)
Die Pose ist unfassbar gut und die Haare sowie dieses harte Licht von links kommend machen mich ganz wuschig. 
Wow, I really think you need to rework the wrists and boots.
The wrists are too small, even keeping in mind the stylization. The boots are just messy in outline.
love to see you posting on here again! You were really inactive for a long time, love the piece!