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@Cyanmou thanks so much for the critique! With the strong blue skin tone I'd kind of intended the host to be ambiguously human, but that's no excuse for drawing mistakes! Much of these weren't intended. On the other hand, I do have excuses for some of this. The main character, as a sort of avante garde grande dame, was loosely based on Virginia Woolf, who is a woman with a surprisingly long face and prominent jaw. Her arms are intended to be older woman arms with the soft flesh hanging loosely away from the atrophied muscle at the joints, but I agree, it's lost too much structure along the way. How I render the dress definitely needs rethinking and I'm going to upload a new version with at least a little more clarity what's going on there and with the jacket worn about the shoulders. Some of the other problems require more of a major overhaul ,so I guess I'll have to consider how I deal with that.
it's a great piece, good mood, good colors. I like everything about it, aside from the focal point because it reads to me in a confusing way.
The lady you put in the preview. She doesn't look human, but maybe that's intented. Her arms look too soft without real bones, her eyes are super high, her mouth super bulgy, her shoulders extremely muscular and her dress seems tto be connected to her skin.
Compared to the lady left, the contrast is so strong that the left lady reads way more like background, while it feels a spotlight is on the focal lady. The problem is that i cannot clearly say if she is an alien disguised as human (bc a clear giveaway is lacking for that), or if it's just a collection of unlucky tiny drawing problems.
Everything else is cool. I love the storytelling, the depth the expression of the 2 characters left. The background people, the ominous figure in the night.
@amberMechanic
I checked out Virginia Woolf and indeed she has a super interesting face. Having the reference as a direct comparison it's way more clear what I am looking at.
I would say that maybe the forehead should be a tiny bit more vertical, the hair definitely needs a bit more volume, you should remove the dark shadow on the cheek and make the ridge of the nose more lit. Also the elongated shadow in the grubs of the mouth could be reduced. After all you still would go for a female face, just exaggerate a bit. I think it's just a bit to strong.
I also totally didn#t read the thing over her shoulders as a jacket, I thought it's part of the dress. Mainly because the sleeve is not lining up and it reads more as background.element, since all other foreground elements have a bit darker outlines.
I think some small changes here and there could go a long way, as there is nothing wrong with the big work intensive basics in the piece. It's just that things are hard to read without being aware of all the detail to pay attention to.