That second frame is so dark that i thought it was just a black frame for the first few glances.

That name plate is cool but i think you shouldn't use it as the preview.

really nice, i like it..

Ok i changed small image.
Now is good?

Submission rule 7. If you use a detail image the small image should match. It doesn't :

Words cannot describe how much I hate the preview image.

aaah the submit for the challange, i think its taking everyone quite some time eh?

i think its overall welldone but yeah i agree that the second frame could use some lightening up so its easier to see, but yeah i like the way you did the wall shading...:D

Second frame is waaay too dark. To me at least.. I think i'm gunna go calibrate my monitor.

Quite an engaging story.
Surely you can do better than "the end" for the fourth frame though.

Please make a nicer icon file for your great entry. Maybe just the name plate over the door, or the rat face. Your entry is worth it, the icon now makes you not even want to click to see it, ya noes ;)