Cheesy Landings!

Cheesy Landings!

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Cheesy Landings!



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Title: Cheesy Landings!
Pixel Artist: Celri  (Level 4 Ensign :: 1604 points)
Posted: 7/30/2009 01:35
Palette: 35 colors
Statistics:  14 comments    0 faves    0 avatars

As Neil looked up, he ckecked his oxygen meter - all normal.  He was so sure he was hallucinating!  There, right in front of him was a little mouse...with blue wings!  It was making chirpy noises, dangling a little piece of moon cheese on a string as if to say "Fancy a bite?  I come in peace!"

Edit: After seriously cool input and C&C I've made some changes...hope this is better - I loved making it!

I enjoyed this little pic - first one in a while, hope you like! 


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Celri (Level 4 Ensign) @ 8/12/2009 10:04

Cool...my hamster and cat have a sadistic rital: she plays with him while he's in his hamsterball and he bites her ears while she sleeps - kind of a love-hate relationship!


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orenshtiv (Level 7 Ichikyu) @ 8/10/2009 03:59

Toys for cats? xD
I have a cat and i bought him a little rat toy...
and now he's playing with it all day.. lol


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Celri (Level 4 Ensign) @ 8/10/2009 03:30

Lol!  They're cute 'n fuzzy :)  Also make great toys for cats!


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orenshtiv (Level 7 Ichikyu) @ 8/6/2009 07:07

I see you like mices,and rats,and hamsters xP


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Celri (Level 4 Ensign) @ 7/30/2009 23:24

There....ta-da!  Earth once more a round object :)


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Celri (Level 4 Ensign) @ 7/30/2009 23:05

 @Manupix

I also like the other earth better - will try to fix in time.  I think I'm going to keep the mousie reflection as is, as he is very close to the visor and it almost creates the idea of Neil being a mouse too...on a very LOL level!

Thanks for all the input :)


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Manupix (Level 11 Godzilla) @ 7/30/2009 13:57

Much better!

Just 2 more li'l things! ;-)

Earth is no longer round; and I think I liked it better before (bluer, better clouds) but this is debatable.

Mousie reflection should be much smaller than original. See how the reflected moonscape looks minuscule in photographs.


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Celri (Level 4 Ensign) @ 7/30/2009 09:36

@Skamocore Changes list

The stripes on the text and its background make the text hard to read. CHECK                                                      You're still diterhing in areas that don't need to be ditehred. The hand and the bottom part of the suit almost looks like jpeg compression due to so much dithering. CHECK
There seems to be too much AAing on the mouse's wings, but yet, there's no AA anywhere else in the image.
CHECK                                                                                                                                                                                       Due to the curve of the visor, the mouse's reflection should be more distorted. CHECK
I think the starts in the top left should be less evenly spaced. CHECK
@Manupix checklist:

The wings look wrong -  kind of CHECK ;                                                                                                                             Maybe the Earth should be more towards the top, it might make a more balanced composition, and not interfere with the mouse. CHECK

Thankx guys

 

 

 


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Celri (Level 4 Ensign) @ 7/30/2009 09:28

Thanks - I've made some changes - moved earth, lowered the dithering levels (slightly LOL), also changed the wings - not too happy with them but that's as good as they're gonna get!


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NotlikeTheOthers (Level 2 Quiet One) @ 7/30/2009 08:34

like the way you did the suit and the Earth!


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Celri (Level 4 Ensign) @ 7/30/2009 04:19

Thank you so much!  I will tweak away - am working on the wings.  Using eagle-wings as they are very expressive and they match the apollo 11 badge.  I'll make the text solid and have a look at my dither-itis...I am still afflicted...like a bad cold that doesn't want to go away! LOL!

Thank you for the positive input - glad you can see an improvement

 


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skamocore (Level 11 Dolphin) @ 7/30/2009 03:38

Definitely an interesting concept :P

But some other issues that Manupix did not highlight:

The stripes on the text and its background make the text hard to read.
You're still diterhing in areas that don't need to be ditehred. The hand and the bottom part of the suit almost looks like jpeg compression due to so much dithering.
There seems to be too much AAing on the mouse's wings, but yet, there's no AA anywhere else in the image.
Due to the curve of the visor, the mouse's reflection should be more distorted.
I think the starts in the top left should be less evenly spaced.

Other than that, this is a great improvement over previous works. I'm really digging the atmosphere in this. I think this could be an amazing piece with a bit more tweaking.


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Celri (Level 4 Ensign) @ 7/30/2009 03:16

@Manupix

Thank you for the c&c really detailed and very constructive!  Thanks on the suit - was the most difficult LOL!  The image in the visor is indeed a distorted version of the little mouse (I was lazy so there's not too much detail - more a suggestion of a reflection.  It is not the focus of the piece so I left it).  Then there is the issue regarding the wings - am looking at anatomy sketches of wings to see what goes where - if there's time I'll change it otherwise I'll edit it next week and re-post.  I don't like the way they look either.

The little string - well you see, cheese is sacred on the moon and it is forbidden for any of the flying mice to touch it directly for fear of contaminating the source...hence the ceremonial string attached...lol!


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Manupix (Level 11 Godzilla) @ 7/30/2009 02:35

That's cool!

The spacesuit is quite convincing, though I don't understand what I see in Neil's visor: is it the mouse's reflection?

The wings look wrong; I would not understand the piece of string without your caption (maybe the mouse could hold the cheese in its paws?).

Maybe the Earth should be more towards the top, it might make a more balanced composition, and not interfere with the mouse.


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