The title and other test is very nicely done, and surprisingly legible for a small-scale script. the rest unfortunately is under-refined which calls additional attention to how crass it is, undermining the skill the piece could have showcased - I feel like even given an adolescent subject matter, the form of the object and texture of the smoke would have been a place to really show off.
Well, one requires only skill, the other one a lot work too. I usually avoid to work more than 2 or 3 hours on one piece.