any crits before putting it in the gallery

Edited by theguy - 31 May 2007 at 12:11pm

The body looks like it's just metallic play-dough kind of shaped into a humanoid blob. You never want something like that, and if you're making a robot, it's even worse. You should try giving it segments and less curves--make the joints sharply bent and show divisions so it looks more like a robot. The head could also use some more detail; shade and light the mouth instead of making it a line, and give the eyes something more interesting. Little lights, maybe? It'd add a color, but it would also break the monotony and add some life.

Edited by Monkey 'o Doom - 30 May 2007 at 1:19pm

i can hardly see any defining features...  eyes, mouth, etc

nope. it still doesn't look like a "robot" to me. just a random gray guy.

Well basically, they're not quite obvious enough. Pixel sprites on this size scale usually need exaggerated and very obvious features in order to put their point across to the viewer quickly and easily.

Atm your sprite is quite jagged and 'messy' in places. I'm not sure what to suggest, but i'm sure you can figure it out! Good luck.

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[OT]I saw the piece over on pixel, to bad the topic got closed before I got a proper edit in.[/OT]
An edit to show what everyone is talking about. This is designed to be on a light background. The only reason for the need for a bright background is the antenna set it as 1 mid tone colour if you want it to be designed for transparency.

What I have done
I redid the body. Before it was a blob now it looks segmented as you would expect to see for a robot.
The head was reworked. greater emphasis on the eyes and mouth was drawn by isolating them from darker pixels and expanding them. This gives a cute chibi look
The head width was reduced to look more natural and balanced.
As you can probably see the body was the most heavy rework. Use human anatomy to give an idea of how it should look in regards to forms to begin with. Then incorporate more mechanical aspects.


Edited by zeid - 01 June 2007 at 12:43am

(yours)+(mine)=(yours still needs work)
New one looks a bit better in a few ways but...
RAISE THE GOD DAMN CRUTCH!!!
when facing forward do both of your feet face out to the sides? because that is what his do according to this.
I segmented his body as it makes the blocky square like structure of his shape appear more acceptable. Furthermore design wise your robots head doesn't fit without a somewhat segmented body.

is that hard to write [img.][/.img]?

Maybe the image BUTTON doesn't work for you, but the TAGS (just take the periods/full stops out of what metaru posted) will work even for a parapalegic, mentally challenged dwarf rat if it takes the time to use them.

I agree i think there is still more you can take from my edit. The legs in mine are only just an acceptable exaggerated shortness, yours should be longer.

The hips touching the hands looks wrong, it seems almost as though they are joined. Better portray the separations.

The new lighting you put in makes a lot of your character look flat. Mine isn't a good example of how this can be fixed. Really focus a little more on depth.


The main problem comes in the forms. They are really stiff because of the lack of segmentation. This makes your piece look more like a paper weight then a robot.


this is a new edit of your recent version. It deviates from the design less then my previous one. It should give you more of an idea of what direction to go with.

theguy, try clicking the button.

no I tried that (I did the IMG tags right as well) and when I click on the button it still doesnt work it says access denied

I didnt put the IMG tags first I tried the button first didnt work so I tried the IMG tags still didnt work can we just get on with the crits please?

I don't know why, but it just stopped working.

if it doesnt work I will, leave the tags there to prove it doesnt work

Edited by theguy - 04 June 2007 at 9:36am

ok well anyway can I have some crits for it now?

I did make an animation 52 frames of animation but then it all messed up and died and then I just made that... but I will make another but I'm wondering what to do