the curly flourishes on the capitals look waaaaay better than the CapitaL at the EnD of words style you had before.

why does he have a wand?

With this mockup taking a hard turn to the puzzle/quest/adventure sort of game the candle life meters wasn't making much sense. I've changed that to Levels now. Besides, DaVinci lives forever.
I might just use the Rhom picture on this screen but with some other name.

If I put plates and cups on the table will it be distracting?
Does it read the "Last Supper"?






Edited by jalonso - 08 March 2010 at 12:19pm

great project!
i think u should definitely do those plates... maybe some spilled wine and little crumbs of bread aswell .... also id suggest u make the table a bit more narrow, i never imagined it beeing that wide seeing the painting....
the rhombuchoctragfdbejkxolberon obviously needs some work too, but i think its still in a fairly rough state so ´... yeah, shouldnt be much of a problem for iso master jalonso anyway

Overall touchups and plates on the table.

One small thing, bottom right, the Mona Lisa screenshot, I noticed you went with the "GBA Zelda" graphical style. It always annoyed me. The perspective is royally screwed up with that style. The room it self is top-down, yet everything in the room itself is on a 45 degree angle.

Just for kicks and giggles quickly copy/paste Da Vince next to one of the windows, it's going to look like he's laying down. And if you take away the Mona Lisa dialogue and place Da Vince on the bottom, it's going to look like he's walking on the walls.

I've always hated the "Zelda" style because it screws with your mind.

Everything else though, I think it goes without saying, awesomeness!

"you found some UNOBTAINIUM!"

oops, wrong game.

i love this project. how did you decide you wanted to do a game mockup this intense?

update
and DaVincopter

jal, you seriously need to find someone who is good with programing code who can compliment your artistic ying with their technical yang, so you can go start an indie game company!

Treating the copter this way works, right?
With the sail on, it looks like a seashell to me.


Edited by jalonso - 10 March 2010 at 7:12pm

@Jeremy, Are you saying it shouldn't be top-down view but head-on view?
90 degrees is to keep AA to a minimum

Really? You mean you'd seriously make this into a game if you could find someone willing to do it for you?

I don't think your helicopter looks too much like a shell for anyone who's seen the design, and with that translucent sheeting and everything, it's just gorgeous. And what an inspired idea for having a building mini-game. It would be so much fun to scrounge for materials and use collected books to inspire new designs which you could then build!

This is such an impressive sequence of images!
Yes, I think the plates & cups make the table look better; yes I like your latest garden maze; no I don't think the 'look down into a box' perspective is too much to ask for in order to reap all the obvious benefits; ha ha, 'book of engineering'!; Mona needs a more obvious quirk to her smile, unless she has more than one portrait and this one is annoyed because she hasn't gotten what she wants yet (you've made this such a believable mockup that I can easily imagine this as an extended sequence, especially since you could put more than one thing after the ellipses in the dialogue box, and players would need to bring her many things before she'd be ready to be painted!); and I still can't get over that cathedral interior.

Oh, and casting Leo as an adventuring dude is apparently not too far out of an idea!

Oh...my...DOG!
I love that 'Vincopter'! Definitely the level of detail (especially in a GUI) that I would hope for as a programmer!
(trying hard not to swoon here and embarrass you)

I'm gonna be so sad to see this project finished!

Looks good ;)
Only thing I don't like it the zoomed words, and it takes away from the rest of the screen.

I'll add to that to say that I looked at this twice before I noticed the Vitruvian Man. I suppose it's a balancing act to not have him overpower/drown out the text, but I think he's maybe *too* subtle currently.

I don't know if it's been said before, but shouldn't Mona be smiling a bit more?  

I like the newest building a lot. I really like the roof tiles. I think the ground is a bit bland, maybe make it look more like streets. Looking good. 

Drawing a bit of a blank with what the second item piece should be.
No grass in Renaissance Italy, apparently. I have the chest already, the others are some stone urn and some fancy kind of box. Ideas glad taken.
Also a fountain...dunno if it fits.



Edited by jalonso - 14 March 2010 at 10:03pm

It sure does! This building has been ditched for this project. Too Colonial looking.

Update: Includes trees...couldn't help it >.<
Kinda works for Leo's house and landing pad screen to have some green.

Love the trees!

Love the fountain.
The little urn item would look more like an urn if it had a small lid on top with a knob handle (which would also make it more obvious that it was something to open).

Love the cathedral.
If the ground is still WIP, then nevermind, but the cracks at the sides of the cathedral look drawn on, not part of the stone, especially since they span more than one stone tile with no shift (as if the two tiles were one piece).

Love the environment for Leo's house.

Too much love for now, gonna go hate on something.

:P Your working habits are such that it is difficult to critique because it's hard to say what's a placeholder and what isn't.

I am so in love with the build screen. But whatever the purple-y stuff is, it looks uncomfortable like dog poop =/ I'm immature though. Take with grain of salt.

Lol mozzie...


I love Da Vinci, he was gay, just like me <3

No one knows for sure. Historians argue on both sides, but there's no actual proof that he was gay.

The only reason people thought he might be gay is because of his work. In that time, his art subjects (naked men) were completely unheard of and put him on bad grounds with the church. But, when you think about it, they would have had the same reaction if his Virtruvian Man was a naked woman instead.

But does it really matter? Nonetheless, he's still an awesome historical figure.

I think the side view of the character is a little off perspective compared to the bird's eye view of the environment. idk, it may be fine.

Have you ever used (semi) transparent layers?
That might be your color issue... dunno.
Agree with kenpokis about side views.  It makes it look like a more horizontal view.  Save and quit button do need to stand out more.