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I made a contribution for Pixeljoint, my first iso piece in a while. C&C please.

Edit: fixed.



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Quote Shark Replybullet Posted: 29 September 2005 at 2:53am
that link is f*cked.
for people that dont wanna spend time copying and pasting this is his
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Quote sedgemonkey Replybullet Posted: 30 September 2005 at 8:45am

It's a fine start... just not much going on in this scene.  I would ditch the doors on the open sides.

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Quote leel Replybullet Posted: 30 September 2005 at 2:02pm

hmm shark why is the pic you posted black and white?   the real one is in color...

yes, I agree about the doors.  Great job on the crack by the chair - looks cool.  What else are you planning to add? because that's quite plain

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Quote Monkey 'o Doom Replybullet Posted: 30 September 2005 at 3:35pm

'cause irfanview killed it when I converted to PNG the first time.

Thanx for the crits, all.

 

Edit: Added desk, room #, took out door.

Anyone have ideas for the closet door(top-left)?



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Quote Shark Replybullet Posted: 01 October 2005 at 4:22am
leel, the original link was to a black and white version, but the link
didnt work so i posted the image to save people time copying and
pasting, since then he has edited his post, to a colour version.

monkey o d, i think the window needs work when do u see a big-
assed frame inside the room?, i think there needs to be more
details, ie tv, bookshelf (look around your own room for inspiration),
i think u shood also remove the door nearest to us.
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Quote Monkey 'o Doom Replybullet Posted: 01 October 2005 at 5:12pm

I put the desk in w/ chair, but I think the door'll have to stay. I spent 45 mins taking out the other one. Also fixed the window a bit. I'll look into the rest of the crits, too.

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Quote kr_defaultspost Replybullet Posted: 01 October 2005 at 11:21pm
its going good
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Quote inkspot Replybullet Posted: 02 October 2005 at 9:17am
never seen the chair larger that the desk. Your work is too unproportional, that makes it suck.
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Quote Monkey 'o Doom Replybullet Posted: 02 October 2005 at 12:27pm

Next update here. I largened(is that a word?)  the desk, moved the hole in the plaster, and added a bookshelf, as well as fixed the window more.

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Quote Shark Replybullet Posted: 02 October 2005 at 2:13pm
better! now how about some books, plant life, a wall light?
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Quote Monkey 'o Doom Replybullet Posted: 02 October 2005 at 3:15pm

Sure, right away!

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I added the books & a picture, but I can't seem to draw a good circle on the wall for the light, and the plant seemed like it wouldn't fit in the picture very well.

Any more crits?



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Quote Shark Replybullet Posted: 04 October 2005 at 2:39pm
a bin by the desk, hang a light on left of bookcase.  i dont like the picture, i duno this pic still seems a little empty
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Quote Monkey 'o Doom Replybullet Posted: 05 October 2005 at 4:42pm

Here's the next update, I'm not sure what to to pick for the recycle bin, though. If anyone has any more crits, I'd love to hear them.

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Quote pixelblink Replybullet Posted: 05 October 2005 at 4:58pm
How about some new wallpaper? or paint? Also, that floor doesn't jive for me. It's hard to make out what it's supposed to be made of.... tiles? metal? carpet?
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Quote Monkey 'o Doom Replybullet Posted: 08 January 2006 at 5:09pm

Fixxored!!1111 lolzorses

The floor is tiles, I fixed it now. Any more C&C?


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Quote jalonso Replybullet Posted: 08 January 2006 at 10:47pm
You might want to highlight the surreal "cloud space" outside the door and window by making the window size larger and move the picture beside the shelves, leave the sign over the door. Then re-do those fugly clouds. Looks like all the c+c's made you stray from the concept you were going for at first.
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Quote Monkey 'o Doom Replybullet Posted: 29 January 2006 at 6:15am

yadayada

Fixed up the clouds, moved the picture.


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Quote jalonso Replybullet Posted: 29 January 2006 at 9:43pm
Add some color to the walls any color other than that one and you're done. The wall color now is from the template.
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Quote Larwick Replybullet Posted: 09 February 2006 at 12:11pm
OK, i might be a bit late, but howabout some paper strewn out of the toppled bin? Hmm, i'm not keen on the computer chair... Also, along with the walls being changed you should edit the doors, the outlines at the moment are far too bold for your piece.

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Quote Aleiav Replybullet Posted: 09 February 2006 at 9:24pm
How about a highlight line on the bookcase like the desk has?
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Quote Monkey 'o Doom Replybullet Posted: 04 March 2006 at 3:52pm

Updated! I might submit this version.


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Quote jalonso Replybullet Posted: 04 March 2006 at 10:56pm
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