Pixel Joint Forum: Critique on mockup, please?

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   I decided that I would make a monochromatic mockup. This is the enlarged version:

So, how is it? Critique and comments are welcome. Oh, by the way, the order left-right, up-down is title screen, opening cutscene, meteor busting a ship, middle cutscene of entering the atmosphere, boss fight vs. a fighter, boss fight vs. a tank, the end, the end cutscene, the screen where it shows your score, and the Retry? screen. You are the meteor and you move only up and down (or left and right near the end) and you try to cause as much damage as possible before exploding as you hit the earth.

Edited by MrSmiley - 06 August 2009 at 4:47pm

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MrSmiley Seaman Joined: 11 July 2009 Online Status: Offline Posts: 24	Topic: Critique on mockup, please? Posted: 06 August 2009 at 4:46pm
	I decided that I would make a monochromatic mockup. This is the enlarged version: So, how is it? Critique and comments are welcome. Oh, by the way, the order left-right, up-down is title screen, opening cutscene, meteor busting a ship, middle cutscene of entering the atmosphere, boss fight vs. a fighter, boss fight vs. a tank, the end, the end cutscene, the screen where it shows your score, and the Retry? screen. You are the meteor and you move only up and down (or left and right near the end) and you try to cause as much damage as possible before exploding as you hit the earth. Edited by MrSmiley - 06 August 2009 at 4:47pm
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A.B. Lazer Commander Joined: 21 July 2007 Online Status: Offline Posts: 310	Posted: 06 August 2009 at 5:17pm
	With 1-bit color you don't have colors to suggest to viewer what thing is what. For exampe you have no blue for sky, so you place flying planne on it or draw horizon line. You don't have green for trees, so you should draw the tree with a form that should be obvious for viewer - this is a form of tree. And so on. Is it enemy, bonus or just scenery? If it is explained that way that viewer understands what it is - it is good graphics, because in the game player will interact with these drawn objects and should know what he looks at immediately. So look as if you're looking at all these for first time - do you understand everything? Edited by A.B. Lazer - 06 August 2009 at 5:18pm
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Iron Midshipman Joined: 28 July 2009 Online Status: Offline Posts: 46	Posted: 07 August 2009 at 5:45am
	I see a plane... And uh... uh... The retry buttons.
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inphy Commander Joined: 24 June 2014 Online Status: Offline Posts: 116	Posted: 07 August 2009 at 10:34am
	Why is someone watering a plant from a tap in the "end cutscene" picture? :) Here's a quick edit that hopefully illustrates A.B. Lazer's point. You also don't need the score popup. Or the excessive hud. Or all that shading. The text also bothered me.
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MrSmiley Seaman Joined: 11 July 2009 Online Status: Offline Posts: 24	Posted: 08 August 2009 at 8:49am
	Well, no offense, but your side meteor isn't very good. I guess I should try a better explosion and stuff.
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ellie-is Commander Joined: 12 September 2021 Online Status: Offline Posts: 706	Posted: 08 August 2009 at 9:39am
	Dude, he was just showing you how you could do stuff. His meteor is better than yours :/ But you should listen to Lazer.
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