Like zera said, it has some kind of "craving for soil" effect, as if she had the sudden idea to smash her face on the ground...

And something else makes me feel like that: her posture just before falling, as if she was in a falling stance. I think before falling you should add one or two frames in which she loses her "idle" stance and then begin to fall a bit more naturally...

Besides of that, I like the charadesign a lot :D
Nice work.

I think her body should bounce a little when it hits the ground

The body jumps too much when the knees first start buckling and she clutches her chest.

Also i'd say that her hand is clutching the wrong side of her chest (or is it her arm she's grabbing?), but since its a sprite, one way or another she'd be wrong :\. Still, assuming to the right is the main direction, you may want to fix it. If it's her arm then you can ignore this :B

lol fine, FINE, you win on that one :P

as for the frames, i dont think you need more, but looking at it again, she doesnt begin falling until her hand's on her chest. Have her slouching down to the bent position during her arm's movement towards the chest, rather than it jumping to it when her hand reaches her heart

Edited by Zeratanus - 12 March 2011 at 4:44pm

I changed the head a little, it's still a faceplant, but maybe it doesn't look so crude now.

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Edited by cure - 28 March 2011 at 4:27pm

My main concern in that mockup is the anatomy of the wolf/fox-ish thing. That'll need some big anatomical reworking, as it just looks lumpy and odd at the moment.

The grass also may be a bit too busy in the mockup, but cant tell with the new one

It does have a nice, cohesive color scheme though. Everything's colors are looking real good together while still being easy to distinguish different objects/characters.

Changed the transition tile slightly - I like it myself now and chances are that I wont alter it - at least I wont make big changes. Opinions?

Cool, the new ones look alot better!

Well done, the simplistic grass is clearly waaay better than your overly noisy one. Personally I like the monchrome dirt better, The highlighted one looks like a bunch of scrotums, Maybe try putting some rocks in there for the highlight?

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Edited by Relix - 16 April 2011 at 8:38am

I'm more of pastry man, so it was awfu.. - erhm.

I'll fix the hat, it's supposed to bounce up, so it also means that it won't be on so tightly.

I think I should change the greens too, but dunno if that's needed anymore..?

Thanks n_n

Really liking the new colors.

I'm not sure, since im not looking at frame by frame, and it could be because it touches the hair making an illusion, but it looks like the upper left arm curves when it pulls back.

The idle does look good now (no more odd bumping around) but the speed makes moves at makes it feel like the game's going to be pretty fast paced. It very well may be, I just want to make sure you know the impression it gives.


'Fraid i cant give much input on the tiles. I don't really have any experience with those, but they look pretty good to me.

well you -should- draw your own. It's not too hard - use references, but dont copy them exactly. That there looks good, though its a bit odd that the left side is green while the right is blue. The right side, with its blues and grey-blues looks more like a mountain, the left side looks a bit moss covered.

And I think a single, slowly moving background is a good plan. Now that I think of it, Rocket Knight Adventures, one of my favorite Genesis games, uses that for the first level (at least, pretty sure), though it's a pretty long image so eventually the stuff you see in the background at first does go off camera. That may be something to consider if you have any background layers between the mountain and the play area

I... uh... are we speaking in code now? I'm completely baffled by that, Elk

sorry nevermind that, i was on drugs when i wrote that

Clown cows and gerbils in hats...hmm...

I got an freaky idea!!

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Oh and the mountain, maybe I'll redo it without tracing.


Edited by Relix - 22 April 2011 at 12:52am

if youre intending to use that last image, consider either raising or lowering the darkest section of the sky, because right now that section looks like its balancing on the mountain top.

Ah, I see what you mean, but I'm gonna redo the whole thing again, maybe.

New stuff;

Sorry, I don't understand what you mean with the hat, care to clarify?

And I'll darken the colors on the tree - later.

And the hat is supposed to be wool cap (why she wears it in summer, I've no idea), which come in many shapes and forms and it seems that the english speaking people have wrong idea what's a wool cap.

Here's the closest I could find;


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I tried a slightly different angle and style on the hair than before.


Edited by Relix - 30 April 2011 at 6:33am

I really love the clouds. A few suggestions though: Try to make them a bit more flat on the bottom, some of them look as "bubbly" on the top as on the bottom. The clouds further away are darker, but things that are very far away tend to be brighter, or at least blend in with the colour of the sky. Right now the distant clouds are a different hue, which is confusing. I think the distant clouds should be somewhere between the white clouds and the background colour, realistically. Also, the dark edges make them look kind of close (again, things far away tend to blur into the background)

Finally, I would probably add some shades and shadows to the clouds. I mean, it depends on your style of drawing. A really cartoony style, like Super Mario, would work well with absolutely white clouds. But when the moon and the mountain has so much detail, I'm expecting the clouds to have some depth as well.

Everyone might not agree with that.

<- I think I'll do proper water animation instead ...

I just don't know what I should do with the clouds, but I'll try to think up something.

And I've been meaning to desaturate the background...I always forgot.

For the water, I dunno what the term is either, I just though it'd look cool.

Is the sign readable or should I make it larger + color it differently?

And next up, two more trees and the first enemy.

The Portuguese site that I attend on pixel art has a low level and I think this tutorial is well explained.

http://bit.ly/e9TtQK