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Monkey 'o Doom
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994 |
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Edit: fixed. Edited by Monkey 'o Doom |
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Shark
Commander ![]() ![]() a.k.a. Feron Joined: 02 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2136 |
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that link is f*cked.
for people that dont wanna spend time copying and pasting this is his image: ![]() Edited by Shark |
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sedgemonkey
Admiral ![]() ![]() Joined: 07 April 2021 Online Status: Offline Posts: 1669 |
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It's a fine start... just not much going on in this scene. I would ditch the doors on the open sides. |
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leel
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 29 June 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3001 |
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hmm shark why is the pic you posted black and white? the real one is in color... yes, I agree about the doors. Great job on the crack by the chair - looks cool |
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Monkey 'o Doom
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994 |
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'cause irfanview killed it when I converted to PNG the first time. Thanx for the crits, all.
Edit: Added desk, room #, took out door. Anyone have ideas for the closet door(top-left)? Edited by Monkey 'o Doom |
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Shark
Commander ![]() ![]() a.k.a. Feron Joined: 02 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2136 |
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leel, the original link was to a black and white version, but the link
didnt work so i posted the image to save people time copying and pasting, since then he has edited his post, to a colour version. monkey o d, i think the window needs work when do u see a big- assed frame inside the room?, i think there needs to be more details, ie tv, bookshelf (look around your own room for inspiration), i think u shood also remove the door nearest to us. |
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Monkey 'o Doom
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994 |
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I put the desk in w/ chair, but I think the door'll have to stay. I spent 45 mins taking out the other one. |
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kr_defaultspost
Seaman ![]() Joined: 01 October 2005 Location: Australia Online Status: Offline Posts: 6 |
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its going good
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inkspot
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 05 May 2005 Location: Estonia Online Status: Offline Posts: 452 |
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never seen the chair larger that the desk. Your work is too unproportional, that makes it suck.
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Monkey 'o Doom
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994 |
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Next update here. I largened(is that a word?) the desk, moved the hole in the plaster, and added a bookshelf, as well as fixed the window more. |
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Shark
Commander ![]() ![]() a.k.a. Feron Joined: 02 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2136 |
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better! now how about some books, plant life, a wall light?
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Monkey 'o Doom
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Sure, right away! eDiT: I added the books & a picture, but I can't seem to draw a good circle on the wall for the light, and the plant seemed like it wouldn't fit in the picture very well. Any more crits? Edited by Monkey 'o Doom |
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Shark
Commander ![]() ![]() a.k.a. Feron Joined: 02 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2136 |
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a bin by the desk, hang a light on left of bookcase. i dont like the picture, i duno this pic still seems a little empty
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Monkey 'o Doom
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994 |
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Here's the next update, I'm not sure what to to pick for the recycle bin, though. If anyone has any more crits, I'd love to hear them. |
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pixelblink
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How about some new wallpaper? or paint? Also, that floor doesn't jive for me. It's hard to make out what it's supposed to be made of.... tiles? metal? carpet?
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Monkey 'o Doom
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994 |
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The floor is tiles, I fixed it now. Any more C&C? |
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jalonso
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You might want to highlight the surreal "cloud space" outside the door
and window by making the window size larger and move the picture beside
the shelves, leave the sign over the door. Then re-do those fugly
clouds. Looks like all the c+c's made you stray from the concept you
were going for at first.
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Monkey 'o Doom
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994 |
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Fixed up the clouds, moved the picture. |
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jalonso
Admiral ![]() ![]() Joined: 29 November 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 13537 |
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Add some color to the walls any color other than that one and you're done. The wall color now is from the template.
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Larwick
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OK, i might be a bit late, but howabout some paper strewn out of the toppled bin? Hmm, i'm not keen on the computer chair... Also, along with the walls being changed you should edit the doors, the outlines at the moment are far too bold for your piece.
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Aleiav
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How about a highlight line on the bookcase like the desk has?
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Monkey 'o Doom
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994 |
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Updated! I might submit this version. |
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jalonso
Admiral ![]() ![]() Joined: 29 November 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 13537 |
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submit, submit
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