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Here we go. My contribution to The Joint.
I'm not yet happy with the result, maybe it needs more detail, or some fix in the colors....crits welcome.

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Revenant Seaman Joined: 07 March 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 7	Topic: Saw Room Posted: 19 March 2006 at 11:44am
	Here we go. My contribution to The Joint. I'm not yet happy with the result, maybe it needs more detail, or some fix in the colors....crits welcome. Edited by Revenant
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PixelSnader Commander Not a troll! Joined: 05 June 2014 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3194	Posted: 19 March 2006 at 12:01pm
	it's looking really clean, try to add some poo stains and stuff near the toilet, rust arounmd the pipes, more obvious cracks in the floor, and some dents and rust in the door =)
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Saiklor Commander Joined: 16 May 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 230	Posted: 19 March 2006 at 12:59pm
	I haven't seen the movie but I HAVE seen a white tiled floor, and they usually have a cast of some colour, white, blue, pink, green. This would appear mostly in the shadows. also, the guy sitting, his arm is too short unless his shoulder is uncomfortably high, which is isn't showing as it's not covering part of his face. Make a bend in his arm to make it the right length.
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Revenant Seaman Joined: 07 March 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 7	Posted: 19 March 2006 at 1:40pm
	Thanks for the comments, I tried some of the suggestions: the door, floor, pipes and toilete is a bit more dirty, but about the arm of the sitting guy, i've choosen to raise the shoulder, and made a longer arm. Maybe the door details are too strong, but I want to keep the quantity of the colors controlled, dunno...should I change it?
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Dra_chan Commander Joined: 20 February 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 628	Posted: 19 March 2006 at 2:37pm
	That movie was great! The grey things besides of the guy in the floor are shadows? They should be smaller. And also, they guys should have the chain around the ankle.
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jalonso Admiral Joined: 29 November 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 13537	Posted: 19 March 2006 at 10:33pm
	The blood around the head is too pointy, it should be flowy.
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Larwick Commander Joined: 18 July 2024 Online Status: Offline Posts: 4015	Posted: 20 March 2006 at 4:25am
	Tone down the saturation in the people, and was the insane killer guy wearing GREEN SHORTS!? Didn't notice that... Um yes, i think it all looks too light. In the movie it's dark, dank, and clostraphobic [sp?]. The walls were more brown than white ... i thought. Nice one so far though.

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Revenant Seaman Joined: 07 March 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 7	Posted: 20 March 2006 at 9:40am
	Thanks for all comments and crits, I'll try to implement them all. Larwick, the shorts was gray, but since almost the entire room is gray, I decided to make it the same green of the door, but you're right, maybe it makes the scene more "happy", what absolutely is not the intention. jalonso, I'll change that, with pointy blood in the floor, it seems that he died with a concussion of the head in the ground, and it's not what happened. Dra_chan, yeah, the movie is great indeed, one of my favourites ...about the shadows, what you meant? The only dark things near the guys are the pipes and the craks/dirty of the walls/ground, maybe I dont make this elements as explicit as it should be :( btw, sorry for my bad english ^^
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Souly Commander Joined: 13 December 2020 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2451	Posted: 20 March 2006 at 10:21am
	The people look too clean, try making them a bit grungy. Also, the toilet looks odd... Edited by Souly
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alkaline Commander Joined: 25 August 2020 Online Status: Offline Posts: 868	Posted: 20 March 2006 at 12:38pm
	The toilet seat part isn't in exact isometric perspective with everything else. I like what you've done, but yeah, they have spotless white shirts on.
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Revenant Seaman Joined: 07 March 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 7	Posted: 20 March 2006 at 10:27pm
	Woah, thank you all guys, with your help I'm every time more satisfied with my work...here's the last update: same objects: chains, box removed: As Larwick sugested, I lowed the saturation of the lil dudes and turn the shorts of the "corpse" back to the original color About jalonso's sugestion, here's the "flowly" blood, a loot better indeed For Souly and alkaline comments, here's the dirty shirts, though the toilet was really a problem...actually I have no idea in how to make it seem better ...and to be honest, I made a copy of it's shape from the "corner" template, since I'm not yet able to make good round isometric things...I think i'm a outlaw now About the chains that Dra_chan remembered, here they are and I've chosen to remove the box, because there was too much elements in the scene when I added the chains, and I realized that it wasn't essential as the other objects
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jalonso Admiral Joined: 29 November 2022 Online Status: Offline Posts: 13537	Posted: 20 March 2006 at 10:37pm
	Looking great. I think you're almost done now, but first try to make your own toilet. "and to be honest, I made a copy of it's shape from the "corner" template" (Don't do that again, you can do it, its an oval and a box) I commend you for coloring the outer wall (frame) part, this is often ommited (me). ps. For your next pixelart I suggest your own original avatar.
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Revenant Seaman Joined: 07 March 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 7	Posted: 20 March 2006 at 11:34pm
	Yeah, you're right about the toilet, i'm feeling so ashamed lol "ps. For your next pixelart I suggest your own original avatar." ...actually it was my intention, though I have no idea what to do...maybe I'm in a personality crisis! I really dont want to think, think, think, and finish by making a pixel art cube and for the outter wall, you mean the original room template color? thanks again for all the help and patience
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