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Fugitive
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Nines on the street
Hearts stop before they hit the street
People run in fear as it becomes clear
NO ONE WILL BE SPARED
Mad man on the run
Blasting people just for fun//
As a call to the swat to take some action Edited by Fugitive |
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Larwick
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Hmm, your rhyming and syllables seem very random. I'd fix that.
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Fugitive
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Originally posted by Larwick
Hmm, your rhyming and syllables seem very random. I'd fix that. Your the first one to say that about it... |
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Larwick
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Originally posted by Fugitive
Originally posted by Larwick
Hmm, your rhyming and syllables seem very random. I'd fix that. Your the first one to say that about it... Interesting. Well, let me elaborate. Your rhyming goes like this: 1 1 1 1 X X X 2 2 2 X X Good luck. |
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Fugitive
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 28 June 2021 Location: United Kingdom Online Status: Offline Posts: 466 |
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Originally posted by Larwick
Originally posted by Fugitive
Originally posted by Larwick
Hmm, your rhyming and syllables seem very random. I'd fix that. Your the first one to say that about it... Interesting. Well, let me elaborate. Your rhyming goes like this: 1 1 1 1 X X X 2 2 2 X X Good luck. It's my first poem/ rap so if anyone can make it better or add to it that would be great... |
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Aleiav
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I'd try rapping along to beats, if you haven't done this. Just get some rap instrumentals of songs and start there. The music helps timing.
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Fugitive
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Originally posted by Aleiav
I'd try rapping along to beats, if you haven't done this. Just get some rap instrumentals of songs and start there. The music helps timing. Right! I'll try that.... Could anyone try adding some more to it ? The subject is Grand Theft Auto |
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Skull
Commander ![]() ![]() PJ Pioneer Joined: 03 August 2019 Online Status: Offline Posts: 1521 |
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Originally posted by Fugitive The subject is Grand Theft Auto ![]() Nines on the street - Purple Nines... GTA3? |
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Fugitive
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 28 June 2021 Location: United Kingdom Online Status: Offline Posts: 466 |
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Originally posted by Skull
Originally posted by Fugitive The subject is Grand Theft Auto ![]() Nines on the street - Purple Nines... GTA3? or Nines as in 9mm Handgun ... |
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Monkey 'o Doom
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Fugitive, how do your posts make me click them multiple times to get the new posts icon to stay gone? Do you delete and repost?
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Fugitive
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Originally posted by Monkey 'o Doom
Fugitive, how do your posts make me click them multiple times to get the new posts icon to stay gone? Do you delete and repost? Yeah! It's better then double posting... Sorry |
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Monkey 'o Doom
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Oh! Well, I'd appreciate it if you wouldn't; we comment in time.
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pixelblink
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Originally posted by Monkey 'o Doom
we comment in time. and space! |
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Fugitive
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Originally posted by Monkey 'o Doom
Oh! Well, I'd appreciate it if you wouldn't; we comment in time. It will never happen again...
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Aleiav
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Originally posted by Fugitive Right! I'll try that.... Could anyone try adding some more to it ? The subject is Grand Theft Auto If we added more to it, it wouldn't be your rap, now would it? You should do it on your own. |
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Pixel_Outlaw
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Leave the police alone they are good folk.
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Fugitive
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Originally posted by Pixel_Outlaw
Leave the police alone they are good folk. I think the police do a great job.
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Brian the Great
Commander ![]() ![]() RED! Joined: 03 March 2005 Location: United Kingdom Online Status: Offline Posts: 2221 |
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Originally posted by pixelblink
Originally posted by Monkey 'o Doom
we comment in time. and space! For that is the defenition of our commentinuum! |
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Fugitive
Commander ![]() ![]() Joined: 28 June 2021 Location: United Kingdom Online Status: Offline Posts: 466 |
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Originally posted by Aleiav
Originally posted by Fugitive Right! I'll try that.... Could anyone try adding some more to it ? The subject is Grand Theft Auto If we added more to it, it wouldn't be your rap, now would it? You should do it on your own. It could be a Collab with some pixel art stills to go with it... |
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