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Quote Shann Replybullet Topic: "Bathroom" -- New to this, please C&C
    Posted: 20 July 2005 at 1:16am

Hi, this is my first ever pixel-art, it's inspired by my friends who say i love bathing...

 

 

 

 

 

Please C&C, apparently not good enough to be accepted yet. Thanks.

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Quote Ensellitis Replybullet Posted: 20 July 2005 at 1:59am
First thing that sticks out is the tub.  It looks really flat, like a cardboard cutout.  Try doing some shading to it and use a lighter outline to show the pertruding areas. The shower head also needs some sort of shadin, or even an outline to it.   Also, the back wall where the tub is has no bevel to the times, well a little, but not enough to be seen.

Is that grey square a tv?  It needs something to identify what it is.  Other than that, maybe some shadows and more texturing.

Looking good though, keep up the work!
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Quote Monstara Replybullet Posted: 20 July 2005 at 2:23am
If this is your first, it's great.
The first thing that strikes me is that the tub looks like it is about to fall back (i.e. the far side is lower than the closer one.
Apart from that - more detail :)

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Quote Shann Replybullet Posted: 20 July 2005 at 8:42am

Hey guys thanks for the comments! Appreciates it!
Yes it's a tv, plasma tv infact. That's y it's kinda "inside the wall". I will work on the details and post up again.

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Quote Saiklor Replybullet Posted: 20 July 2005 at 4:28pm
there's a funny visual thing going on with the shelf on the lefthand wall, it lines up precisely with the line of the floor and it makes my brain go "ahck!" maybe just move it up 1 pixel or down 1 pixel? or add something below it to make this optical illusion go away.
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Quote pixelblink Replybullet Posted: 20 July 2005 at 4:42pm
I completey agree with everyones comments so far. Also, this is a bathroom... shouldn't there be a toilet and sink? Also, if you're going to have a bathoom with a big screen tv, why not have a luxurious bathtub... a jacuzzi would be the shizznizzle yo
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Quote Garage Inc. Replybullet Posted: 20 July 2005 at 9:41pm
Also, why is he/she, just standing there, even if you don't animate it, it should look like the person is doing something, like putting on the slippers or looking through the cabinet or something. For a first piece, great, but it could still use some work.
For every second spent wondering if you can do something, you could spend 2 seconds doing it.
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Quote Monstara Replybullet Posted: 21 July 2005 at 6:35am
Certainly make the screen flicker. Always works effectively :D
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Quote Shann Replybullet Posted: 21 July 2005 at 8:54am

Originally posted by Saiklor

there's a funny visual thing going on with the shelf on the lefthand wall, it lines up precisely with the line of the floor and it makes my brain go "ahck!" maybe just move it up 1 pixel or down 1 pixel? or add something below it to make this optical illusion go away.

oh i didnt realise it until u mentioned, thanks! 

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Quote Shann Replybullet Posted: 21 July 2005 at 9:02am

Originally posted by pixelblink

I completey agree with everyones comments so far. Also, this is a bathroom... shouldn't there be a toilet and sink? Also, if you're going to have a bathoom with a big screen tv, why not have a luxurious bathtub... a jacuzzi would be the shizznizzle yo

yes thought of doing it as a jacuzzi actually, guess i have to work harder on it rather then just a tub... Why isnt there a toilet and sink? well.. my initial idea was that the bathtub/jacuzzi will actually replace the sofa in the room... so i didnt think there is a need for those.

i think i need to do some major work to this, i'll think abt it or mebbe i can have another version of it with the toilet n sink.  we'll see.... thanks!

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Quote Shann Replybullet Posted: 21 July 2005 at 9:05am

Originally posted by Garage Inc.

Also, why is he/she, just standing there, even if you don't animate it, it should look like the person is doing something, like putting on the slippers or looking through the cabinet or something. For a first piece, great, but it could still use some work.

Oh yes! I think i completely miss this point! Thanks for pointing out!

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Quote Shann Replybullet Posted: 21 July 2005 at 9:07am

Originally posted by Monstara

Certainly make the screen flicker. Always works effectively :D

Flicker? those noise/static effect? great idea thanks guys! 

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Quote spymp3 Replybullet Posted: 21 July 2005 at 4:06pm
perfect for you first time!realy
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Quote Monstara Replybullet Posted: 22 July 2005 at 1:00am
yeah, I meant static. But if you like you can put in porn lol
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