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Shann
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Topic: "Bathroom" -- New to this, please C&C
Posted: 20 July 2005 at 1:16am

Hi, this is my first ever pixel-art, it's inspired by my friends who say i love bathing...

Please C&C, apparently not good enough to be accepted yet. Thanks.

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Ensellitis
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Posted: 20 July 2005 at 1:59am

First thing that sticks out is the tub. It looks really flat, like a cardboard cutout. Try doing some shading to it and use a lighter outline to show the pertruding areas. The shower head also needs some sort of shadin, or even an outline to it. Also, the back wall where the tub is has no bevel to the times, well a little, but not enough to be seen.

Is that grey square a tv? It needs something to identify what it is. Other than that, maybe some shadows and more texturing.

Looking good though, keep up the work!

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Posted: 20 July 2005 at 2:23am

If this is your first, it's great.
The first thing that strikes me is that the tub looks like it is about to fall back (i.e. the far side is lower than the closer one.
Apart from that - more detail :)

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Shann
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Posted: 20 July 2005 at 8:42am

Hey guys thanks for the comments! Appreciates it!
Yes it's a tv, plasma tv infact. That's y it's kinda "inside the wall". I will work on the details and post up again.

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Saiklor
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Posted: 20 July 2005 at 4:28pm

there's a funny visual thing going on with the shelf on the lefthand wall, it lines up precisely with the line of the floor and it makes my brain go "ahck!" maybe just move it up 1 pixel or down 1 pixel? or add something below it to make this optical illusion go away.

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Posted: 20 July 2005 at 4:42pm

I completey agree with everyones comments so far. Also, this is a bathroom... shouldn't there be a toilet and sink? Also, if you're going to have a bathoom with a big screen tv, why not have a luxurious bathtub... a jacuzzi would be the shizznizzle yo

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Garage Inc.
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Posted: 20 July 2005 at 9:41pm

Also, why is he/she, just standing there, even if you don't animate it, it should look like the person is doing something, like putting on the slippers or looking through the cabinet or something. For a first piece, great, but it could still use some work.

For every second spent wondering if you can do something, you could spend 2 seconds doing it.

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Posted: 21 July 2005 at 6:35am

Certainly make the screen flicker. Always works effectively :D

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Posted: 21 July 2005 at 8:54am

Originally posted by Saiklor

there's a funny visual thing going on with the shelf on the lefthand wall, it lines up precisely with the line of the floor and it makes my brain go "ahck!" maybe just move it up 1 pixel or down 1 pixel? or add something below it to make this optical illusion go away.

oh i didnt realise it until u mentioned, thanks!

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Posted: 21 July 2005 at 9:02am

Originally posted by pixelblink

I completey agree with everyones comments so far. Also, this is a bathroom... shouldn't there be a toilet and sink? Also, if you're going to have a bathoom with a big screen tv, why not have a luxurious bathtub... a jacuzzi would be the shizznizzle yo

yes thought of doing it as a jacuzzi actually, guess i have to work harder on it rather then just a tub... Why isnt there a toilet and sink? well.. my initial idea was that the bathtub/jacuzzi will actually replace the sofa in the room... so i didnt think there is a need for those.

i think i need to do some major work to this, i'll think abt it or mebbe i can have another version of it with the toilet n sink. we'll see.... thanks!

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Posted: 21 July 2005 at 9:05am

Originally posted by Garage Inc.

Also, why is he/she, just standing there, even if you don't animate it, it should look like the person is doing something, like putting on the slippers or looking through the cabinet or something. For a first piece, great, but it could still use some work.

Oh yes! I think i completely miss this point! Thanks for pointing out!

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Posted: 21 July 2005 at 9:07am

Originally posted by Monstara

Certainly make the screen flicker. Always works effectively :D

Flicker? those noise/static effect? great idea thanks guys!

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Posted: 21 July 2005 at 4:06pm

perfect for you first time!realy

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Posted: 22 July 2005 at 1:00am

yeah, I meant static. But if you like you can put in porn lol

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Shann Seaman Joined: 15 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 6	Topic: "Bathroom" -- New to this, please C&C Posted: 20 July 2005 at 1:16am
	Hi, this is my first ever pixel-art, it's inspired by my friends who say i love bathing... Please C&C, apparently not good enough to be accepted yet. Thanks.
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Ensellitis Commander Joined: 19 June 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 10099	Posted: 20 July 2005 at 1:59am
	First thing that sticks out is the tub. It looks really flat, like a cardboard cutout. Try doing some shading to it and use a lighter outline to show the pertruding areas. The shower head also needs some sort of shadin, or even an outline to it. Also, the back wall where the tub is has no bevel to the times, well a little, but not enough to be seen. Is that grey square a tv? It needs something to identify what it is. Other than that, maybe some shadows and more texturing. Looking good though, keep up the work!
	ಠ_ಠ There's a pubic hair on my keyboard. What the f**k?? I "mow the lawn" so it's not mine. Gross.
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Monstara Commander Joined: 01 July 2005 Location: Bulgaria Online Status: Offline Posts: 179	Posted: 20 July 2005 at 2:23am
	If this is your first, it's great. The first thing that strikes me is that the tub looks like it is about to fall back (i.e. the far side is lower than the closer one. Apart from that - more detail :)
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Shann Seaman Joined: 15 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 6	Posted: 20 July 2005 at 8:42am
	Hey guys thanks for the comments! Appreciates it! Yes it's a tv, plasma tv infact. That's y it's kinda "inside the wall". I will work on the details and post up again.
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Saiklor Commander Joined: 16 May 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 230	Posted: 20 July 2005 at 4:28pm
	there's a funny visual thing going on with the shelf on the lefthand wall, it lines up precisely with the line of the floor and it makes my brain go "ahck!" maybe just move it up 1 pixel or down 1 pixel? or add something below it to make this optical illusion go away.
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pixelblink Commander Joined: 19 February 2023 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2865	Posted: 20 July 2005 at 4:42pm
	I completey agree with everyones comments so far. Also, this is a bathroom... shouldn't there be a toilet and sink? Also, if you're going to have a bathoom with a big screen tv, why not have a luxurious bathtub... a jacuzzi would be the shizznizzle yo
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Garage Inc. Commander Joined: 20 October 2021 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 318	Posted: 20 July 2005 at 9:41pm
	Also, why is he/she, just standing there, even if you don't animate it, it should look like the person is doing something, like putting on the slippers or looking through the cabinet or something. For a first piece, great, but it could still use some work.
	For every second spent wondering if you can do something, you could spend 2 seconds doing it.
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Monstara Commander Joined: 01 July 2005 Location: Bulgaria Online Status: Offline Posts: 179	Posted: 21 July 2005 at 6:35am
	Certainly make the screen flicker. Always works effectively :D
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Shann Seaman Joined: 15 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 6	Posted: 21 July 2005 at 8:54am
	*Originally posted by Saiklor* there's a funny visual thing going on with the shelf on the lefthand wall, it lines up precisely with the line of the floor and it makes my brain go "ahck!" maybe just move it up 1 pixel or down 1 pixel? or add something below it to make this optical illusion go away. oh i didnt realise it until u mentioned, thanks!
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Shann Seaman Joined: 15 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 6	Posted: 21 July 2005 at 9:02am
	*Originally posted by pixelblink* I completey agree with everyones comments so far. Also, this is a bathroom... shouldn't there be a toilet and sink? Also, if you're going to have a bathoom with a big screen tv, why not have a luxurious bathtub... a jacuzzi would be the shizznizzle yo yes thought of doing it as a jacuzzi actually, guess i have to work harder on it rather then just a tub... Why isnt there a toilet and sink? well.. my initial idea was that the bathtub/jacuzzi will actually replace the sofa in the room... so i didnt think there is a need for those. i think i need to do some major work to this, i'll think abt it or mebbe i can have another version of it with the toilet n sink. we'll see.... thanks!
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Shann Seaman Joined: 15 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 6	Posted: 21 July 2005 at 9:05am
	*Originally posted by Garage Inc.* Also, why is he/she, just standing there, even if you don't animate it, it should look like the person is doing something, like putting on the slippers or looking through the cabinet or something. For a first piece, great, but it could still use some work. Oh yes! I think i completely miss this point! Thanks for pointing out!
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Shann Seaman Joined: 15 July 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 6	Posted: 21 July 2005 at 9:07am
	*Originally posted by Monstara* Certainly make the screen flicker. Always works effectively :D Flicker? those noise/static effect? great idea thanks guys!
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spymp3 Midshipman BANNED Joined: 02 June 2005 Location: Netherlands Online Status: Offline Posts: 81	Posted: 21 July 2005 at 4:06pm
	perfect for you first time!realy
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Monstara Commander Joined: 01 July 2005 Location: Bulgaria Online Status: Offline Posts: 179	Posted: 22 July 2005 at 1:00am
	yeah, I meant static. But if you like you can put in porn lol
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