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   Here is a piece I just started working on recently and with that I need some good ol C&C from you folks. Its been awhile since I was last here so do be gentle.

Edited by Solid Pixel - 08 December 2007 at 3:53am

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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Topic: WIP- The timid drawing (finished) Posted: 18 November 2007 at 4:53am
	Here is a piece I just started working on recently and with that I need some good ol C&C from you folks. Its been awhile since I was last here so do be gentle. Edited by Solid Pixel - 08 December 2007 at 3:53am
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Mahonri Seaman Joined: 08 November 2007 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 24	Posted: 18 November 2007 at 6:50am
	Looks great so far. The one big thing that stands out to mee is the way her left arm is contorted behind her back. With a pose like that I think it would be more natural to have her leaning on that arm with her left hand on the ground. Otherwise I think it's looking pretty good.
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MashPotato Commander Joined: 05 February 2007 Online Status: Offline Posts: 237	Posted: 18 November 2007 at 10:41am
	Looks quite nice I agree about her left arm, and her right arms seems a bit long and curved to me.
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herbert_west Seaman Joined: 11 November 2007 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 31	Posted: 18 November 2007 at 8:01pm
	Very nice. Cute girl. Don't know if you want to do this (just a suggestion) but to me a more shy pose would be if she were hugging her knees (kind of more withdrawn). If not that, maybe bring her arms in front, folded. Of course, I'm thinking shy. If you're thinking sexy shy, you're pose is good. I'm no expert in anatomy, so I'll leave the comments on arm length and position to the rest. Looking forward to and update...
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 19 November 2007 at 1:18am
	*Originally posted by Mahonri* The one big thing that stands out to mee is the way her left arm is contorted behind her back. With a pose like that I think it would be more natural to have her leaning on that arm with her left hand on the ground. Edited: I shortened her right arm and repositioned her left. That better? *Originally posted by Mahonri* Don't know if you want to do this (just a suggestion) but to me a more shy pose would be if she were hugging her knees (kind of more withdrawn). If not that, maybe bring her arms in front, folded. I like the idea but I think I'll stick to my formula. The reason why; the sooner I finish this the better. Edited by Solid Pixel - 19 November 2007 at 4:51am
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Sabata Commander Joined: 08 July 2007 Online Status: Offline Posts: 128	Posted: 19 November 2007 at 3:15am
	Well I guess that you are looking for comments on anatomy and overall looking of this piece, and the only thing I can say that it looks very promising. I really like the way you did her dress.
	We fall to rise again.
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Metaru Commander Joined: 03 February 2020 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3305	Posted: 19 November 2007 at 11:01am
	however, isn't truly accurate. if you have used a reference, please provide as i couldn't find a good one. i want to remark the good use of colors you've used in your lineart.
	I ate leel's babies
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 20 November 2007 at 1:12am
	Update: *Originally posted by Metaru* however, isn't truly accurate. if you have used a reference, please provide as i couldn't find a good one. Well, for the hands and arms I was the reference, don't know if that helps... eh. For the body stance I had a shopping catalog nearby which had models in various positions. *Originally posted by Sabata* Well I guess that you are looking for comments on anatomy and overall looking of this piece. Thats the idea. :) Edited by Solid Pixel - 20 November 2007 at 4:17am
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Setzer Commander Joined: 18 December 2016 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 780	Posted: 20 November 2007 at 5:46am
	just a quick palette edit, you had brought the skin tones into blues for the shadows but everythign else was staying in its stubborn ramps, thought that looked weird. I'd probably make the skin's shadows slightly warmer too.

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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 20 November 2007 at 6:13am
	I was eventually gonna color swap the gown, but since your palette won me over I'll stick with yours. The skin on the otherhand will be slightly modified to fit the shadows blue tone. Edited by Solid Pixel - 20 November 2007 at 6:29am
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Metaru Commander Joined: 03 February 2020 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3305	Posted: 20 November 2007 at 9:50am
	oh i forgot, that left arm(her left) couldn't show that curve, or else she wouldn't have bones.
	I ate leel's babies
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Omegavolt Commander Joined: 03 March 2005 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 227	Posted: 21 November 2007 at 11:51am
	Her right thigh looks a bit awkward. It looks too short and has a lump in the middle. The fix for this really depends on the pose you're shooting for. If the thighs are supposed to extend together, then the left thigh should be more visible and the knees should end up side by side. But if the right thigh is slightly draped over the left, then it should be longer and smoother, which will result in her right foot being pulled back toward her buttocks, so not as much of it will be shown.
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 22 November 2007 at 12:49am
	Fixed some anatomy issues with the body, bulked up the jaw, lengthened her body, and completly erased the left foot. Still need to address afew other issues however, like for instance; the jaw and her right arm. On a side note; is it just me or does she not look that shy anymore? Maybe I'll lower her head or something. Edited by Solid Pixel - 22 November 2007 at 4:29am
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Squirrelsquid Commander Joined: 18 July 2023 Online Status: Offline Posts: 259	Posted: 22 November 2007 at 1:15am
	hmmm... I don't know about the new face... like you mentioned, she doesn't look shy anymore... the new shading is great, but compared to the other version, I think that her new face, or better said her Head-shape looks odd.
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surt Commander Joined: 30 December 2015 Online Status: Offline Posts: 413	Posted: 22 November 2007 at 1:30am
	Squid's right there. The eyes, I think, are the main thing. The down-turned eyes lent a fitting sadness to the piece.
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skamocore Admiral Joined: 07 April 2021 Online Status: Offline Posts: 3866	Posted: 22 November 2007 at 1:53am
	yeah she kind of looks more affronted now...definitely the eyes...in fact I think she looked the most shy when her eyes were looking the other way. Perhaps because now it looks like she's looking more towards the 'camera', but before it seemed she was...well...shying away from it
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 22 November 2007 at 1:53am
	Alright. I'll try lowering her eyelids again, but in the meantime I have here a quick/sloppy update toward Squirrelsquids 'head-shape issue'. How does it look now? Any better? Edited by Solid Pixel - 22 November 2007 at 2:05am
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Squirrelsquid Commander Joined: 18 July 2023 Online Status: Offline Posts: 259	Posted: 22 November 2007 at 2:03am
	better, but still the expression could be more shy ;) did an edit to illustrate it:
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 23 November 2007 at 6:25am
	Small update; I've desided to ditch the current palette for a more limited one. Yeah it looks odd being that everything is but one color. I just all of a sudden got an urge to do a different style. Don't ask why. :) *Originally posted by Squirrelsquid* better, but still the expression could be more shy ;) So obvious! The eyebrows.. Stupid me, I'd had totally forgotten about raising them, instead I just ended up making'em more bushy.. er. Edited by Solid Pixel - 03 December 2007 at 2:57am
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cthulhu Seaman Joined: 11 November 2007 Online Status: Offline Posts: 28	Posted: 23 November 2007 at 10:05pm
	How can she be shy now that she's in the dark and doesn't know she's being watched with nightvision goggles? (and you know those can see through clothes; nudge, nudge, wink, wink). Seriously, this is looking good.
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 24 November 2007 at 3:21am
	Another minor (but making progress) update: Edited by Solid Pixel - 26 November 2007 at 4:00am
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Monkey 'o Doom Commander Joined: 24 September 2005 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2994	Posted: 24 November 2007 at 7:23am
	I think her right leg looks pretty good (aside from the lump that Omegavolt mentioned), but her left one seems to be having problems; it looks like it ends in a stub, squashed between her other knee and the ground, rather than going back behind the other one. I can't seem to do this pose, IRL, getting my legs in the positions they are in your picture.
	RPG is numberwang.
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 27 November 2007 at 5:48am
	Update: Notable changes that I have made are too obvious so I won't go an point them out for ya. Any better/worse? C&C always welcome. *Originally posted by Monkey 'o Doom* I can't seem to do this pose, IRL, getting my legs in the positions they are in your picture. Your right. I tried doing it yesterday and I hurt my kneecaps forcing myself into position, and I just gotta say; she'd be in a great deal of pain sitting their like that. Edited by Solid Pixel - 28 November 2007 at 2:27am
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Elwin Commander Joined: 29 October 2007 Online Status: Offline Posts: 172	Posted: 27 November 2007 at 6:07am
	Hmm I don't like the palette much... Liked the old colors better ^^ But it's fantastic anyway.
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Skaka Commander Joined: 31 October 2007 Online Status: Offline Posts: 183	Posted: 27 November 2007 at 1:21pm
	I like her better with her hand on her leg, looks more 'shy'. As for her face she looks like she just spied a turd on the floor or something, I'd make her tilt her head down and be kinda staring at the floor right next to her, kinda more withdrawn. That's how the girl who lives in my basement is like XD
	Ars longa, vita brevis.
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 29 November 2007 at 10:54pm
	Update. I'm finaly getting somewhere with this, hopefully finished. EDIT: Still need to adjust her left leg.. *Originally posted by Elwin* Hmm I don't like the palette much... You prefer the hideous Night Vision Goggles colour scheme? *Originally posted by Skaka* As for her face she looks like she just spied a turd on the floor or something, As long as this piece portrays a shy person I don't mind if she was. :) Edited by Solid Pixel - 29 November 2007 at 11:40pm
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Elwin Commander Joined: 29 October 2007 Online Status: Offline Posts: 172	Posted: 29 November 2007 at 11:32pm
	Hmm original. ^^ It's still one of the most fantastic pieces I've seen though ^^;
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Hatch Admiral Joined: 05 August 2015 Online Status: Offline Posts: 1387	Posted: 29 November 2007 at 11:35pm
	The paper seems a bit weird to me unless you're going to make her more sketch-like. Speaking of which, we should see the baselines through her, no? Also, are you planning on getting rid of that black outline? I really like the palette, but I think it looks dreadful with the outline.
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 29 November 2007 at 11:49pm
	*Originally posted by Hatch* The paper seems a bit weird to me unless you're going to make her more sketch-like. Speaking of which, we should see the baselines through her, no? No your right, but its still pixel art so I'm gonna refrain from doing that. The paper is just a template. I'm not going for a realistic approach. *Originally posted by Hatch* Also, are you planning on getting rid of that black outline? Nah, I'm not keeping it. Edited by Solid Pixel - 30 November 2007 at 1:20am
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Skaka Commander Joined: 31 October 2007 Online Status: Offline Posts: 183	Posted: 30 November 2007 at 12:13am
	Hah what I mean was she looks more shocked than shy :P
	Ars longa, vita brevis.
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MurrMan Commander Joined: 19 January 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 177	Posted: 01 December 2007 at 6:24pm
	widen her right arm at the bottom near the elbow, looking nice...
	I have plenty of emotions; It is Sleep that i lack
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 03 December 2007 at 2:44am
	Update. This time around I made her a bit nerdy, and gave her a plush doll. Seriously though I have to quit adding stuff to this or it will never get finished. :) *Originally posted by MurrMan* widen her right arm at the bottom near the elbow I figured someone would mention it sooner or later. I'll fix it next time I update. So is there anything else thats out of place? Criticism is always welcome. Edited by Solid Pixel - 03 December 2007 at 5:04am
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GeorgiePie Midshipman Joined: 07 November 2007 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 89	Posted: 03 December 2007 at 7:55am
	Looking great, I don't think I'll do any major CC at this point. Her expression is great btw. I have one lil CC. The pencil on the right, some of the colors are off (I think they are) I understand how your dark outlining out the far outlines, but on the pencil some of the inner lines don't have the same colors as the other pencil.
	Dane Cook once said "There was a car accident on the highway, and you know what, everyone came out of their houses without shoes. F**k shoes."
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Solid Pixel Midshipman Joined: 31 January 2006 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 59	Posted: 04 December 2007 at 9:35pm
	Update: *Originally posted by GeorgiePie* I have one lil CC. The pencil on the right, some of the colors are off I was not finished shading the lines at that time, sadly I forgot to mention it. However I did finish the pencil details earlier today. Anything else I missed? Edited by Solid Pixel - 05 December 2007 at 1:41am
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greenraven Commander Joined: 08 September 2016 Online Status: Offline Posts: 2598	Posted: 05 December 2007 at 12:34am
	That looks pretty good.
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