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Larwick
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I've always been interested in manga and all that, and have piles of sketches, drawings and failed attempts and digitally colouring them about my bedroom. I stumbled upon an old box and found some drawings of a character i had created years ago. Most of them were pretty shabby, but some were quite cool. So yeah, i felt like a change, so i thought about pixelling her. Her name is 'Brass' for some reason, i think because she was the rival of some other character called Silver.. or something. Anyway, enough of my life story, here's the pixel art: |
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leel
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wow i like it! don't know about the hair, but the face looks great, so hurry up and update!
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Larwick
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Yeah i might change the hair at a later stage. Also, the shoulders, neck and hand are bothering me, but i'm sure i'll get onto fixing them soon. |
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ChromeX
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Yeah, it's nice... I'd like to see how it would look when colored. Also, the eyebrow goes over the hair... is that how it was supposed to be made?
(This was written before the above post was posted... lol) Edited by ChromeX |
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Larwick
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Cheers, i edited the eyebrow slightly. And here it is with a rough pallette: (I got it wrong, theres 15 colours at the moment...) I think i should sort out her neck... what do you think? Does it look ok? Aaaaah! Edited by Larwick |
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Monkey 'o Doom
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Both the tattoo and the eyelashes seem to make it look weird. The lip shade is too similar to the skin shade. Try looking in a mirror or something. I love the hair and general face shape though.
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jalonso
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I think the "logo" tattoo looks vain and self indulgent. I would make
her ponytail (or something else) the shape of the logo so that its
there in a clever "er" way.
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PixelSnader
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or just embroidery on the clothes
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Larwick
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You mean i'm vain and self indulgent or the character is? Cus we both kindof are... Lol, that's an interesting idea jalonso, i hadn't thought of that. Although the character before had a circle on her cheek, you think that would look ok? Or i could just leave it bare i suppose, it's a tad boring though ^_^ Update: In the most detailed drawing she's wearing this jacket, i'd show you if i could (my scanner's broken) but yeah, i have to add a load of detail to it, and its gunna be hard (but FUN). I know her head is quite large, i'll just say it's a style (well, it is really). Edited by Larwick |
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fil_razorback
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Can I have a rendez-vous with her? :D
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alkaline
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Big head mode!
I think her neck color is a bit too green, but other than that it's coming out okay. |
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Larwick
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Argh, my mate always turned that on when we used to play goldeneye, sooo annoying! There's something wrong with her finger i cant quite pinpoint.. |
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Shark
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the light source on the hair seems to be from the top, but on the
jacket it seems to come from the left. great start, its cool to see how other artists work. |
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Snark, we love yuu.
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Pixel_Outlaw
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her fingers are not connected properly,there should be more connected at the base of the hand. She's kinda of umm cute....I think I'm in love with a fictional character.....I LIKE BRUNETTS.
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jalonso
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Very nice, I like the ponytail "logo" this way better. As for the
lightsource I would experiment with several, in diff colors to add drama/movement to her situtation. I have no doubt this will turn out great since you always manage to in the end. ps. By vanity I meant you not her. Sometimes you sign in a distracting manner that takes away from the piece (the cave, for example). |
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Larwick
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Cheers guys. I forgot to add the upper lightsource to the shoulders etc, silly me. Also, i took away the kink in the shadow on her face, i thought it made her look weird. Might have to check out more reference to get it right. Update:
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Shark
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the ponytail that wraps round looks like part of the jacket collar. it
looks to solid aswell not like hair. is your aim to get every male and or lesbians on this site to fall in love with your character? ![]() |
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Snark, we love yuu.
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leel
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i dont think you should make her lips pink.. either define them more or get rid of the pink altogether - it looks kinda smeared right now, i think getting rid of the pink would make it cleaner/more manga-like..but thats just me.. and yeah, she's pretty hot |
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Larwick
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Lol yeah, i'll mess up the hair a little more in that area, thanks for pointing it out Shark. And leel, you're probably right, now that i look back i think i preffered her without the pink. The reason i didnt make it more clear was because she sort of looked like a whore then. Eheh. And cheers for the compliments, i'm sure if she was real she'd be flattered. But she isn't so... PWNED! er.. I think i've finished the updating for today, i'll continue tomorow though. |
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Monkey 'o Doom
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What's the little red thing?
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Bryan24
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The little red thing is the liquid in the glass Idiot!
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Revive the bannana thread,
and keep the pomegrantate thread! P.S.The bannana thread is supposed to not make sense. P.S.S.or dollars |
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Larwick
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I have just noticed quite a few anatomical problems (apart from the large head, i mean). They will be fixed in the next update (hopefully).
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Monkey 'o Doom
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Oh! I never noticed the glass! I feel so stupid now!
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jalonso
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Well the glass is sitting akwardly in the hand and without some diff
coloration it does blend in. Maybe the base of the glass should show a
little.
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Larwick
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Yes! I will have to tint it latar. And woah, 'snap' - jalonso with the post. I agree it would be best to have it show, being a short glass rather than having it concealed and leaving to the imagination that the stand for it is very small. Edited by Larwick |
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Bifur
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I think the glass if fine , but some highlight would make it more consistent,
the haird is awesome ( even tho it has a different highligt i dont know if it was intentional |
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Pixel_Outlaw
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Her fingers are either too long or they sepearte at the base of the hand too soon. |
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inkspot
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Gass is lacking material, tint it and shade it properly.
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PixelSnader
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-i think the left arm's shading makes it appear to much as separate balls, rather -then one arm. |
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Larwick
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Yarr i think i'm going to redo the hand and glass, i messed up too much in the lineart. Cheers peeps. |
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Aleiav
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I love the skin colors. :) Excellent work. :)
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Larwick
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Ooh cheers Aleiav, although i sort of changed them when i edited the pallette... do you think i should change the skin colour back? Or any of them in fact? I thought i'd post it now because i wanted to know what you guys thought of the hand and mug aswel. Thanks for your time, in advance. |
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Bifur
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ffingers are still bit long aren they? and the space between the 90°angle finger (yeah i dont remember the name) and the other fingers are a tad bigger then normal
at least i think , as everbody know im no genius in anatomy Edited by Bifur |
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Setzer
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thumb you mean? the hand does seem long, it's coming lovely :)
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Larwick
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Oh yes, i see now. I pushed the hand forward forgetting about the thumb. Thanks alot for pointing it out guys.
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jalonso
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The hand looks weird, almost masculine. Maybe a ref photo is needed.
The colors are awesome. Perhaps your *wick* logo could be an
earring?
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Larwick
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Lol, i used a ref photo... it was my own hand >.< so yeah, i'll need to search google or something. I really rushed that hand sketch though, i'll update soon. And the earring idea sounds good, although im not so sure, i'll give it a go and see.
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Larwick
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fil_razorback
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So cuuuuuuute ^^
Awesome, as usual :) |
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alkaline
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Thumb looks sorta detached from the hand. And I think one shade darker on the pupil would help?
uhhhhhhh and teh bottom outline on the glass is too dark from heavy AA probably. Keep it up dawg! |
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Aleiav
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still love the skin colors. :)
I agree with what alk said about the thumb. I think it would be cool to make her glass all shiny gold! :P |
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Skull
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I think it's wonderful work. It's got a great style.
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PixelInk
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Its pieces like this that make me come back to PixelJoint, I love the
tones, the individual shapes and the progression of the edge lines that
consistently suit the depth at every stage.
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Morgan
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This is really lovely. My only critique would be the shading on the hair... the lightest part seems to get wider as you go from the side to the top of the head, and it seems to that it would do the opposite.
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Tremulant
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This is a fantastic piece, Lar. The thumb detachedness thing is all that bother me at this point. Lovely, lovely.
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iSTVAN
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Her pose looks pretty awkward to me. For someone with such a despondent expression you'd think she'd choose a less strainful way to sit.
I think the problem begins with the far shoulder- or lack of far shoulder! By pushing the shoulder out you'd correct both this awkwardness and her oversized head. It'd also mean you wouldn't have to worry about all those annoying jaggies on her (HER) right arm.
You've got the skills to make this look really ace, and, in my opinion, your brilliant colouring has shone light on an otherwise dull piece of line art. Edited by iSTVAN - 24 July 2006 at 6:45pm |
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Listen to what the flower people say...
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Larwick
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Osht. With a darkening of the pupils (thanks alk) and a lowering of the mouth i hath created...
![]() A much more pouty one and yet a character with much more personality. Huzzah. I also think it's more anatomically correct. I also had a go at bringing the shoulder in a little, which does look better (thanks iST) and fixed the thumb a little (thanks everyone) and cleaned up a few more n00by lines (still more to go). Ive also used an orange from the gold colour to highlight the hair a tad more. The current hair highlights were very drafty so i'll deff have to fix them (thanks Morgan). Still lots more to do though. Cheers to everyone for your comments! |
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iSTVAN
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Nice update, but keep on pushing that shoulder out, and make sure to bring the breast with it! Alternatively you could bring the closer shoulder down a bit, either way, I still think there are some perspective issuses. I'd recommend photographing someone in the position and compare it to your work. If I have time I'll have a go at taking a photo for you.
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Listen to what the flower people say...
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Larwick
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Cheers iSTVAN. A photo would be great, if you can, because i can't due to technical difficulties, and i couldnt find a good enough reference on googell.
I did bring out her 'chest' a little, although it was pretty much guesswork. I'll keep on fiddling with her shoulders and see what i can do. I agree i really should have worked on the lineart a bit more before i started colouring, seems i was a bit hasty (everyday i keep noticing how wrong the neck seems). But yeah, i shall keep at it. Wh00t. Edited by Larwick - 25 July 2006 at 4:37pm |
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Shark
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FINISH!
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Snark, we love yuu.
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