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Quote maloART Replybullet Topic: Valentine Sâhib 1842
    Posted: 23 June 2006 at 7:32am

I've made this little animation according to this story (translated from French) :

Valentine Sâhib is Indian by her blood. She was born on February 8, 1805 in the principality from Mysore. Her mother and her three sisters were murdered during an insurection by British officers. According to her memories, her father was one of the rare survivors. Kidnapped by the British army, she was sold at a house of joy of Southampton where she nourishes her feelings of revenge. For a few years, she has regularly received mysterious gifts coming from an unknown captain. Ingres Paintings, Gramophone and an amazing mobile lamp using static electricity. She secretly thinks that all these gifts could come from her father who would be Nemo.

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Valentine Sâhib est de sang indien. Elle est née le 8 février 1805 dans la principauté du Mysore. Sa mère et ses trois soeurs furent massacrées lors d'une insurection par des officers britannique. D'après ses souvenirs, son père fut un des rares survivants à ce meutre. Kidnappée par l'armée britannique, elle fut vendue à une maison de joie de Southampton où elle nourrit ses sentiments de vengeance. Depuis quelques années, elle reçoit régulièrement des cadeaux étranges venant d'un capitaine inconnu. Tableau d'Ingres, Gramophone et une lampe mobile à éléctricité statique pour le moins surprenantes. Elle songe que tous ces cadeaux pourraient venir de son père qui serait le capitaine Némo de la légende.


It's a 165x185 animated gif with 8 frames using a constant palette of 30 unique colors.

The thing is ... I don't really like the result, I spent quite a long time on it. It looks a bit too amateur. I don't know how I may improve it. I need some feedbacks and comments ...

-> Using alkaline url instead of deviantART ...

 



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Quote CDI Replybullet Posted: 23 June 2006 at 9:14am
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Quote alkaline Replybullet Posted: 23 June 2006 at 10:07am
Deviant art doesn't let you do that. Here.


Looks pretty good. What's the circle thingy at the top? A lamp? I can't really tell what it is unless you told me, which you did.
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Quote maloART Replybullet Posted: 23 June 2006 at 11:48am

Originally posted by alkaline

Deviant art doesn't let you do that. Here.

Looks pretty good. What's the circle thingy at the top? A lamp? I can't really tell what it is unless you told me, which you did.

alkaline, it was supposed to be an artefact sent by Nemo. It's a eletro-static lamp that produces light when you make it spin. It is quite avantgardist for the century, but it looks weird.

Sorry to be a so bad pixelartist ...

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Quote CDI Replybullet Posted: 23 June 2006 at 11:51am
I love it man! The light reflections are exelent! I wished the girl had a breathing animation though
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Quote Skull Replybullet Posted: 23 June 2006 at 12:16pm
Originally posted by maloART

Sorry to be a so bad pixelartist ...


Don't be silly - just know one is really familiar with an eletro-static lamp..
Very nice so far.. the light has a strong effect on this and looks great.. good style.  
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Quote maloART Replybullet Posted: 26 June 2006 at 8:16am

Originally posted by CDI

I love it man! The light reflections are exelent! I wished the girl had a breathing animation though

I updated the animation ... I made her breathe (well I tried at least), I changed the light effect and I also tried to make her turn her head.

Pixel art -> http://www.pixeljoint.com/pixelart/12475.htm

 

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Quote Skull Replybullet Posted: 26 June 2006 at 9:02am
The breathing is good.. perhaps slow that down just a bit. 
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Quote dogvetusa Replybullet Posted: 26 June 2006 at 9:49am
instead of moving the stomach, you should move the breasts up a bit
with the breaths.
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Quote Morgan Replybullet Posted: 26 June 2006 at 11:09am

This is really neat -- where is the text from?

Originally posted by dogvetusa

instead of moving the stomach, you should move the breasts up a bit
with the breaths.

The whole torso, really -- up/out and down/in.

The head turn is reading as... creepy, somehow. Maybe because she turns her head so far without moving her shoulders at all. It may also be because she opens her eyes first -- it's common to close your eyes at least partially when you turn your head quickly. You might try leaving them closed until she completes the turn.

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Quote Aleiav Replybullet Posted: 26 June 2006 at 11:32am
The skin pallate is a little odd. Looks more red than tannish.
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Quote halfDemon Replybullet Posted: 26 June 2006 at 12:09pm
I would try to make the strap on her leg look less painted on. Also, the entire chest cavity moves up and out when breathing, not just the stomach.
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Quote maloART Replybullet Posted: 26 June 2006 at 1:17pm

Well, thank you for all your critics and comments. I'm learning a lot doing this kind of short animations. I think I was a bit too enthousiast starting this one as it's quite complex ... It showed me how hard it is drawing human body and mouvement. I'll not update this animation for now and try something else.

 

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