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maloART
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Joined: 09 June 2006 Location: France Online Status: Offline Posts: 49 |
![]() Topic: Valentine Sâhib 1842Posted: 23 June 2006 at 7:32am |
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I've made this little animation according to this story (translated from French) :
The thing is ... I don't really like the result, I spent quite a long time on it. It looks a bit too amateur. I don't know how I may improve it. I need some feedbacks and comments ... -> Using alkaline url instead of deviantART ...
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CDI
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![]() Posted: 23 June 2006 at 9:14am |
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alkaline
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![]() Posted: 23 June 2006 at 10:07am |
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Deviant art doesn't let you do that. Here.
![]() Looks pretty good. What's the circle thingy at the top? A lamp? I can't really tell what it is unless you told me, which you did. |
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maloART
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Joined: 09 June 2006 Location: France Online Status: Offline Posts: 49 |
![]() Posted: 23 June 2006 at 11:48am |
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Originally posted by alkaline
Deviant art doesn't let you do that. Here. Looks pretty good. What's the circle thingy at the top? A lamp? I can't really tell what it is unless you told me, which you did. alkaline, it was supposed to be an artefact sent by Nemo. It's a eletro-static lamp that produces light when you make it spin. It is quite avantgardist for the century, but it looks weird. Sorry to be a so bad pixelartist ... |
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CDI
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![]() Posted: 23 June 2006 at 11:51am |
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I love it man! The light reflections are exelent! I wished the girl had a breathing animation though
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Skull
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![]() Posted: 23 June 2006 at 12:16pm |
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Originally posted by maloART Sorry to be a so bad pixelartist ... Don't be silly - just know one is really familiar with an eletro-static lamp.. Very nice so far.. the light has a strong effect on this and looks great.. good style. |
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maloART
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Joined: 09 June 2006 Location: France Online Status: Offline Posts: 49 |
![]() Posted: 26 June 2006 at 8:16am |
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Originally posted by CDI
I love it man! The light reflections are exelent! I wished the girl had a breathing animation though I updated the animation ... I made her breathe (well I tried at least), I changed the light effect and I also tried to make her turn her head.
Pixel art -> http://www.pixeljoint.com/pixelart/12475.htm
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Skull
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![]() Posted: 26 June 2006 at 9:02am |
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The breathing is good.. perhaps slow that down just a bit.
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dogvetusa
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Joined: 10 April 2005 Location: United States Online Status: Offline Posts: 6 |
![]() Posted: 26 June 2006 at 9:49am |
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instead of moving the stomach, you should move the breasts up a bit
with the breaths. |
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Morgan
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Joined: 25 June 2006 Online Status: Offline Posts: 94 |
![]() Posted: 26 June 2006 at 11:09am |
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This is really neat -- where is the text from?
Originally posted by dogvetusa
instead of moving the stomach, you should move the breasts up a bit with the breaths. The whole torso, really -- up/out and down/in. The head turn is reading as... creepy, somehow. Maybe because she turns her head so far without moving her shoulders at all. It may also be because she opens her eyes first -- it's common to close your eyes at least partially when you turn your head quickly. You might try leaving them closed until she completes the turn. |
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Aleiav
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![]() Posted: 26 June 2006 at 11:32am |
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The skin pallate is a little odd. Looks more red than tannish.
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halfDemon
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![]() Posted: 26 June 2006 at 12:09pm |
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I would try to make the strap on her leg look less painted on. Also, the entire chest cavity moves up and out when breathing, not just the stomach.
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Every pixel counts, even the dead ones.
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maloART
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Joined: 09 June 2006 Location: France Online Status: Offline Posts: 49 |
![]() Posted: 26 June 2006 at 1:17pm |
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Well, thank you for all your critics and comments. I'm learning a lot doing this kind of short animations. I think I was a bit too enthousiast starting this one as it's quite complex ... It showed me how hard it is drawing human body and mouvement. I'll not update this animation for now and try something else.
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