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    Posted: 23 February 2009 at 6:30pm

i know very weak. im no good at funny
 
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Quote RollerKingdom Replybullet Posted: 23 February 2009 at 6:33pm
I like the characters and the their shadin :P but what is that white outline where the word
BAM is.?
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Quote Riboflavin Replybullet Posted: 23 February 2009 at 6:36pm
I love the main character, so no nitpicks there, but, like RollerKingdom mentioned, the shape in the first frame looks quite phallic... and I have no idea what it's supposed to be.  I don't fully understand what happens after "BAM"
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Quote cure Replybullet Posted: 23 February 2009 at 9:45pm
edges on the lamp are much too soft, banding on the word "BAM" needs to go.  Not sure why the second character has lines across his face.
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Quote TMH Replybullet Posted: 24 February 2009 at 4:14am
his head is stuck in the water thing
@ ribo
the guy gets his head stuck in the watter thing



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Quote cure Replybullet Posted: 24 February 2009 at 5:22pm
Well without seeing it in a previous panel it's a bit odd.  If it's a watercooler, then it should be more of a cylinder.
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Quote TMH Replybullet Posted: 24 February 2009 at 5:29pm
yea... i might put him lookin up into it :S ?!?
edit i changed it to what no cure said


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Quote cure Replybullet Posted: 24 February 2009 at 6:45pm
I still think that's an oddly spherical watercooler.
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Quote Riboflavin Replybullet Posted: 24 February 2009 at 8:41pm
Yeah, I agree with ThereIsNoCure; the watercooler should be more rectangular.  Also, when I think of a watercooler sucking up someone's head, I think of more of a "phump"/suction-y sound, not "bam"
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Quote TMH Replybullet Posted: 25 February 2009 at 4:18am
ye, isee yur guys point.
i can make it happen ;P
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Quote Platnium Replybullet Posted: 25 February 2009 at 11:23am
At first I didn't know what it said, took me about 5-10 secs to figure it out, try making it more readable.
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Quote Evilagram Replybullet Posted: 25 February 2009 at 6:10pm
The bam was easily readable. I only knew it was a, "thunk", out of intuition, then carefully deciphering the letters.
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Quote TMH Replybullet Posted: 26 February 2009 at 4:16am
yea ill change that
edit: i got rid of the wird lines in the letters and i dunno do you think it should be bigger or what?


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Quote E-Bomb Replybullet Posted: 26 February 2009 at 1:49pm
It's very hard to tell that it's a W, I had to zoom in to see what it was.
And probably you should make a background.
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Quote cure Replybullet Posted: 26 February 2009 at 3:15pm
Just take out that green outline
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Quote TMH Replybullet Posted: 26 February 2009 at 3:24pm
i didnt but a bg because it would take atention away from the comic.
i will fix the words
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