Computer Moniter
Printed From: Pixel Joint
Category: Pixel Art
Forum Name: WIP (Work In Progress)
Forum Discription: Get crits and comments on your pixel WIPs and other art too!
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Printed Date: 23 February 2026 at 11:36pm
Topic: Computer Moniter
Posted By: CommanderD97
Subject: Computer Moniter
Date Posted: 07 July 2009 at 7:01pm
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I don't understand why this didn't get in:  Does it need work?
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Posted By: Artisan
Date Posted: 07 July 2009 at 7:09pm
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yes it does.
while it is pixel art it is not of quality. while it does not need to be amazingly good you need to put in effort to make your work nice. What can you do? draw the moniter from a better angle. why a green screen? put something on the screen? a better depiction of shapes. a detailed background or transparancy. a good use of colour. some sense of DEPTH ... good luck ;) ------------- I like shiny things, i do indeed. |
Posted By: Hatch
Date Posted: 07 July 2009 at 7:30pm
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Think about the shapes and levels of depth your monitor. The way you've shaded it makes it look like it's all on one plane. You seem especially confused about the stand--every stand I've seen is somewhat behind the screen. Also, the screen itself--the green part--looks like it's slightly ABOVE the case because there's a strong highlight where there should be a shadow. think about it--light from the top left, the case is slightly raised from the screen... it'd be casting a shadow onto the screen. Think about your colors. Straight grays tend to be dull--inject just a little color and your picture will come to life. Also, not every color color has to be nuclear cartoon saturated. here's a quick edit illustrating these points + some general sprucing up. let me know if any of this is unclear or if you're not sure why I did this or that. -> [EDIT] Just read the comments for this piece in the gallery. asukicco's comment was uncalled-for and rude. don't get discouraged  ------------- |
Posted By: CommanderD97
Date Posted: 08 July 2009 at 8:34am
thanks, but I'm not going for the super realistic look. I just wanted a cartoony monitor. 
I'll work on it and post something else in a little while.
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Posted By: Hatch
Date Posted: 08 July 2009 at 9:18am
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Making something "cartoony" is a matter of careful exaggeration and de-emphasis of various elements. It's not something that happens by accident or by simply misunderstanding the forms of your subject. The way you've shaded many parts of the monitor makes no sense. It doesn't mean you're a bad person or a bad artist, but it does mean you have to fix it if you're serious about improving. ------------- |
Posted By: CommanderD97
Date Posted: 08 July 2009 at 10:04am
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Alright, update: 
Hacth: I didn't quite understand what you said about the shading coming onto the screen...
Artisan: I put something on the screen, now.
EDIT: I just realized that screens aren't at the same level of the moniter itself...So I'll work on that.
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Posted By: CommanderD97
Date Posted: 08 July 2009 at 11:21am
ANOTHER UPDATE:
this might be the last...
 anything wrong with it?
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Posted By: The Mozack
Date Posted: 08 July 2009 at 11:37am
| Would it be possible to use lighter colours for the text, or use a darker colour for the screen and white text instead? Black makes the words stick out like a sore thumb, especially with the latest one, when it takes up way too much space on the screen |
Posted By: CommanderD97
Date Posted: 08 July 2009 at 11:52am
| alright...I'll try something else. |
Posted By: cure
Date Posted: 08 July 2009 at 11:52am
| i still wouldn't let this in. you haven't changed any of the underlying flaws. it has to be scrapped. start fresh. get a better angle, rather than head-on. don't use garish colors. put something interesting on the screen. that font looks pretty rough, ruins anything the piece would have had going for it |
Posted By: CommanderD97
Date Posted: 08 July 2009 at 2:11pm
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okay, now you guys are just being mean.
PS:
I'll start working on something else.
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Posted By: cure
Date Posted: 08 July 2009 at 3:01pm
| this topic is therefore closed. |